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By : LaRieaux
  • From ANON - Macha on March 03, 2005
    Ah, it looks as though you have picked a very contriversial subject indeed. I am very interested in seeing where this is going. For a couple of reasons. First of all, it seems as though Bulma has been converted, not Trunks, and I want to know if she is going to try to convert Trunks and her reasons behind doing so and Trunks's reactions to it. Her statement about (paraphrasing) needing to find Jesus before for it's too late, makes it very.... human. Two, sayians are not of this planet, therefore Christianity would be very alien to them. Almost as alien as say.... Christianity was to the Celts in 200 AD.

    Would this be a matter of Vegeta not enlighting his son as to the religions on Vegeta-sie and therefore Trunks finds his need for religion fulfilled by a human one?

    lol... with what you have started here, Trunks could be the anti-christ for all I know.

    Yes, I have to admit, just the title sets my teeth on edge, but the subject matter so far is good and interesting enough that I would like to read the second chapter.

    A couple of things I want to point out.... only because this story WILL get picked on, even for the smallest infraction. You swapped tenses a couple of times, going from past tense to present tense. The one that comes to mind is where Trunks says something about 'sit' instead of 'sat.' Keep it the same tense through out the story if at all possible. Tenses are an issue I also have problems with, and personally, I really appreciate it when someone points it out to me, so I can fix it.

    You have my email address. *winks*




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  • From ANON - deepoet on March 03, 2005
    Are you serious?...I thought this story was good, it was beautifully written and it had a few good points. I can understand vegeta's mates' point about it if it revolves around revelations, but what about all the other fics with 'God and Devil' stuff in it? I say give this story a little more time. I don't know about you but I can't just lay everything out on the line based on the first chapter.
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  • From ANON - Vegeta\'s Mate on March 02, 2005
    Hello there. Um, I'm not too sure about this but I don't think that you will end up getting many readers or reviews for this story. Let me explain my reasons before you send me hate mail.

    #1. This story seems to be starting out with a good idea but the way it is portaeyed will send readers away because it seems that the author is trying to force them to think about something that either they really don't want to or don't care about.

    #2. Very good point that many christians need to practice their beliefs instead of hiding behind them ~not saying that you do but that some do~

    #3. I understand that for the majority of people, christianity is the way to go but not for everyone. The way that this story is heading seems to be a bit one sided, 'if you don't know about God then you are wrong' seems to be the way this fic is going. I might be wrong but it is just my opinion.

    #4. Instead of making this fic about "Trunks finding God" in the christian way maybe you should have him look over many different religions and decide which one fits him instead of making him conform to one. After all, in Japan there are mostly Buddhists and Shintos.

    These have been just my opinion and if you feel like I flamed you then please feel free to e-mail me and talk to me about it. This is not an invitation to start text bashing my mailbox, this is an invitation to talk to me like an adult ~we are all supposed to be adults here~ and discuss a problem if one should arise.

    Have a nice day.

    Vegeta's Mate
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