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Reviews for Mmmm Ass

By : Makoda
  • From IuvenesL on December 29, 2010
    Okay, so I know this fic is really old and you probably don't get notifications for reviews any more, but I just had to drop by and say that this fic made me laugh my ass off. I wholeheartedly agree with Camaro that it is horrible. Indeed, its epic awfulness should be intuitively obvious to even the most casual observer. That didn't stop me from reading it three times and cracking up every time.

    For example:

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    “What do you mean nothing. You just raped Vegeta. My mate.”
    “Yea loved his ass.”

    ***

    See, if Camaro had written that, it would have had some amazing emotional impact, most likely built up with some backstory and, like, maybe a real reason why Trunks and Goten were sick little fucks, why they were strong enough to rape Vegeta and Gohan, etc. It would have been awesome, but it wouldn't have been hilarious.

    So...cheers, and thanks for writing it. ;)

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  • From Brathian on January 15, 2005
    Hi all well this is just to say that since i cant get into my account i ave another one now with alot of my better fics... i was previously Kyonitch now im Shalina stupid account wont recognise my password
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  • From ANON - Shwarz Engel on December 22, 2004


    Very very good ^^ ^^ You should write more.... Poor poor Vageta Ku.... Can't wait to see what happens next time ^_^ ^_^
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  • From ANON - Rachel on December 09, 2004
    Umm the point of this story is mindless sex.... its not ment to be creative or anything its just basicly a big scew fest...
    I wrote it at school and i delibratly massicated the characters... its not a serious fic its just some crap thing i wrote. The only reason i posted it is because one of my friend insited that i did before anything else....
    Just a little insite into the whole thing
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  • From ANON - Camaro on December 09, 2004
    Hmm... quite possibly the most stupid fanfiction I've read on this site. Number one, you have so much dialogue (and ignorant, unrealistic dialogue) that it leaves absolutely no room for any thought process or even the most trivial emotion. (Not that I imagine you used either one while writing this abomination) You're writing sex for sex sake and while you're not the first one, and unfortunately not the last one, even this is a sad attempt. Do people REALLY talk like that? Seriously, I've lived about a hundred different places, seen the most far stretches of the world and the DAY that I hear people speak even remotely like this, is the day I take a big leap right off it.

    I'm not saying that I dont think you have potential, because some of your vocabulary usage wasn't bad at all. I'm saying this sucks and I'm giving you damn good reasons for it. Why waste your time and effort on something that on all accounts, isn't worthy of you? If you have the talent, why are you embarrassing yourself with this? Its crap and while I'm all for creativity and making the characters your own, all you've done is what every 12 year old on fanfiction.net does.... you've made them all shallow, brain-dead, nemphomaniacs who essentially "rape" people (another thing I hated about this story, though I had been warned at the beginning) to get what they want. Again, I'm saying this is completely stupid.

    Love
    Camaro
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  • From ANON - Krystal_Epyon on December 08, 2004
    MUWAHAHAHAHA!!!! POSTAGE!!!! It's about time you posted this fic. Why didn;t you tell me!
    *snickers*
    Mmmm Vegeta, I love you ass.
    What did you say?
    Uhhh, I want some grass!

    And btw: I can't believe that Daniel/Jack never crossed your mind!
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