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By : boricuaboi
  • From ANON - Primeboob on March 27, 2005
    Good story. But please, NO BOYS! I want Gohan to pursue only girls like Bulma, Snow, Launch and Mrs. Briefs (all the gals he knew before the cell games).
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  • From ANON - LaRieaux on March 27, 2005
    why am I the only one who left their email address?
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  • From ANON - LaRieaux on March 27, 2005
    I agree jay fic lover but you've got to be a virgin to say shit like 'chichi had multiple orgasms as gohan sucked her titties'
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  • From ANON - SSGohanStrife on March 27, 2005
    Next should be Bulma or 18, just any girl
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  • From ANON - The Chichi Slaughter House (a.k.a. Disgusted) on March 27, 2005
    Hello again! *coughs, looking at everyone nervously* Does anyone know what I am? Well...I don't care lol. I'll tell ya anyway. A 15 year old virgin :P With a high IQ of course.

    Oh, and Camaro? I know about King Dong because of my mum. No joke here. Seriously. My mum (for a strange reason) told me when I was 13 and I'm sorry for him myself. An erection would kill him because of the lack of blood everywhere else, so god knows how he became a porn star... *coughs again* Glad you came and delivered Camaro. *bows*
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  • From on March 27, 2005
    I know I have written some of the crappies stories this website has ever seen but damn.I'm not trying to be mean so I'll say it needs some work, and this seems like it was written by a 12-year old virgin.A woman cant cum multiple times from gettin their tits sucked on.Make your stories more detailed and they will begreay trust me. Thi is a very gentle review compared to some of the review I've gotten.
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  • From ANON - Jay FicLover on March 26, 2005
    Haven't read this story cause I thought the reviews section would be funnier... and it was.

    Hehe, Camaro, lorofthepies, Disgusted: I only hope people keep writting stuff like this so I can get to read more of your flames, they're 100% more amusing than the actual stories. ^_^

    And Camaro: an author doesn't need to be a virgin to write such a crappie sex scene, really. I have met virgins who are great lemon writers... It's got to do more with the IQ, then, I guess?

    What some people don't understand is that porn can also be good or poor in quality. Just because there's sex it doesn't make it good porn authomatically.
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  • From ANON - Inferno on March 26, 2005
    I like the story plot. please please don't put gohan haveing sex with any boys. try and make the chapters longer like 4 pages on microsoft word also more graphic.
    I recomend ever Erasa, lime, bulma or 18 save videl for last.try and put some threesoms in (mff) some good threesoms coples would be gohan/bulma/chichi, gohan/erasa/videl, gohan/videl/18, gohan/chichi/18, gohan/videl/chichi or gohan/videl/bulma
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  • From ANON - lordofthepies on March 26, 2005
    Thank you Camaro, you have delivered. Very amusing.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2005
    Ahem* I have arrived. Well, this isn't that bad. It sucks, don't get me wrong.. but it's about at a thin line between Suckville and Pretty-damn-bad-wouldn't-show-my-mother Land.

    First of all, Chi Chi in a see-through night gown? Have we all not witnessed the frigid, dried up shrew-bitch that is Chi Chi? Good God man, would you THINK?!

    10 inch Monster though.... ::shakes head:: man, I know you guys wanted me to tear this shit up but damn hahaha, I gotta admit I LOVE the wording. I keep expecting anything now... this shit is unpredictable... any time now... it's gonna be his "wild love dragon", "The Gohan Express", "The personal love shack", "Little red riding hood's big basket" "Love meat"... God, it could be anything.

    But Love juice? LOVE JUICE?!! OH MY GOD! Are you serious?! Well shit, I'll give ya creativity points for the embarrassment. I can only imagine some poor poor schmutz opening up the refrigerator.

    "Oh! Don't drink that.. that's my LOVE juice"..

    0.0

    Good lord.. have you no shame? HOT LOVE BOX?

    And let me just get this straight for the sake of laughing later.... Chi Chi is having multiple orgasms from him touching her boobs? ::raises hand:: Who here wants a swig of whatever kinda twisted monkey mojo juice that bitch has been drinking? Gotta love it when virgins write sex scenes. Soon ya get words like "Entrance Anal" hopping in there... sick sick shit.

    Does anyone else here freaking LOVE how twisted the wording is? It's all so.. contradicting. Ya get crazy words like "Hot love box" in there and then all of a sudden pussy, cunt, meat....BALLS?! JeSUS!

    The only way you could have possibly made this already vomit-inducing story any sicker would be to have Gohan call her "mom" when he talks dirty.

    "Ok, I'm gonna fuck you doggy-style mommy"... "Ooohhhhh yeah, you like that do ya mommy?" ::spank spank:: "You've been a dirrty dirrty mommy, haven't ya?"

    ::nods head:: Yeah.. yeah, that'd do it. That'd send me sprawled out on the floor, diving for the nearest toilet. I will NOT sleep tonight.

    So I'm just gonna be straight. I didn't like this.. in fact, I'm gonna do this story a favor, print it up and use it as toilet paper for the next week. That way it'll come in handy and actually have a purpose, ok? And "who should his next victim be? boy or girl?" Who here already feels like a victim for reading this crap? Yep, ol' Gohan and his great big unbelievable basket had his way with us today.

    Camaro

    PS.. Oh, and Disgusted, while it disturbs me that you know that information hahaha, I for one would like to meet King Dong.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2005
    this is incredibly sick and disgusting. I didn't like this fic at all, it totally sucked, you are a bad writer and you give a bad name to most of the writer's out there
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  • From ANON - Disgusted on March 26, 2005
    WHERE IS CAMARO WHEN YOU NEED HER????? THIS IS UTTER BOLLOCKS... *shudders* Eugh...well..it was a little better than Gohan raping Pan, but...seriously...Gohan is sick...and so OOC I can't believe it!!!

    'The door then quietly opened and Gohan walked in and sat right by his mother. As soon as he saw his mother his cock went hard.' Eugh...just...eugh.

    'She quickly opened her eyes and saw Gohan’s ten inch monster.' The biggest 'dick' of all time is about 18 inches and belongs to the porn star King Dong, look it up if you don't believe me.

    'Chi-Chi then grabbed his meat and slowly jacked it off.
    “Gohan that’s the biggest piece of meat I’ve ever seen,” she groaned.' 'Meat'? You're so eloquent with this, please, do write a love poem.

    'After gulping her love juice he cleaned her pussy walls of it with his tounge.' Again, very eloquent. 'pussy' and 'love juices' are SUCH a turn on.

    '“Okay I’m gonna fuck you doggie style!” She then stood on all fours and stuck her ass out. Gohan then mounted her and slid his dick inside her hot love box and pumped into her faster and harder each time until they both climaxed and cummed at the same time.' First off, it's CAME at the same time, not cummed. You were in present tense, weren't you? Keep it the same! Also, 'love box' Oh great, now it's a 'love box' is it??

    Eugh! JUST SICK!! Write more, and get more flames. This story is unbelievably bad.

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  • From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2005
    I think that it should be a girl.
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  • From ANON - lordofthepies on March 26, 2005
    Well, it was better than 50cent's pile of crap...just... I'll give you that. Gohan was more in character.

    *is waiting for Camaro to come and post something to amuse the living daylights out of me*

    *cannot be bothered*

    What the hell is wrong with this sudden explosion of shite? Poor AFF, we're going to have to get buckets of disinfectant for this. I think this is one of the better ones too.

    My advice: Try to use more eloquent language. I know no one is perfect, but "Love juice" is not eloquent in any way you use it.

    Please don't post anymore chapters. You wasted AFF's database resources with this. I hope you're happy.
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