WooHoo!! Go Heero! I was so happy when he quit his job. I know what it's like to have an unreasonable, tyrannical man who expects you to do the work of five people. I can only imagine his anxiety now, however. I loved the scene in the bar, by the way, when Heero was thinking that most people stress about having a wife to support, but he has a horse. That had me laughing for a long time^^

Duo also seems like he can desperately use some help. Reading the passage that described everything he had to do during the day was starting to give *me* anxiety, lol. I look forward to reading about Duo taking care of a sloshed Heero~ I just hope he doens't say or do anything stupid, haha. Great chapter, looking forward to more^_^
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Ah~ What an awesome chapter!! I really enjoyed getting a chance to see how Duo and Heero function on a normal work day. It really provided a lot of insight into the characters motives and their personalities. Your portrayal of their day really helped flesh out why they act the way they do^^ I liked the insight we got into Duo's past relationships...it certainly explains why he wants to take things slowly with Heero. It made me wonder what kind of relationships Heero had in the past too. I'd imagine that unless he found someone who really connected with him (like Duo), and unless it was someone whom he respected, they probably didn't get very far with him. Some things I especially enjoyed in this chapter:

1. The comparison between Heero's method of waking up and Duo's. I really liked how you juxtaposed the two images: Heero waking up to the annoying sound of an alarm clock and Duo waking up to the chirping of birds. It was an excellently executed device, and though it was only a sentence or two, you really provided insight to Heero's less than ideal life.

2. The interaction between Duo and Zero^^. I think you know by now that I absolutely adore Zero! I especially enjoyed the monologue of sorts from Zero, and why he likes to play with Duo's hair~ I swear I melted in my seat when I read it^^ And the image of Duo constantly fending off a curioius horse from his hair had me laughing for a long time^_^V

3. Heero's work situation: I felt bad for Heero when I read it. I think he should definately grow a backbone and quit. I just wanted to jump into the scene and punch his boss. And I may be reading things wrong, but I'm getting the hint that Heero might start working for Duo, who needs someone with computer expertise to manage his accounts^.~ I hope I'm right, it would be nice to see Heero doing something he enjoys.

Awesome chapter, well put together and extremely interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next!

-BKFan
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WOW~ I just finished reading both chapters and I'm speechless!!! This is truly an amazing work of art that gets better and better with every chapter^^ I think the progression of Heero and Duo's relationship is sweet, realistic, and interesting. In fact, it's so realistic that sometimes when reading, I feel like a voyeur~

I especially loved the conversation they had over dinner, we learned more about Duo and Heero and it made me feel like I was really reading about a *person*.

Furthermore, the research, time, and care you put into your writing is evident in every chapter, paragraph, and sentance. Grammar, spelling and characterization were all on the mark, as usual^^

Oh~ and Heero's explanation for Zero's name was hilarious!! I'm still laughing at that one^^ Excellent work!

-BKFan
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Well, some things I really loved about this chapter was the easy interaction between Duo and Heero. It seems like they're well on their way to being good friends, and now they can hope for something even more! The way they bond over Zero is also very sweet, and I enjoy the parts where they are cleaning or taking care of the horse the most. Zero is also a cool character as well...makes me want to brave my fear of heights and large animals and get on a horse myself^^

But perhaps what I liked the most here was how Duo responded to Heero. Once again, you kept it realistic, and instead of having Duo jump Heero the seond he knew that he was interested in him, you chose to make him wait and get to know Heero better. I can't tell you how refreshing that is...I've read so many fics where and and Heero meet, and after a 10 second exchange of mutual attraction, they're in bed together -_-;;; Doesn't work like that people!

I really wonder what's going to happen next...it sounds like things might get a little awkward with Heero continuing to live with Duo while they're still trying to get to know each other, AND while they have their mutual attraction hanging over their heads.

I really enjoyed reading this! So well put together and thoughtful^^ Please continue~

-BKFan
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-BKFan
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