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By : YamisAkuchan
  • From ANON - mark654 on September 22, 2005
    spectaculer awsome cant think of ant more big words
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  • From ANON - Thanos6 on July 22, 2005
    Wow, this is one horrible story. Goten raped multiple times by totally human men and women, Trunks being a totally insensitive ass...the evilness of this story goes on and on.
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  • From ANON - Shiva on July 08, 2005
    I really love your story!!! I think you should write a part 4! *bites tongue and giggles* XD
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  • From ANON - XGokuX on June 03, 2005
    Your story is awesome you should continue to write some maybe after a few years in the story and have goten and trunks having problems?

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  • From ANON - Camaro on January 25, 2005
    Uhh.. well. It's really unrealistic and when it comes to the "leading up to" sex parts, the characters dialogue blows. In fact, the one sentence I really hated was when Trunks says something to kate about "get off the love of my life!" Now, when you write, you also have to be thinking, would I or anyone else on the face of this planet say something like that?

    But for what its worth, it's entertaining. You do a fucking fantastic job at sex scenes, though I felt they were a bit rushed in parts. It's humorous that Goten got his wang sprang or whatever! hahaha.. I have heard of that as well.. happened to a guy who had a hard one walking to his bed and tripping. It was original in that part and that's GREAT! I also think you have a nice flow and a fairly wide vocab. Awesome job.

    Goten is pretty weak though so maybe in further chapters you won't make him everyone's sniveling man-bitch but hey, it's your story and it's not half bad!

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - ILurvFlake on January 21, 2005
    Oh, PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE continue this story... this was an awesome Tr/Gt story!
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  • From chibi7kid on January 19, 2005
    .hehe.Goten/Trunks fic. No offense but Kate's a bitch.keep it up.^_^
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