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By : Camaro

From chayron on November 22, 2005
Gods, that was a good lesson. One moment emotionless, and another moment too emotional. Yep, and with the power comes the feeling of being a God, an avenger. Though…actually…I think that there was a possibility that Trunks just used that as an excuse to get his hands “dirty”.

A line between revenge and justice can become so tiny sometimes… And those Vegeta’s words about his indulgence in revenge: “Or better yet, it was a reason or excuse for me to make people look as ugly on the outside as I felt on the inside.” This is so right. So damn right!

I think that from all the chapters I read this is my favorite [(well, not because of all that gore and such – even though it was damn good written (the eyes and brains under Trunks fingernails…Gods, I could feel the slime under my own fingernails… Yuck! But damn good!)]. It’s just…I read and wonder and admire. I think what’s the point knowing and digging so deep inside us; the ignorance is so convenient… Each chapter is like a slap to my face. And each time I can’t wait to get another one.

LOVE THIS STORY!

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From ANON - Webtester01 on November 22, 2005
Yes! Progress is being made. Now Trunks is trying harder than ever to not feel agian.

I'm speechless otherwise.

Keep it up.
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From ANON - lady gray on November 21, 2005
wow, what an intense story, i hope you keep updating.
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From ANON - You Know Who This Is (A B to the G) on November 12, 2005
gaaaaaah, *bites* WHY CAMARO? Why?! God, the sap in me wants everyone to get together and LOVE..

but no, just kill them all off.

except for Trunks and Mirai. I want them stranded on an island without their ki. Tangy yummy yaoi sex.

But seriously..what was my favorite part out of the whole thing, was the "pieces" part about the raped girl. I mean..that was so deep that it'd ruin it to call it deep. And there! I ruined it! Aha! BVaah, my brain is shit right now so this review sucks. I shouldn't even try sometimes.
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From BrucesGirl on November 12, 2005
Hello dear. I read over the story again, reading more into this time after our conversation, and I'm going to post a couple of snippits from a harsh blog note that I wrote a while ago.

There is something to be said for the so-called simple feeling of affection. You see, affection is the doorway to many a problem, be it love, hatred, or even plain complacency. Affection is a thorn in the side of all people, and let me explain why:

Through affection, people fall in love. Now love, in itself, is not a terrible thing, but when you look at it closer, love is why there are so many abandoned wives or husbands. Love is why so many people are unhappy. The LACK of love suggests war and at the worst, genocide. It's a rather complex emotion, really, and because of it's complexity, it has the ability to make or break mankind.

Thinking strictly on the individual level, love is wolfsbane to me. (A poison.) You see, I value my freedom over everything, but love has this ability to slap me upside the head and forget whatever freedom I've wished for. When I finally fall into love's trap, I find myself miserable and incomplete. Nothing in my life is more important than being free. Well, except for my son.

So needless to say, I find that love is a burden that breaks me everytime it touches me. It may be very cynical and pessimistic to say what I am, but it is true that love is nothing more than a chemical reaction in your brain that lasts for a month at the most. It is human will that maintains relationships forever, and so be it said that humans were never meant to be lifelong partners. It is fate that I, a married woman, would come to that realization and hold onto my will to remain married to my husband.

Even more than that, I don't believe in love as the all powerful glue that holds the world together, and I don't believe in love at first sight. Maybe I'm just a bitter, spiteful, jaded woman, but to me, love is nothing more than just a temporary feeling that passes on when the high is gone.
This is why I value friendship so very much. This isn't a high and it isn't a crutch to help people feel like they are worth something. Friends are simply companions who help you along in life with no questions as to your loyalty, who you are having sex with, and without asking for blood in return for favors.

So to those of you would call me a cynical bitch, I will tell you this: Realism, unlike love, has never hurt anyone. It's never killed anyone. It's just real. At the bottom of the wishing well, when all the wishes have been dealt out, the only thing that remains is reality. A reality without love is a reality without pain.

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From chayron on November 11, 2005
Kind of an unexpected turn I'd say... But it explains so many things and with such a good validity... Very interesting, so Gohan beat Cell because he was mad that his beloved Mirai died, and not his father? Love this idea! New points of view always make me so happy!

Once again - beautifully done: maximum feeling, maximum emotion and even more reasons to read.

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From ANON - Saffron on November 08, 2005
this is an awsom story pleas keep wrighting i want to read more
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From BrucesGirl on November 07, 2005
Great update! You've still got my heart in my throat the entire story. *soft smile* You sure you didn't write this about someone besides Trunks? It's very heartfelt.
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From ANON - Jay FicLover on November 04, 2005
Ahhh I think I now what's wrong with Trunks now: he's always lived under the shadow of Mirai and of what people expected from Mirai's look alike. My be that's why he has such conflictive feelings towards Goten: Goten never met Mirai, so he loved Trunks for himself and not the time-travelller Trunks they had met earlier, the hero, the savior of Goku and their world.... May be Trunks is torn between not bearing to live always trying to fill Mirai's shoes, and at the same time being afraid of finding himself to be any less than Mirai.

Did I finally get it?
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From ANON - Macha on November 04, 2005
Ah... you are starting to spoil me. Three chapters in less than a week? YAY (is happy for me.)

Wow... Gohan has really had a long time to think about all of this. Most people aren't that knowledgeable of themselves to be that honest about themselves and what is making them tick. Mirai is really lucky that Gohan is willing to talk about the situation. (Which I am happy about, because I wanted to know.) And even though he knows the truth about himself, he is still going on. Mirai's reaction to his admission, and then Gohan telling him to chill, because he wasn't expecting feelings to be returned. Wow... that had to be hard.

And on to the other one. O.O Oh no... Trunks is going to go and find the reason for this most recent emotional upheaval and put a stop to it... isn't he. *covers eyes with hand* No Trunks... That wasn't the lesson Mirai was trying to show you. *sighs*

Excellent chapter... and even though I have put a lot down here... there is still a lot I am processing. (Again with the WOW... kind of overwhelmed.)
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From ANON - aligirl on November 04, 2005
you need to put a disclaimer on your fic before they delete it. It would be a shame to lose your fic and all of your reviews on this site for such a little thing.
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From ANON - Lyokofreeze on November 04, 2005
True Genius. This story touches my heart and mind in a way only Monster by Camaro did... both different lessons, but both mystically haunting. Props to this author and hope that they update soon.
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From BrucesGirl on November 04, 2005
I love this story, and I'm enamored with your writing ability. It is very fluid and very poised. I'm intensely enjoying this story! Great job!
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From ANON - CaviaPorcellus on November 04, 2005
Ha ha! The new organization of the site has allowed me to review this! I never could find the damned review button before now. Anyways... To the point.
I love this story, it's amazing. I was so worried it would never have another update, so happy when I saw the new chapters. I'm not sure where it's going right now, which is usually a good thing, although this latest chapter seems a little less... Refined than usual. Your early chapters set a very high bar, and I'm not sure if chapter 14 was quite there... But that's just a thought, it will always be a good story, so long as you're writing it. =P
Any chance of updating certain other stories....? ^.~
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From ANON - Macha on November 03, 2005
Oh my... What is Mirai doing there? I bet that wasn't the response he was hoping for when he went in search of Gohan.

Hm.... Looks like Trunks has a lot of reflecting to do. Even though Susan opened her eyes, and he could tell that she wasn't 'all there', it probably brought up more questions than it answered to have her wake up and look at him.

Did you check the hit count? I think some people may have been too shocked to actually make a comment on the last chapter. There was certainly more than enough to think about, let alone have already formed thoughts on. (enough to make a comment/reveiw)

Excellent job. I can't wait to see what Gohan's response is going to be to having Mirai show it. It may very well depend on what Mirai's motivations are for being there in the first place.
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