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By : ethereal
  • From ANON - Camaro on February 23, 2005
    Awesome awesome awesome.

    ::still laughing at pitiable fools who must wait for chapters::

    Excellent writing, awesome storyline: creativity, originality. All my favorite attributes. Excellente!

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - sinheart on February 19, 2005
    You have to get some new chapters up cause i want to know what happens next. Good job by the way.
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  • From ANON - Camaro on February 09, 2005
    Ooohhhh Lovely lovely! Great chapter as always!

    ::points and laughs at all the desperate fools who have to wait for the next chapter when I get to see it first::

    Muahahhahah!

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - Camaro on January 28, 2005
    Wow, not bad at all. I'm really glad I read through all five chapters and I'm looking forward to more. But, you sincerely need a beta reader.. .I mean BAD

    You wrote "genitally" instead of "gentle" Hahahahaha!

    I'd be happy to if you were so inclined though I warn you, I don't go easy on things and if something sucks, I will be telling you about it. Other then that, it was really good. I genuinely like the characters though you've made Vegeta fall in love much too quick and much too easily. It's only been one day and already the cold hearted Prince is letting down his walls? That's dumb.

    But on the other hand, I have to commend you for taking your time on this. Most stories around here begin with sex in the very first chapter, but you've kept us waiting and wanting it even more. That's such a brilliant idea! I mean, seriously... that's awesome because it really establishes personalities and characteristics before rushing into sex. That way, it seems more based on actual feelings then on just raunchy fuck fests.... (not that I'm much of a good example in this regard but we won't go there. haha)

    So definetly, let me know if you'd like me to beta and so far, so good.

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - Camaro on January 28, 2005
    When you wrote "Existed" I think you meant "Excited". And "Paints" should probably be "Pants" if I'm not crazy.

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - Camaro on January 28, 2005
    Awesome story so far. Different and very unique which are two qualities that I appreciate more then I think anything. Grammar and punctuation were just fine, a few mild mess ups here and there, nothing worth bringing up though.

    I like the content and even though Goku is dumb (and yes, he's really stupid so far) I still feel as though you made the characters likable. At this point in a story, 9 times out of 10 I stop reading and don't even bother to review... but I figure, this really seems worth going through another chapter and I look forward to your portrayal of Vegeta and Goku.

    Very very good so far.

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - Lokiloki on January 19, 2005
    Great fic! Why aren't you writing more? :(
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  • From ANON - Broken on January 19, 2005
    This is one awesome story!!! I can hardly wait for the next chapter!! Poor goku... wait no.. poor Vegeta... I never knew goku could skip? what's skipping?
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  • From ANON - leelee on January 11, 2005
    I love your story so far!!! Could you pplleeaassee e-mail me when you update? If you can my e-mail's foxy_brown707@yahoo.com . Thankz a mil!! Update soon!!!


    lita
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  • From ANON - Shinna on January 09, 2005
    I enjoyed reading this story. Keep up the good work. update soon
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  • From ANON - shameika on January 09, 2005
    Cool fanfic can't wait to read the next chapters update soon
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  • From ANON - aphinna on January 09, 2005
    Awesome fanfic please write more soon
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  • From ANON - Vega Daemonson on January 08, 2005
    This is a really good story. There were a couple of spelling mistakes but other than that, this is a very well written story. Please update soon!

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    Vega
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  • From ANON - Jhon Doe on January 06, 2005
    Interesting. It's a bit dark, but I am hoping for a happy ending. The story is well thought out and I would like to see this story continued. Please, update soon!
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