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By : Camaro

From ANON - Kat on June 02, 2006
I... I don't even know where to start. I just feel so honored that you dedicated this chapter to me. And this chapter was just so beautiful, I don't even know where to begin.

�You poured color into my life Trunks,� The words were chocked. �You made everything more beautiful. You. Not some lie. Not some charming heir to billions. You. Don�t ever forget, it doesn�t take a fa�ade for someone to love you."

This quote is... it's just perfect. I'm sorry, I'm way too emotional right now. I... God, I just freakin' loved this chapter!!!!! I finally got why you named this story "Strong Heart". Because it takes a strong heart to love, it takes courage to love.

I wish I was more eloquent right now, but I can't seem to do more than sit here and silently cry. Yes, you moved me to tears with this chapter. I'm... I'm speechless, that's what it is, and I have you to thank for that. I'm happy and I'm sad and I'm completely at a loss for words. This chapter moved me and that's all there is to it. I guess that's what I'm trying to say, I'm moved and touched by this chapter. Thanks :)

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From ANON - Kat on May 24, 2006
Okay, NOW I can finally review this chapter. First of all, I want to thank you for this wonderful, wonderful story. The time without this site has led me to appreciate your talents all the more :) God, there were so many parts of this chapter that had me stunned and speechless, especially those letters at the end. How horribly sad, and yet how lucky those two were to have loved someone that much. Oh, that reminds me, I was so happy that you finally went into Goten and Trunks' relationship and how it all fell apart. As someone who's been wondering about that, I was so thrilled to start off the chapter reading about those two, even if it did leave me crying out inside. I also have so many questions about this story. I will try to limit myself to only those I feel most important. I know you will not answer them until they are revealed in the story, but I need to ask them nevertheless. Where is Vegeta and what is he doing? What is happening with Mirai and why do I feel like whatever it is is going to have me balling up into a corner and crying? I'm almost afraid to read more, because I know more sorrow is coming, but I also couldn't stop myself from reading the next chapter even if I tried. I really cannot wait to read the ending to this story, as I sense it is near. Anyways, welcome back to AFF.Net!!
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From ANON - chayron on March 15, 2006
Well, there are many things to say, but, as I�m not enough eloquent, I�ll tell only several of them. First, I just loved that scene where Trunks� senses were overflowing with drugs, and the bitterness and loss he felt made him mad with hate and revenge. I didn�t realize what he was going to do until the very end, until he said that they all can fly. I swear my eyes flew wide.

And I was so sad and sympathizing with Goten... Actually with both of them. Goten holding on Trunks and waiting for Trunks to come to his senses, and Trunks looking�ah, hell, what has he been looking for? � Immortality? Some proof that things will forever stay as they were, like youth, fun? For some meaning of existence? Independence? Total freedom? Total control over one�s life? Hell, knows, but it seems he has been looking for it all in a wrong place. And good words were they: "Like you share yourself with everyone?" Goten had spat hotly, swallowing down his anguish. "I swear Trunks..." he'd shaken his head. "With as much 'sharing' as you do, I'm honestly surprised there's enough of you here to be divied out." Strong and to the point. Sadly, they worked not exactly like Goten would have liked. Trunks was affected, but that brought to drugs and that brought to a disaster.

Yeah, Goten expected that one day Trunks will finish his fruitless search and will find all those things in him. Can we hope that it will happen?

Well, I can�t say much about the letters. We all know how it was in Auschwitz. We all know but it is still hard to imagine that such things could exist at all. Though, the world is cruel, I look at the news and want to stop my ears. But the main idea wasn�t this. It was about spiritual bond, connection. Love. Ah, well, those letters were beautifully done.

I suppose there�s something wrong with Mirai, isn�t it? He says has not much time left. Is he going to die?

Well, sending love and strenght to you!
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From ANON - Macha on March 15, 2006
I'll keep this short, because you already have most of my feed back.

WOW...and that is both as in awe inspiring and....well, just awe inspiring. I can't even imagine what it took to write that, and I am thankful that you did.
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From ANON - Sinah Varo on January 31, 2006
This brought me to tears. I dont think I've ever been more moved. My favorite chapter by far...

Rest in peace Gohan.
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From ANON - ~anz~ on January 30, 2006
Not only is this chapter poignant, but it is also bittersweet. I read this at 4am. It took me 48 hours to assimiliate all of the ideas and the emotions evoked in this chapter. Besides I cried and cried and cried. My eyes were so puffy and almost swollen shut! You owe me a lot of hankies!

Finally, Trunks gets it. I can hear the broken shards mending...the healing has begun.

I understand Chibi's lament. It is the cry of middle child the one who attends the exact same school and has the exact same classes and teachers and has to live down the inevitable and disheartning comments of not being like his older sibling [other self]. And like those countless other children... it was an unenviable place to be in.... and like those countless others: he found a way to rebel, albeit a bit more extreme than others, it was a rebellion nontheless. He made a total and complete ass out of himself and chewed up all the scenery in the process. But for him at least, there is a light at the end of the tunnel... a way back to redemption... and hopefully~Goten.

Vegeta... what a dad! His parental instincts were dead on the money. He sensed an immediate change in his son... and like any good parent... sat there and listened! He listened to his son's woes and he comforted him! Reminded me a lot of the talks I had with my father when I was distressed...heck it reminded me of the talks I had with both of my parents....[who are now both deceased, but I will treasure the memories reading this passage unearthed... Thank You ~_^!]

I especially loved the way he told Trunks to 'mind his own business' after he accepted his son's apology about Kakarott of course! ~ Another story for another day: HA! ~ [I really love the way you alluded to 'their' story. ~and trust me...I will be reading! ~_^! ] The classic parent! He took care of his childs needs, gave him parental advice and his approval... without revealing his own *affairs*, classic. He took care of his son with total and complete class.

Mirai and Gohan basically had the same childhood...Amazing, isn't it. Mirai born into a world of chaos... and Gohan, ill prepared to face the world because of his mother's influence, is cruelly tossed into one at first by his father's long lost brother, and then by his father's oldest enemy. Such harshness for a four-year-old to endure.
Niether had a stable home life ...or childhood.

This Gohan and this [Mirai] Trunks are the most unique of all Gohans and Trunks in other timelines.

Mirai... having travelled to different timelines...was in a way...just as empty and just as cold as Chibi. Perhaps after all the searching... he found the same pattern repeated over and over again.... Gohan wasn't meant to live past a certain age. Or worse: in an eternity of ifninities their souls are truly starcrossed. They truly were meant for each other and for whatever cruel joke the cosmos decided to play on them...destined to never be together. Each suffering his own private misery...empty shells...never to be filled or fulfilled.

Then there is the wildcard: Goten. Goten who was never meant to be born... and in this timeline was. Goten: Trunks redemption. Perhaps the other timelines Truhan's met and fulfilled each other and lived happy and productive lives. But the addition of Goten to the puzzle, probably after Mirai's arrival threw everything off balance, was the cosmos way of correcting the shift.

From all accounts Mirai and this Gohan belong together regardless of when that time may be. How else did he know? What sense of urgency told him to see Gohan before he ended it all? And Gohan, what innate sense told him to wait for Mirai?

As for his father Vegeta...? He and Mirai also appear to be on a collision course.

Once again I apologize for taking so long and over analyzing the situation. But I can say this: NO matter how many times I read this the same feeling keeps permeating my being:
Gohan is at peace. He was healed...Gohan was healed. The healing has begun ~ for everyone.

This was truly magnificent.

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From ANON - Jenn on January 29, 2006
::cries:: that better not be the end...please.

-jenn
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From ANON - Kat on January 29, 2006
That chapter was so sad!!!! Seriously, I wasn't expecting that scene with Gohan and Mirai at all. Although, it does seem fitting somehow. And that kiss was simply breathtaking. I cannot even imagine loving someone so much that one kiss is worth everything!! I was also very impressed and pleased by the conversation between Vegeta and Trunks. Talk about a bonding long overdue!!! Just the way Vegeta told Trunks that he never saw Trunks as anyone other than himself, and certainly not another Mirai, was great. I'm still crying a little, that was such a heartwrenching chapter. So, I wonder what this last example of love will be that Mirai has to show Trunks?? And what happens after that?? I sort of get the feeling that the twists aren't over yet, which is one reason why I love your writing so much. And what's going to happen between Trunks and Goten?? Goten is his one big regret, not because he did something, but because he didn't. Trunks thinks that he didn't have the courage to love Goten; I think he's loved him all along. So, what is the thing with Vegeta?? I mean, where is he going that's long overdue?? LOL, I have so many questions after this chapter. I also need to learn not to read your story when other people are close by. I'm still crying and people are asking me if I'm okay. I just keep telling them to go read this story dammit, and then they'll know why I'm so touched. Okay, now I actually have people reading this over my shoulder. *sigh* Great chapter as always. I really do love this story, and I'm so sorry that it seems to be reaching the end. At least, that's the impression I'm getting. Who knows (besides you), I could very well be wrong. I cannot wait for the next installment of one of the greatest stories ever.
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From ANON - Anon on January 29, 2006
At first, baby, I couldn't review this. There is so much sorrow in this chapter that I was bawling halfway through it. I tried to pick out the lines that started it for me and comment on them. Before I start though, I want you to know that this is by far, your best work yet. It's amazing. Heart felt, dark, angsty, and full of passion and love. Just fucking spectacular.

Nothing was beautiful anymore. Nothing was fresh or pretty or sexy or light. It was like he walked through a world of shadows, touching everything and watching through stoic eyes as it crumbled, turned to ashes. Like a perpetual world of black, white and gray.

Isn't it funny how life gets that way? We seek out new ways to live, and we seek out new paths only to find that we grow tired and embittered by them in the end. Maybe our path of life isn't trying to find a path for ourselves to stick to. Maybe it's the search... The journey itself. IT is the fate of man that we grow tired and bored of the same routine over and over again, and yet, we seek the comfort of continuity. I guess that's our greatest tragedy and dilemma.

When every conquest eventually came and went, when his numbers soared to the point of countless, he was alone.

I get the feeling you aren't talking about Trunks in that line. That's why it killed me. As humans, we seek a certain amount of companionship and love. Without it, our hearts break. We convince ourself that we LIKE being alone, but the fact of the matter is...whether it's a friend...an ememy...or a lover...we have to have some kind of contact. Some kind of affirmation that we're still alive inside. Or else, we die.

Because he knew now, as he closed his eyes to the warmth that built behind them, what it was like to not get your goodbyes.

I have to admit that this week has probably been the hardest week of my life. Jake died. He's never coming back to me. I won't hear his voice on the phone, and I won't get to feel his warm hugs or hear his stupid jokes when he's drunk. I was the last person to talk to him before he died, and you know what the worst part of it is? We never said goodbye in our conversations because Jake said saying goodbye was a waste of time. God, I wish I had told him. I wish I would have said that one word. "Bye, Jake...See you tomorrow at the game." Maybe I would have found solace.

"Be real for me," He sobbed suddenly, startling Mirai. "Be mine for just a moment."

If only for a moment.

That closure and that step into life with the knowledge that you had what you wanted.

Just for a moment.

"You..." Gohan sobbed. "You will never age for me."

I can't review much more because I'm really starting to tear up here. Jesus Christ... How many times have I looked into myself and seen that one memory of complete bliss? He'll never age for me. He'll never go away. In my heart...in my mind...he's immortal. Beautiful. And never downtrodden. He'll be with me forever.

He will never age for me.

That life, for all its hardships, every day was worth it--If only for the fact that every pain, every loss, every failure had led him up to this moment--had led up to the kiss that made it all worth while.

Do we really live for one moment, babe? Will I live my entire life for one moment with my child? The one moment that I see Jake's daughter marry her true love? The one moment when I look at the sky and let go of my fear? If we live life for that ONE moment...if that ONE moment makes everything worth while, I can't wait for it.

This was a gorgeous chapter, and the death of Jacob made it even more real for me. We so often forget to look right in front of ourselves at the things that make our lives worth living. Our children. Our siblings. Our spouses. Our friends. We focus so much on that ONE thing we never had, and we don't even realize that we're missing out on the TONS of things we DO have right now.

Beautiful, baby. Absolutely stunning.
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From ANON - Shay on January 28, 2006
Oh my God. This chapter shocked and rocked me in all it's realness and beauty and destruction. To me, it showed me love in all it's forms. Sometimes, destruction IS beauty and it REALLY isn't until we've lost everything until we truly are free. I don't love this story because you're my friend; I love it because it's amazing, beautiful, provocative and it's just utterly undescribable. I learn a life lesson in every chapter and i'm just star-struck and amazed as to how surreal it is that a person can write something so mind-shattering that it touches my heart in such a way it has never been touched before. Never stop writing.

Shay
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From ANON - Orme on January 28, 2006
Oh my god...I...I just wanted to curl up and die, that was so heartwrenching. I bawled my eyes out. ::bursts out crying::

That made me so sad. ::sniff:: Anyway, I just wanted to say that it was an AWESOME chapter. Though, my heart hurts lol. I can't wait for the next chappy!
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From ANON - Jay FicLover on January 27, 2006
I coudn't help but cry too... It brought back so many painful memories of my own life... things I haven't gotten over yet. Some wounds just never seem to heal completely... When you loose someone, the world you knew ends, it just ends... and you're left picking up the pieces, praying, hoping to bring it back, but it never does... but the shadowed imitation of what you once felt, of the last time you felt completely safe, not knowing that right then, at that time, what you were feeling, it was perfect, it was happiness...

Cause you didn't know how much it hurt not having it. Not having them.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on January 27, 2006
Wow! Strong chapter. Finally they are dealing with long suppressed emotions and memories.
Although I don't agree with what Gohan did with that blast at the end.

I can't wait to find out what happens next.
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From PrincessKoriandr on January 27, 2006
OH MY GOD, WHAT THE FUCK! WHAT FUCK IS GOING ON! Man, I can't even review this right now...I need a minute, Geeze...wasn't expecting that. Man...I'll be back!
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From ANON - Macha on January 27, 2006
WTF!!!! There's something hidden going on. Vegeta's leaving, and when he does, he hugs his son as he did in the Buu saga.

Gohan knew what was going on, and then let Mirai leave and then killed himself? That wasn't beautiful, that was SAD. *grumbles*

You'd better update soon so I start to see all the facts, cause this was just, disturbingly sad. Life isn't always a bed of roses, I know that, but .... ARG! MORE SOON PLEASE!
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