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Reviews for Strong Heart

By : Camaro

From ANON - Kat on December 20, 2005
OMG, that was fucking amazing!! I think I spent the entire time reading chapter 18 with my mouth wide open in shock. God, that was simply brilliant. Once again, I have to say that your ability to describe everything perfectly clearly will never cease to amaze me. I almost thought for a moment that Vegeta was going to do it, but then he pulled back and said THAT to Trunks. My God, I just don't know what else to say. This story is horrible, gross, disturbing, and I absolutely LOVE it. I'm really seeing a comparison to Bulma and humanity in this story, which is sad when you think about how everytime someone mentions her, they talk about how she's wasting away and dieing. Oh, and Gohan??? I would have never expected that scenario out of him, which is why I loved it so much. And your concept of love??? I, just like most people, think only of flowers and teenagers when I think of love. Not anymore, because as sick as those two illustrations were that you portrayed in such a detailed fashion, I realize that they are forms of love too. You simply must continue on with this story, as I cannot wait to read more and be shocked and appalled by the truth, as I only am with your stories. So, please, please continue this VERY soon!! Oh, BTW, whatever Trunks feels for Goten and whatever happens regarding those two in the future of this story, I love it!! Very few people can pull off what you do when you write. You show every aspect of human nature and offer no apologies or rationalizations for that. Whatever writing you do in the future, whatever the outcome of this story, I just want to say thank-you for posting it and sharing it with me and others^-^!!
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From BrucesGirl on December 19, 2005
You know, I went through the story again. I do that a lot with your stories. There's something that turns me on about this story, and I finally pressed my finger on the inexplicable draw I have towards Trunks. While I do harbor compassion inside of me, I have a distinct distaste for reasonless love, and I find myself disgusted with the simple explanation that makind gives it.

Mirai knows love. He knows the facets of it, and he knews the pain and nightmares that love can bring. Part of me knows this too, and yet, I cling to compassion as a relief from the constant pain.

Do you think me a coward?
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From ANON - Grey on December 19, 2005

Whow! O_O
THAT was THE most mind blowing fanfic on DBZ i've read in a LOOOOONG time!
I'm certianly awed and shunned by your writing skills, not to mention your knowledge within the very words. Be it imagination or expirience, its damn good to read did i mention so forking enojyable to read?!

Keep this up and you'll have me mentally disturbed (not like i'm not already) *laughs* ANd thats a compliment mate! ^^
I love how you can describe blood and gore yet capture the pure beauty and story behind it all. It's like drowning but still being able to breathe.

2 words mate.
ABSOLUTELY AMAZING ^_~

Please do update soon, looking forward to it!
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From ANON - saffronchan on December 17, 2005
that was amazing pleas wright more patiantly weighting

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From TempestRojata on December 16, 2005
OMG! I love it already. That was fucked up, but brilliant! I wonder how the wife will react....
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From ANON - NUTSY the one and only on December 15, 2005
Wow. That was good. Although I doubt that Vegeta's last remark is going to mean anything to Trunks.
So what is going to happen now? ARe we going to learn where Goku went?
Continue Mirai's journey to "Fix" Trunks? (Good luck Mirai you're going to need it!)
How about some updates on Gohan and Goten? Are they going to stop being wusses and improve their lives or what?

Please continue I am really getting into this

NUTSY the one and only
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From ANON - CC-chainsawgames on December 15, 2005
Wow. That last part of this chapter is AMAZING. GO. Vegeta. YAY! This is one of the best portrayals of him I have read, and Trunks is also up there. I love that last little bit though, it REALLY sticks out as amazing. Thank you for writing this! Anyone hoping to write anything, fanfiction or otherwise, should learn some things from you. I love the story, keep it up!
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From ANON - Lady Gray on December 14, 2005
Dark, painful, beautiful, you are a gifted writer.
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From ANON - Jay FicLover on December 14, 2005
I pity Trunks, I really do. Who was he trying to punish, back there? Vegeta or himself? Or may be the both of them?

Is it obsession, or is it addiction, or both? I bet Trunks has given up on *himself*, right? He gives Vegeta priority over fucking Mirai, why is that? Is it because, unlike Mirai, Vegeta was once like himself, heartless, unrestricted, and now isn't anymore? Is Trunks trying to prove that people like himself and his father really don't change?

What kind of act of betrayal did Vegeta do against his son, to make him so obsessed with him? Was Vegeta the obsession Trunks insinuated he and Mirai truly shared? Or does Trunks feel unloved cause his father always "pretended" to care for him at least by human standards, like Bulma nagged at him to, but never showed pride in him as a saiyan? As a hybrid?

Oh, wait, wait, I got it! Human blood and saiyan blood mix makes the child a lunatic! I knew all the hybrids of DBZ were nuts!!! Look at Gohan dressing as Saiyaman, just look at him! *Jumps up and down in happiness at having found the answer to the mystery*

Trunks is starting to make ME bored... All those "sensible" speeches and ranting when all he really is full of is empty words that don't mean anything. I'm waiting patiently for the explanation that will give them meaning... 8Cause I don't recall reading the letters PWP, "Plot What Plot?" in your summary.

To put it midly, Ive been having my fair share of hardships lately, in REAL LIFE I mean, hope they're finally over, and Trunks is trying my emphaty limits. If in the next chapter he still hasn't cut with the whinning shit, I suggest you focus on the other characters and show that poor baby what it is to be taken off the spotlight.... He thinks himself so damn special, I'm about to vomit here.

So Mirai failed in showing him he isn't special... Why doesn't he make Trunks meet players, hookers, giggolos...People who sell their bodies, in a sense, like Trunks? Would that show him how alienating that kind of activity can be? Who are the prostitutes that work because they need to feed their families sacrificing themselves, and who are the ones that live that life cause they're twisted and/or don't know any way out of that life or that there is another possible way of living?
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From ANON - chayron on December 14, 2005
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Thank gods – you kept Vegeta. I already was scared that Vegeta might go all the way - would have been such a disappointment.

Trunks is gonna be pissed… Oh, how he’s gonna be pissed. He almost got it and then… "It'd be like fucking a dead body…" I wondered if Trunks will get upset, maybe even sad and think of it. Though, nah, probably he’ll only get pissed and will pester Vegeta even more.

Gosh, loved this chapter! Truly, truly loved!

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From ANON - rena sama on December 14, 2005
My god... Trunks is SUCH a bastard!! I mean of course I knew this from the very first paragraph of the very first chapter, but for some reason his interaction with Bejiita in chapter 18 just epitomized his asshole-ness for me. Trunks never seemed as offensive and audacious as he does when jeering his father about what he thinks he SHOULD have done with Gokuu years ago. It actually hurt ME to read that. I guess I can only imagine what Jiita must have felt hearing it. ><

Really well done story. This chapter especially. Reading Strong Heart always manages to make me incredibly angry. Which is almost impossible to do, as I almost NEVER get angry about anything, ever. Don't take it the wrong way, I love the story of course. It manages to pull emotions from me that I'd hardly feel otherwise. I guess that makes you a bit of a genius then, hmm?

yer pal
-Rena
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From BrucesGirl on December 14, 2005
The power of obsession is like the power of greed. It's an all consuming fire that rakes through a person's being and contorts their life to exactly what it wants them to be with no remorse to their heart. Love can be painful. It's a powerful tool, emotion, or even weapon. It destroys and builds, and yet, it kills and brings back to life. How can something so wonderful be so terrible?

Love is a perfect concept given to imperfect beings who have twisited it with their weaknesses, and yet, they still seek the pain for all that they are worth because they find at least one spot of happiness in the deep dark of life. The perfect light that love was supposed to be in the beginning.

Love....heh. You know how I view it. You and I are the black and white to the balance of life, hon. Where I take the deep gasping breath after breaking the surface of the water, you remain below, looking up at the surface, reminding yourself that if you take that deep breath, you'll just go right back under again. Maybe you're the smarter one, but I still live for that one breath. After all...it's the sweetest moment of life. Isn't it?
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From ANON - Lyoko Freasion on December 14, 2005
You are a brillant and talented author. I was amazed at how well this story has come together, and how twisted Trunks is. Honestly you are just as good, if not better than the great Camarao, author of another great Fan Fic called monster. I give this story a 11/10. Keep up the kick ass work.

-Lyoko

P.S. Nice depiction of Mirai!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on December 13, 2005
Trunks is more bothered than he'd like to admit. And Vegeta got him good.

I can't wait to read what happens next!

Keep it up.
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From ANON - Hellagoddess on December 13, 2005
My. God.

I love this fiction...I can't believe i waited so bloody long to read it...
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