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By : Camaro

From ANON - BrucesGirl on January 04, 2006
The times when he could hardly even recognize his own best friend, so intoxicated and overwhelmed with his artificial 'happiness'.

To me, we seek love as a high. So many books, stories, fairy tales, and even movies nowadays describe love as this high that takes a hold of your heart and turns you inside out and makes your stomach flutter with butterflies. What is love? Scientifically? It�s a chemical reaction in the brain that lasts for a maximum of six months before the endorphins are no longer produced in the brain. So my conclusion? Love doesn�t exist. �Love� as we understand it is not what love actually is. So that brings me to the question that if our �love� is an artificial high, what is real, true love? And where does it start and does it ever end?

Because it was easier to walk out of paradise then to be cast out.

Fucking beautiful, sweetheart. Fucking perfect. We can lie to ourselves, especially when we�re hurting. It�s easier on our hearts when we can say that we walked away from our happiness rather than admitting that it left us because of our own ridiculous mistakes. The hardest part about sinning is confession, and I despise anyone for making it look easier. For us to admit our sins is a humility that VERY few possess. Even fewer possess the emotion to feel remorse for their acts, and yet, we still throw away happiness just for the sake of pride. That thought leaves a foul taste in my mouth.

Perhaps, the horror of it was, that this... THIS...was the real Gohan.

This is my only flame on your story, my love. I see, in the story, that Trunks is fighting to remove each mask from his counterparts slowly, painfully, and brutally. I argue that we need these masks to survive, and nothing will convince me otherwise. I am the greatest liar. Even to you. To my husband. The only creature in the world to see my heart is my son. Because he can�t hurt me. Yet. Some people have an uncanny ability to see past the masks without ripping them off, and they are the people that get shunned the most. Why? Because they SCARE the hell out of people. Masks are to prevent pain. Maybe in denying our true selves, we cause the biggest pain of all, but I must conclude that I am a coward for wearing a mask. Solely not to be hurt.

But HIS identity was also upheld by the undefeatable reputation of his father. So when the great hero finally displayed some fucking mortality.... it crushed Gohan's entire world.

One of these days, I�ll tell you who my parents are and, you�ll understand why this kills me so bad. Fucking amazing, Todesengel. Fucking perfect.

Choking sounds made Mirai's stomach fluctuate with nausea, his eyes darting around to avoid having to see one of the greatest men he'd ever known choking the life from Trunks.

It occurred to me as I read the chapter that these two same people (or same person) look at the same man in two different ways. Mirai sees Gohan much like Gohan sees his father, and Trunks sees Gohan as a liar, and it disgusts him and pisses him off that Gohan wears such a thick mask. Maybe the both of them are just a little right. There is definitely a goodness in Gohan, but like the story says, human blood is full of greed and the lust for revenge. Our greatest weakness and our greatest strength.

"My hero," Gohan began to bawl with tearless eyes. "My fucking everything!!"
"Your lie." Trunks' voice said simply. "Your beautiful fucking lie."

Damn this is a long review. How could I not comment on this? How does that saying go? One man�s garbage is another man�s treasure. That�s right. How many things do we throw away that another man finds beautiful? Well, I�m going to flip that. How many things do we find beautiful that another man has broken and thrown away? I was broken and thrown aside, and yet, I�m still told I�m beautiful. It�s a fucking lie. No matter how beautiful I am on the inside, and no matter how people see me, I�m still not infallible.

Sometimes you have to destroy before you can create.

Wow. What a loaded statement. I see Trunks as the destroyer. He pulls everything down around him in ruins and stands over it, laughing, amused and happy with his destruction. Mirai? He is the creator. Where there is nothing. Where there is emptiness. He strives to build it back up, but the harshest part is that one could not exist without the other. Destruction and creation go hand in hand. I don�t know if I�ve demanded that you see FullMetal Alchemist yet, but in alchemy, the science, in order to create something, there are three steps. The first step is to assess the composition of the material. The second step is to break it down, and the third step is to reconstruct it. The Law of Equivalent Exchange says that everything must give to receive. Nothing extra can be taken away or added. Complete destruction. Complete creation. Complete power.

This was a wonderful chapter, hon. It really got me in some place. Maybe, I am Gohan. You asked me about my marriage, and you told me that you didn�t understand. When I explained it, seemed so painfully logical, but yet, it�s not. It blocks who I am inside, and it causes me to live a different lifestyle. My lie. My beautiful fucking lie.

BrucesGirl
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From ANON - Macha on January 04, 2006
This is going to be a short review, because I am already late for work as it is. *GRINS*

No wonder the Gohan Mirai met the other day was nothing but a shell of a man. Trunks really is breaking him in every fucking way.

And even if these things are the truth, what a sick fucking way to get it all out in the open. Somethings are just better left unsaid, unless of course, you enjoy the pain telling the truth will cause.

Excellent chapter, many MANY things to be thinking about on this one.
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From ANON - Kat on January 04, 2006
O.O This chapter was so... DISTURBING that I had to stop constantly and remember to breathe!! I LOVED it!! I swear, no other author I have ever come across has the talent that you do to say the absolute truth. I knew this chapter would be amazing, and it was. And you know, it's true what you said. People prefer someone who's honest, even if they are rotten inside, to someone who's nothing but a lie. God, that chapter was just so powerful!! Seriously, I cried, I laughed, I choked, I spent most of the time reading this remembering to close my mouth and swallow. I loved how brutal the fight was between Gohan and Trunks, and I thought it mirrored how brutally truthful Trunks was being with Gohan very well. OH, and the thing with ChiChi???!!! I scared the crap out of my mother because I yelled out, "WHAT???!!!!" very loudly. I would have never thought of that in a million years, and it was such a devastating blow to Gohan that I couldn't blame Mirai for what he yelled at Trunks. Funny though, I find myself unable to feel pity for Gohan. I thought I did earlier when Mirai visited him, but what happened, though it thoroughly broke Gohan, was necessary. After all, it only broke a shell, a mask, and now we can get to the real Gohan inside. Interesting how this makes such a different reaction in Trunks than the memory with Goku did. With the first memory, Trunks seemed to see himself as a monster, unjustified in his own past actions. In the memory with Gohan however, Trunks seems to feel that he is justified in what he has done up until now. The difference is staggering... especially when this memory is so much more grotesque. Uggghhh... I gagged when Gohan was shoving his fingers in Trunks's chest. I wonder why that wound hasn't healed?? There's probably a whole bunch more fascinating details that I could touch on, but I think I'll end it there. Oh, except I almost forgot about the part with Goten... The very fact that Trunks felt that way with Goten and gave it up is so unbelievably sad. I couldn't help but feel that Trunks should have that happiness with Goten. My heart was quite literally in pain while I was reading that passage. I know that you already know the ending to your own story, but whatever the outcome, I hope that Goten is a part of Trunks's life. I know I probably already said that, but it's true; Goten is what Trunks needs if he would only let himself be happy. Okay, I'm really done now. As always, this was a terrific chapter and I cannot wait to read more of your undeniably brilliant work!!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on January 04, 2006
*is speechless*

Words cannot completely express the awe you inspired in me with your amazing talent in this story.

It's just so vivid!

I'll happily wait for more.
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From ANON - Kat on December 28, 2005
Oooo... a new chapter!!! I was so happy when I got home from visiting my relatives to see that Chapter 19 was up!! I've had no sleep in about two days, but I couldn't think of sleeping until I read this chapter and as always, I'm so glad that I did. This chapter was awesome, I think that the memory device is a genius move. It's fascinating to see Trunks's reaction to seeing himself acting like an emotionless monster. After all, distancing yourself from a memory can't really work all that well, now can it?? You know, what with hindsight being 20/20 and all. I, like Mirai, found myself hypnotized more by his feeling nauseous than the way he was seducing Goku. The idea of Goku seeing his actions with Trunks as medicine and not getting emotionally involved really relieved me. For some reason, I cannot see Goku ever falling for Trunks, mostly because of his interactions with Vegeta. So, I think the way that you handled that went beautifully. Oh, and Gohan's next huh?? I can't wait for that one. I'm so very interested in seeing Trunks's reaction to what his past self did to Gohan, especially after his reaction to the memory with Goku. I realized something while reading this chapter that I never realized before. I've often told you how I love your descriptions and how as a person who learns things visually, I can picture everything in your stories clearly. Well, I just realized that one major reason why your stories are so easy to picture is because you focus on all five senses. The scene where Trunks and Mirai are looking at the mourners and you descibe the smell of the grass, the exquisite colors of the sky, the wind moving through Bulma's hair... Your descriptions are so clear because they encompass the entire surroundings, down to the smallest part, and I could not be more grateful to you for that. Every time I read something new of yours, I see something else about it that's brilliant and it fascinates me. Anyways, this is truly a great chapter and I, as always, eagerly look forward to more^-^!!
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From ANON - Houou on December 27, 2005
Undoubtly your best chapter yet.
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From Kugatsu on December 26, 2005
I read this all the way through last night but due to keyboard problems couldn't submit. I just have to say I'm drawn in. I just reflected how time and time again the DBZ fandom portrays some of the best writing I've ever seen on AFF.net.

I think it's because the authors here and you as well, are reaching for a greater potential when you write your fanfictions about Dragon Ball Z. You're adding so much depth to what could be a very shallow story to begin with, you know the whole fighters saving teh world (let's not even talk about the whole GT mess).

I love what you and other authors are doing here and I put you right up there with my favorites in this fandom. I really really look forward to an update and I hope i mentioned how sucked in I was -I couldn't stop reading honestly. I just, it's wonderful, I hope you know that.
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From ANON - chayron on December 26, 2005
Sci-fi? Mirai plays a role of the psychologist - it’s like hypnosis, only with special effects. And the patient can be involved and see his own reaction. So convenient!

So Trunks was bothered by his father’s words, after all. I thought he wouldn’t be. Well, yeah, not so much because of his words, but because of his own reaction to them.

It seems Mirai is making some progress; Trunks hadn’t been comfortable while watching his “conquest” at the grave. Though, I think that Trunks can start boasting about another conquest – Mirai is almost his. I wonder how this is going to end. Even though Mirai feels and sees that Trunks is starting to consider his behavior, starts thinking about his reasoning, it might happen that it will never be enough of this. Both of them would be badly burned in that case. Ah well.

Trunks just loves using his Saiyan side as an excuse for what he’s doing. He’s a damn coward. It’s easier for him to ignore one side of his, than to deal with them both. Everything happens to others but not to him. And he wants it to stay like that; he wants to keep that brick wall between him and his emotions, between himself and other people. He just loved to believe the tale that his father is a Saiyan, and Saiyans just live for fighting and sex and don’t care about anything else in the world. Spoiled brat. But while a child he could have an excuse, but as he grew older it got too serious, and he still believes that tale, and even if it tears apart his soul, even if it kills him, he still won’t accept that his belief and wish are wrong. I really hope Mirai can help this bullet-head.

I loved everything you said about Gohan and power. It’s so damn true! He always has been afraid that it would take over his mind completely, become his undeniable part, and there would be no way back. He always felt the need to answer everyone else’s hopes; to be more Human as his mother wished, to be more Saiyan as his father and as the dangerous circumstances demanded. Poor kid.

Waiting for update and getting ready for another trip to Trunks’ head.

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From ANON - ~anz~ on December 26, 2005
Wow...intense...magnificent! So well written...

...words cannot describe the feelings and emotions this story has provoked...

I must say: Trunks uncaring and unfeeling...the epitome of narcissim...a serously spoiled brat!!
well he is a prince...an alien...stronger and more powerful than any human, and he saved the world...so yes he suffers from delusions of grandeur and he is filled with righteous power. As the saying goes: power corrupts and absolute power corrupts absolutely: and our little guy has both: In Spades!!!!

One must commend him for having the presence of mind to snap back from what is obviously a mind shattering experience; the flipside of what was once a mind blowing experience. At first was the lust of the hunt and the thrill of the kill...only to get slapped in the face by the reality of his actual conduct... he himself as the ultimate predator... unfeeling, uncaring.

But the essence of the encounter is this: he is a hunter...deadly and accurate in persuit of his prey... only now he is thwarted at every turn by his nemesis... and mirai is his nemesis...in addition to the other crap...he comes in second to his other self...

As for the thrill of the kill and the lust for power... he was a very powerful being at a very early age... a fused being... part of the euphoria he felt was a result of his fusion with Goten... neither are whole, both are broken... after having tasted perfection...

Our young princeling...a hybrid, a fused being, misses that power...that taste....

the longing was so overwhelming he chose an alternate form of addiction... that of the predator...and he is deadly and accurate in his trade.... so what if his rival found a way to 'color' one of his most cherished memories... the end more than justifies the means... he is persuing the ultimate challenge... he is high on the ultimate drug... the thrill of the chase...
which happens to be the most powerful aphrodisiac of all.

The answer is so simple...yet so complex...he misses the power... the euphoric feeling he had when he was Gotenks... he can never recapture that ... not as a single entity...

As for the full bloods: Vegetto was a helluva power trip for them also...

As for Goku mourninig the loss of ChiChi and being inconsolable... hell he didn't love her... he was probably regretting all the time he abandoned her... or mourning the fact that she knew he never really loved her...hell knows...I wonder what she said to him on her deatbed to make him wail like a banshee...and knowing her...it probably was pretty nasty...and she did get the last word... bedding the brat was probably the best sex he had in his life...and he used him ... used the brat... for phyisical release... til the thrill of the hunt meant destroying someone else...

Kudos to Mirai for finding a way to 'see' and allow Trunks to 'see' himself as he persued his conquests...a very interesting turn of events...but he has his work cut out for him... our young princeling is very resilient and a hard sell...

it's gonna be very interesting to see his reaction to his other conquests...

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From ANON - Galacia on December 26, 2005
this is still going great I can't wait to see the next installment!!
Really I am not kidding you. I am really enjoying this! You don't know who to feel sorry for in this story. Although I am rooting
for both Trunks and Mirai to find happiness if they can. Gee I guess the dead body remark did get to Trunks.

Cant wait to see what other memories they poke around in.
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From ANON - Jay FicLover on December 25, 2005
To Bruce's Girl: Yeah, I agree, there's something so erotic about the forbidden, yet it only lasts for that little while... Argh, these experiences show tempation exists, don't you think? I hate it when my body's needs cloud my true heart and my rational mind.

Generally speaking, I think there's something erotic about sexually conforting a person that you secretly like and always knew deep down you can't have... It's like the feverish pursuit of a challenge. But we can't just ignore that there are other ways to give comfort. I guess love is when you fall inlove with your friend: someone you can trust that will take care of you, like you for who you are and respect you...and the sex can come later. I think Trunks wanted to ease Goku's pain as a means to forget his own, whatever that might be: lonlieness, being misunderstood, not being able to relate to anyone, abandonment, rejection, inferiority complex... whatever.

And it sounds like I was right: hybrids ARE crazy! *snickers*

By the way, Bruce's Girl, did you try talking with the guy and apologizing? I'm sure things were pretty different between the two of you from then on... but it's stilla good start to try and mend things a bit.
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From BrucesGirl on December 24, 2005
I think this is the best chapter you've written so far and let me tell you why. There is a depth to this chapter that is scraped across the the top and then seeped into every word.

Memories have a funny way of changing. Each experience we have changes our reaction to our past actions time after time, proving that progression does exist. I have a particularly terrible memory of something that I did. I met a beautiful couple, and we were great friends. The man was gorgeous, half Italian, half white with beautiful, emerald green eyes, and his wife...well...she was just as beautiful. They went through a pretty nasty divorce, and while the guy worked at night, I kept his kids for him when he got custody of them. He loved his wife more than anything on the Earth, and without her, we was an empty shell of a man with nothing to live for except to raise his children.

Well, one night, he came home from work, tired, exhausted, sore, and I took advantage of his pain and exhaustion. At the time, it was erotic, and probably the best sex I've ever had, but now, when I look back on it, I'm disgusted by my actions. Myrril trusted me, and I betrayed him by using him as nothing more than a piece of ass. He's still a good guy, and I have to say he's the best father I've ever seen.

What it boils down to is that the best memory I used to have has now become my most shameful. I look at myself and wonder if what I did was worth the night that I spent with him, and I have to say no. Beautiful as he is, the act itself was disgusting and ugly, and I'll never look at it any other way. The power of experience is amazing. Isn't it?

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From ANON - Macha on December 23, 2005
Well, that was rather interesting. *blinks* Firstly how Trunks reacted to his own memories. I didn't think he had any regrets about what had happened, but unless the device is having some sort of side effects, he wasn't very happy at what he was reliving.

Now, the part where Goku was just using Trunks as medicine. Hm ... I guess everyone has their flaws, I am just surprised this was Goku's, but they were both getting what they wanted without either of them getting hurt: great sex with no attachments.

WHOOOT! Does this mean I get to see what happened between Trunks and Gohan now? *really hopes so*

Great job as usual.

BTW... I am away from home, so I don't have access to my MSN or email. Have a Happy New Year if you don't hear from me sooner.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on December 23, 2005
Marai is making progress with Trunks... slowly.

At the same time, Trunks is making progress with Marai.

Irony.

Your descriptions and the way you convey their feelings and thoughts is fabulous!!! Keep up the great work.
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From ANON - ~anz~ on December 23, 2005
Awesome...truly awesome...

I just read all eighteen chapters...so II will comment on chapter eigtheen first:

The little narcissist has met his match. Imagine...all this time living with the false assumption that no one could resist his charms, only to find out that the object of his desire, was not fighting his attraction for him, but his desire to kill him...

Imagine...finding out that the one you want, the one you crave...the one whose lust you perceive...isn't the lust of the flesh, but the lust of the kill...

The narcissist now has awakened what he truly desired...the lust for the kill...except he's already dead...! Dead to the one he craves...poetic justice! The brat just found out he's living on borrowed time!

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Mirai has questioned Goten, seen Gohan and been tempted by Trunks... I cannot wait to see what Goku has to say... his perspective should be very interesting... as interesting as Gotens...

Vegeta is as ruthless as ever... and unless he changes, he will kill his son about his Kakarott. The Little Narcissist has only til his mother closes her eyes... then all bets are off...

I love it....can't wait to see the outcome...

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