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By : Camaro

From ANON - Kat on January 14, 2006
Ewww... why is Trunks still opening that wound?? So, that's why it never really healed. You know, if I had to take a guess, I'd say that he was either trying to dig out his heart to stop his pain, or he was digging around to see if he actually had one. Either way, yucky!! You know, my favorite part of this chapter had to be where they both said the wrong names. Well, Trunks almost said the wrong name... same difference. Still, it's sad to think that they were both only using each other to act out their own little fantasies. And I seriously doubt that Trunks could ever make Gohan love him, not when he's so clearly in love with Mirai. I cannot wait to hear what Mirai's thoughts are on this particular memory of Trunks's. I also thought the Piccolo part was extremely interesting too, as I was wondering if he was going to make an appearance in this story or not. Well, not really an actual appearance per se, I was just wondering if he was going to be mentioned. Again, what an incredible job on this chapter, and I'm very sorry to hear that your computer crashed. That majorly sucks. As always, I look forward to more of this story soon!!
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From ANON - You know who.. on January 14, 2006
Gaaah..besides the lack of sleep in these past few days.. and the fact that I'll have to get up early tomorrow (ugh) get ready (double ugh) and take buses all across four cities for ONE JOB.. I'm really glad I took this time to read chapter 19. I know a lot of bozo fans are talking to you, emailing you, instead of just REVIEWING, so even though I talked to you WHILE I read it..now that I finished, here's my review:

I thought Trunks was hot. Like beyond hot. And we can see him becoming more in touch with his human side. Best of all (the best news ever) you haven't made him a pansy. Not a mama's boy. Not some sentimental weeping whore. You kept him in touch with who we all got acquainted with, someone we're COMFORTABLE with: a heavily sexual being, cold, and an asshole. We all love assholes! But yes, you made him so hot that I'm not so sure about my sexuality anymore.. if he were real or I was a cartoon, sure, he could use me!

And secondly.. I thought this chapter was beautiful because of the length (DAMN.) and the techniques you used. Instead of another example of love, you let us have an opportunity to see Mirai try to understand TRUNKS better and not just change his perspective. You're lengthening your story and giving out good material to give depth to your two main characters. You add personal little touches that I really like, such as the chip bit with Mirai's mom that remind us of his past and his motivation to help Trunks instead of just conforming him. We're let into the insight of the two Saiyan hybrids and how THEY must feel, like every other hybrid in this great big racial world and it helps US, the readers, understand more.

I had more..but my back hurts..and I'm tired. besides, I told you anyways! I'll try to catch up on my reading after finals! love you much
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From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ on January 14, 2006
Trunks seriously got revenge on Mirai

...he took the only person who held himself for Mirai...took his virginity...took his dignity...stole his innocence and left him with nothing...not evern an illusion....

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From ANON - ~anz~ on January 14, 2006
Images and Reflections... Which is the Final Reflection?

Or should I say: LIKE FATHER...LIKE SON!

This is so laced with irony! Trunks yet again has reenacted an event done by his father. Has he been secretly reading his daddy's diary? Or is he just psychic?

*Who could ever forget that erotic sight when Vegeta ki bound Goku to the side of that mountain?*

Where do I begin... with the sheer eroticism of G ki bound to that mountain? Or the violence of their passion...which is not for one another... or with the extreme violence of Trunks words as he cruelly and maliciously ripped Gohan's world apart as he oh so generously pointed out his true nature by ripping him down one side and up another?

What cruelty! What violence! What passion! What irony!

The perverseness of this delimma is the cruel hoax they play on each other.... each wanting someone else... yet taking their frustration out on each other... they in essence used each other... creully. Trunks feels ... it's just buried deep inside... Gohan aches... desperately and passionately for a memory... for someone who he thinks is lost to him... he... is... they are...like the pristine landscape... broken and damaged..a travesty of its former self...

Young Mr Purple Hair... is well... seeking revenge after a fashion... how dare he not be allowed to be himself... in a way he was forced into an image also... no wonder he wanted to strip Gohan of that...fake facade! He also had been forced to wear one... that's why he could recognize another's self induced prison! He was right about one thing... Gohan was so confused he had himself believing that he needed glasses! There's nothing wrong with his eyesight... it's perfect! That's one mirror that needed to be cracked... one illusion that needed to be shattered... Both destroyed by their mothers.

Makes one wonder as to the real reason Trunks seduced Goku... was it to get back at his father? or was it more basic... the image of his beloved Goten... Gohan was for revenge... and a poor substitute for Goten as well...

Ironic... that. Not only did he use Gohan as a substitute, but he also got revenge on Mirai. He took years of frustration of being compared to his doppleganger out on the one thing [person] that truly loved Mirai... he took revenge,took his virginityand stole his innocence. I would say that was a good days work...

Gohan on the other hand once he realized what he'd done... had no pieces... nothing to grab onto... all his illusions had been torn to pieces... ripped to shreds... but what had he mourned? the loss of his virginity? the loss of his carefully maintained facade? or the fact that the Trunks he was with wasn't the Trunks he wanted? That he wasted himself on a spoiled selfish brat who was more interested in revenge than in him... that he was just a means to an end... or that he'd lost control... and realized just how Saiyan he really is... that he drove out the human for awhile! Forgot his mother's conditioning. Trunks apparently forgot that Gohan has a title as well... but he really should give him a new title... "The Prince of Pathos!" because he sure is pathetic!

Magnificent!! Bravo!!!

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From ANON - Kassya on January 14, 2006
Jesus Christ!!

So you know? I don't read DBZ fics. I tried once, but I couldn't find any that were good. Periodically I'd search again, hoping that I'd find something. I found your fic some time ago (I think after you posted chapter 9), and it is the only DBZ I read. Ever. You are the sole exception. The bright light in this fandom. This is fucking amazing. The depth, angst, and brutal truth you mix into this leaves me breathless. Probably the darkest, best written fic I have read in a long time. The brutality is gorgeous. It is sick and oh so wrong, but you don't use it without purpose, which makes it beautiful to behold. The cynical view is masterly. The way you pull this off... is genius.

You may not be finished, but thank you for writing this.
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From ANON - BrucesGirl on January 13, 2006
Well, I'm not sure where to start on this one. first of all... How do you make things so delightfully sadistic, and yet make them so hot that I'm taking a cold shower after I read it? That's something I have yet to master, and I'm so amazed at your talent to do so!

And yet still, your useless obsession lingers. It's really beyond me, yet so obvious. And here all along I knew you stared at me, watching me, gazing just a little too long at my face.

It's funny how we seem to replace the real thing with just an imitation, isn't it? You know what I mean. How can I replace real love with just a lie? I think that I've figured out just reading this that maybe it's just a cheap, cruel imitation of what I really wanted.

I was a constant fucking failure because I wasn't exactly what people were so sure I'd grow up to be. I was given this perfect mold and expected to MAGICALLY be exactly like him from the day I was born. Fuck who I wanted to be or the choices I wanted to make. Because they NEVER would have been Mirai's!

Goddamn. Ok, I'll tell you who my parents are. Daddy? He's a very popular preacher, and my mom? She's the director of a middle school. City council? Yeah. Church? Yeah. Everyone who sees me sees as their daughter, and it gets frustrating becasue everything I do is compared to them. I'm not an angel. Duh. I smoke weed and I like gay couples. Not to mention the fact that I smoke, cuss, and write erotica. I tried pleasing them but nothing I did was ever good enough, and I got it from everyone. I finally got bitter and pissed and I married the wrong asshole. A few hard knocks woke me up to the fact that I can't rebel constantly against it. I am who I am, and not even my parental units will EVER change that. Right, babe?

"You're going to love me more than you could ever love him."

It's it funny how we dread the truth, and yet, for some strange, fucked up reason, we will always love the ability to touch reality? If we think for just a minute that reality becomes our dreams, we get lulled into being relaxed in our little play world even though it isn't real. I think that Gohan saw Trunks as Mirai and honestly believed it. That's a powerful thought. We can bend our own reality to our dreams.

"You're amazing," He whispered, barely enough for the other to hear. "You're everything I ever wanted Got..... Gohan."

The simple fact of the matter is that Trunks and Gohan both see each other as a different person. Again, bending reality. It doesn't make the act any less atrocious. Fact is fact.

"He's your dream," Trunks whispered. "I'm your reality."

I could go on and on about the division between dreams and reality, but let me say this. People are always looking for an outlet of their dreams. Dreams drive mankind to progress and to reach beyond what they are used to. The first chance that we have to take our dreams and twist them to reality, we jump at it. What scares me most about Trunks in this story is that he has the deadly ability to see those dreams and twist them to a fucked up version of reality.

And even if he were to come back now... what would he return to but one big used up, tired out piece of trash. A broken little dolly.

Have you ever read any of C.S. Lewis' earlier work? He wrote a story called the "Pilgrim's Regress" which was an obvious satire on the old "Pilgrims Progress." It talks about the regression of mankind into a more primitive, animal race as the result of divuldging in the instinctual desires of their hearts. as a result, sin happens, and if a "Savior" were to ever come try to lead us back to the right path, it would never work. We've regressed too far. All we are is a broken species that allows our animal desires to destroy and make us regress no matter how hard we reach for the future and try to progress beyond our simple instinct.

It boils down to this: We are a slave to our desires and emotions, no matter how we fight it. It is INSTINCT to be animalistic. It is human.

All in all, this chapter blew my mind and gave me an incredible time in the cold shower, thank you very much. ^_^ I can't wait for the next chapter. You're so talented and you've been doing so wonderfully in this story.

^_^ Hedu adenokoitai! It is good to lay with a man!!!

BG

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From ANON - Webtester01 on January 13, 2006
Another interesting perspective. Trunks feels a lot more than he lets on.

As for the crashing thing, try to save every couple minutes, so you don't lose as much.

Great chapter.
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From ANON - Macha on January 13, 2006
Wow.... This was a sick treat! I know I reviewed this better while we were chatting, so, I am going to leave comments for the first part of this out.

Of couse, it still has to be said, Trunks is a sick SICK fuck. The chapters that led to this one.... don't do his individual real justice. We all accepted the cruelty at face value. In this chapter, we got to see more of what was behind it, and the standards he's been fighting agianst, just to prove how much he 'doesn't' care what Miria was/is like.

Poor Gohan. We've all had crushes that have never worked out, and there is always the 'what if's' left in their wake. He just had his secrects and 'what if's' torn away from him in a very cruel and unjust manner.

Although this chapter was.... more volitile than what I would usually care to read, I still found myself extreamly fascinated by the processes. I saw both anger, grief and denile in this one, and there are others I am leaving out.

Wow... that had to take a lot out of you to write. Very inspiring as well as intimidating. Excellent job!
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From ANON - chayron on January 13, 2006
Well... That was just fucking unbelievable.

I could only stare at the screen while Gohan was repeating the history of the world. Create and destroy. While standing in that pond he was a God. The only and usual problem was that his own creation (his own fa�ade) screwed up. Ah well. Angels fall first.

The fight… I even don’t have words to comment on it. That was the most beautiful thing I have ever read. Raw emotion bleeding from beneath the fists. Just amazing.

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From SaiyanPride on January 06, 2006
Greatest story I ever read! You're a gifted writer, I really got sucked into this story. Kept reading until I got to chap. 20 and was VERY disappointed to see the story isn't finished! Please update, I'm sure ALL of your readers are waiting anxiously for the next chapter!

Keep up the good work!

Greetz, Pride of a Saiyan
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From ANON - ~anz~ on January 04, 2006
Perplexing predicament. As Mirai stands and ponders this particular persona...one has to wonder about the outcome... Gohan's facade was shattered uttlerly and totally... another broken toy... fascinating in its irony... the Saiyan Prince always claimed vengeance on his third class rival... how fitting it came at the hands of his petulant heir... thwarted again, by yet another 'Purple Hair.'

All broken... all shattered... victory comes in many forms... "Hail to the Prince!" Finally, in the basest sense of the word, he's come out on top....

So is Trunks a petulant child, or a devious bastard? Is he that dead inside? Or has he buried himself so far inside himself that the only thing left is a empty shell? Just how hollow is this husk of a prince that the only way back from the abyss is for him to review the most heinous of his atrocities? Power is a beautiful yet terrible beast. How pungent is that aroma? The sweet taste of sheer dominance? That wonderfully sweet ahprodisiac called lust that gives one the strength to withstand all that in the one critical moment...gives one the perpetual strength to overcome all... to be the one.

God or Devil? Can he be redeemed? Or is he already dead...and this is just a nightmare... his own personal hell that he relives over and over again... in the hopes that he can indeed save his own soul? Is this truly a voyage of the damned? Is he condemned to relive his misdeeds over and over again because of the sole destroction of the Supreme Kais favorite? Have the actions of this 'ONE' in an infinity of Trunks condemend them all to the pit of hell for all eternity?

And the destroyed souls he left in his wake: how can he ever atone for the desolation he's caused?

The one saving grace he had? Goten...

Gohan... and just how many hells has this poor soul been subjected to? the hell of a shrewish mother... the hell of an uncaring father who abandoned him every chance he got under the guise of heroics... and worse... a younger brother who turned to the other only male parent on the planet who understood him: Vegeta... until his father returned, he had the illusion of playing big brother, but that role was superceded by his[Goten's] best friend: Trunks...

Kidnapped three times as a child, rescued each time by his father [actually he saved himself..and forgot], forced to study at an early age by his mother, tossed in the wilderness with an insane green being who sword vengeance on his father [he did kill him after all], fought beings from other planets, went to another planet where he met some reallly evil beings...came back home and fought more... not because he wanted to, but because circumstances demanded it.
Saiyaman was a cry for help. He was completely ineffectual in stopping Buu.

....Trunks, who shattered all the mirrors. Trunks, who revealed the magnitude of his impotentence... Trunks, whose life and existence have more meaning than Gohan's ever did... Trunks in his own way... has purpose... Gohan--has nothing... just another empty husk ... a shell of a broken being...

...all are broken...
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From PrincessKoriandr on January 04, 2006
Oh My God! This has have to be the best chapter to day. Totally awesome. I'm really surprised to see that your views mirror the ones I'd had of Gohan perfectly. I can't wait for the next chapter!

~Kenya
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From ANON - Anon on January 04, 2006
Incredible
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From ANON - Anon on January 04, 2006
Incredible
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From ANON - Anon on January 04, 2006
Incredible
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