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By : Deb

From ANON - Rez on October 06, 2003
EEp! Everything is coming together now, isn't it? Hehe. Good for Leith, being able to remember what he was doing, if not all. This is really going to help them isn't it? I hope so. I don't like Mr. Martins being held captive by that asshole. Grrr...makes me so mad.

Cute wake up on Quatre's part. Poor Trowa, how was he supposed to believe his wildest dreams were real. *snickers* Lucky bastard. With the sound advirom rom both of them, Toby and Benny are going to be good kids when they're older.

Poor Paul. All of this on his young mind. I do hope that Leith will be okay, and able to walk. If not I just might cry for real *sniffles* Hehe, right. Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on September 16, 2003
Oh wow, what a heart wrenching chapter. Poor Leith, poor Paul, poor Mr. Martins. And my deepest sympathies and condolences for you and those close to you who shared the pain of losing a loved one. Indeed a potential tear jerker had I been in a more crying mood.

All that is positive I prefer to not elaborate on. Although I will say the beginning with Sally and Wufei had melingling. It's good to know you've given Leith others who care. His neighbors are on mytop twenty fave OC's list. That's an accomplishment. Seeng as how only Fayah,Shane and Toby are the only /gir/girl from this series on that list. Well, yeah.

That's enough for one night. Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on August 29, 2003
I honestly can't believe you had Quatre say that. I laughed outrighich ich made my roomate look at me oddly. That was too funny. *ahem* yes...

Agst filled chapter to say the least. Leith has gone to the police...Bob has sent a message to Leith (I assume)...and Trowa and Quatre's suspicions are being aroused (snickers) at the mysterious death of Shand. Oh the mystery and anxiousness.

Poor Paul and Leith. So many raodblocks. But they will perservere. They must if they are to be the second cutest couple of them all. Wait, make that third. Ummm, yes, third. Hehe. Don't mind me, too many Lindt. Keep Typin'
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From ANON - Rez on August 18, 2003
That's some solid advice from good ol' Fayah. Such a doll, she is. Poor Leith. He's all concerned over what might be happening with his dad. Such a good son. I still say that he should be astute enough to realize something was wrong first off. Oh well.

Well, isn't Shane getting a little possessive. I understand his circumstace and all, but still. Fayah is more than just a prize or piece of land that can be claimed. Such a runt that boy is. Gotta love him though.

And poor Howie. We obviously know where all the scrap has gone and now we know how those mobile dolls were built. Still, poor guy. I Hil Hilde still. At least Heero has enough class to not make Duo phone that evil wench. Poor guy has gone through enough with her. Evil wench.

Good stuff so far! Hurry up with those updates! It's torture having to wait. Jokes. Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on July 29, 2003
I've been dying for three days trying to read this, but every time I keep getting interrupted. *sigh*

In any case, wow, Bob Martins worked on the Zero system? that can't be right, can it? I guess after OZ took control over Zero and downloaded it to try and test their own soldiers. Meh. Confusing stuff, that's what it all is. But I'm assuming that what you were going with. Otherwise it would seem that Matins had a brush with the notorious ive doctors. *shivers* those guys creep me out.

Go Duo! He's such a little wierdo. I love the messages though. I'm seriously considering putting one on my machine. It'd be great, seeing as how to everyone of my friends I'm the devil and my counterpart, a.k.a. my best friend is God. What? Gotta make your own fun. Otherwise, how else will you get it?

Awww, poor Leith. He's all concerned about his dad. Well, good for it. Some kids would cheer at that. But at least they have a good relationship. That's always nice.

And concerned he should be. What's up with that stupid professor guy. Oi, he freaks me out. And he's really terrible. A fiend! How could he be so evil as to attack L3? All of those innocent people. Plus he's trying to have the UEA have them turn over the G-boys? Who does he think he is? Grr. If he wasn't a ficticious character, I'd destroy him. Sheesh, some people are just evil. And willwill Leith, Paul and the rest of the L2 boys factor into this? Will they be able to help? I hope so. It could be a family affair. Or training, if you will. For the heroes of tomorrow. Yay!

Good stuff, as usual. Just have to update more often. Jokes. You take as long as you need to keep coming out with quality chapters. Just, don't take too long. Wouldn't want me growing out of the fanfic reading stage before you're done. Yeah. Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on June 25, 2003
WOW! That lemon between Wufei and Sally was wonderful. Everything a girl dreams of for their wedding night. One curiosity though. Was Sally supposed to be a virgin in your story? I wasn't too sure. I know that she hasn't been married before, and that this was her first time with Wufei, but was it her first time at all? I'm just asking because we all know that the first few times hurts. And with the way you described it there was no pain for her. I'm just squabbling over symantics aren't I? Oh well.

What's going to happen to poor Bob Martins? Oh dear. It's obvious that this Ronald guy (I don't know if that's right) wants him to re-program the chips to be the AI for the mobile dolls. Is Martins up to it? Oh dear, the anticipation.

And poor Leith. He doesn't know what's going on. Will he be able to help save his father. I hope so. I love the whole Paul/Leith thing. It's so sweet. Especially since I think you're going to have Leith phone Paul to say he's worried about his dad. That's going to be so cute. Paul's gonna help little Leith out. Hehe. Can't wait.

As always, I'm loving the stories and am eager to read the next chapter. Till then, keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on June 10, 2003
Awww, poor Duo wants to get married. Hehe, can't wait to see what you'll do in the end. Nice chapter, I must say. Great reception, and the last bit with Duo and Wufei had me struggling to keep my laughter in check. Plus, when Paul and Leith were at the limo having the introductions, I was trying not to say "awwww" out loud.

What's up with Mr. Martin though? Who's the mysterious antagonist? And exactly why does he need Bob Martins to complete his plan for revenge? And curse whoever it is that h's threatning Leith. Grrr. Oh well, not like Leith won't be protected by the G-boys and Paul; plus the whole ang.ang. Hehe.

Great chapter. I will admit that I was a touch concerned about the late update. But the chapter was worth the wait. Till next time then. Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on May 24, 2003
Oh no! What's going to happen to Leith's dad? And what was that abour Leith driving the limo for Wufei and Sally's wedding? My, won't that be interesting? But thei second date! Awwww....it'll be so cute. That is if i even happens with Leith's dad being kidnapped. But what if he doesn't notice until it's too late? Like the morning of the wedding Dun dun dunnnnn. Well, great stuff. I LOVED the whole Heero printing the photos and assin them around the preventers network. LMAO. I honestyl couldn' read for a miute or two. Just the implicatation. And the tough time everyone giveor Wor Wufei. Plus Quatre's little hangover. LOL. Can't wait. Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on May 19, 2003
Oh Gods! I just about buster a gut from laughing so hard! That was rich! Who-boy was it ever. Poor Wufei! LOL!!!!! Poor, poor Wufei

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The date with Leias cas cute! Goddess bless Monty Python and the Holy Grail. I have that movie and now have the strangest compulsion to watch it. The black knight scene has to be one of my favorites too! And that little make-out session between Paul and Leith...Kawaii!!

*still laughing over poor Wufei* Oh Goddess, where DID you come up with that?!? Oh dear. That was gold! Pure gold!
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From ANON - Rez on May 10, 2003
*giggles insanely* Oh dear. I could not stop the entire time reading this. *laughs outright* You are pure evil. Correction, you made Duo pure evil. Good ol' use of literal words. "not a hair on his head" LOL. Poor, poor Wufei. However, wouldn't you think he'd, being a Gundam pilot and all, be able to detect alcohol in a drink? Even if it is Orange juice that hides the scent and appearance. Oh well. Wonderful chapter. My main question is how in the hell did Duo ever convince Trowa of all people to be his accomplice? I guess it is the best choice seeing as Heero would have spoiled his fun, Zechs would have been too... modest, and Quatre just can't keep his mouth shut. *realizes the double implication* oops. LOL. Great update. But what about Paul and Leith?Well, we'll just have to wait and see. Keep typin'
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From ANON - ^_^ on May 08, 2003
Hehe, bad Duo! I have to feel bad for Wufei, even if it is funny.
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From ANON - Rez on April 29, 2003
*jitters* Damn, Duo and that outfit!! It has to be a favorite of yours since it's in almost all of your stories. But it would just be such a nice outfit on him. I totally agree. Oh dear, the stag party is next, is it? Hehe. Can't wait to see what Duo has planned for Wu-man. Won't this be interesting. And Paul is going out on his first date. Kawaii! Too sweet!

And oh, how the plot thickens. What's up with the evil dude who's out to steal the chips? And what does it have to do with Leith's father? Oh dear. How will this all turn out? Well, we'll just have to see. Till then I suppose! Keep typin'
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From ANON - Rez on April 18, 2003
Uh-oh. Complicted plot already? That can'tgoodgood. Especially since it's gonna include our little Paulie and his potential love interest. *sigh* That can't be fun. But other than that, the story's going great so far. The only question on my mind is whether or not Wufei and Sally's marriage is gonna be on time or not. Because of this whole evil bad men stealing Winner Corp.'s chips and all. Cute verifications too. His fleece was black as soot. Creative. Now, to return to the wonderful land of reality. Ha! Wonderful my behind.
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From ANON - Ita-chan on April 08, 2003
YYeeessssss,...thank god ya pair-up paul with a guy,...*grins*..
NOT with a girl like shane,...i'm actualy abit dissapointed that ya pair-up
shane with a girl instead with a guy,...*pout*...NO,..i'm NOT anti-het or somethin,..
it's just that there're some het pairings that doesn't seem quite well match to me,...
like 1+R or 2+H,...*shudders*...wufei+sally is ok,...they're quite a perfect match in
my personal oppinion,...*wink*...but shanexfayah doesn't seems quite the right
match to me,...[just in my personal oppinion kay,..hope no hard feelings,..*grins*]..
with shane lookin quite cute and all,..it's seems such a big waste on a girl,...*shrugs*...
BUT seeing ya pair-up paul with quite a cute and sexy guy,....i can overlook shanexfayah
pair,....and i hope ya gona pair-up colin+mikey and benny+toby,...they seems quite
perfect for each other,...*puppy-dog-eyes*,...not now of course,...wait untill they're much more
older,...but if ya can,...i hope ya might consider them,...*wink,wink*,...
all in all,...hope ya gona continue soon,...and keep-up the good work kay,..
till yer-next chapter,...Jaaaaaaaaaaaa and GGaaaanbbbaaattteeeeeeee-Neeeeeee!!^.~!!
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From ANON - Rez on April 06, 2003
Thankies for the notice! And for the makings of a good fic too! So far it's starting out fun! Poor little Paul feeling left out? Well, this Leith character is starting to sound as though he may fix that. You are just such a greuthouthor. Most people would bore me with the logistics of making a cup of cofee. However, you still manage to make me read the whole paragraph and not delete the window. Strange, no? In any case, this is going to be the starting of another great fic it seems, and you're gonna kill me on those days between updates. Oh well, it's the good kind of anticipation I suppose. Not to mention the whole Duo in a french maid outfit. Just imagining that made me laugh. Can't wait to see what else is in store. Till then...
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