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Reviews for Envious Intentions

By : DrkAlchemist
  • From Azumichan on April 06, 2008
    Your spelling is off, but the story is good so far. I would suggest spacing out the words more into paragraphs, it does make it easier to read. So far I like the story. Envy should get his ass kicked for saying such things to Ed though, who asked that cross dressing palm tree . . . anyway, can't wait to read the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Felix on November 06, 2006
    I think its nice tho also a bit unclear
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  • From ANON - Tahiri on January 10, 2006
    I like this, update soon please, it would be a little easier if you gave a bit of detail to where he's kept because i couldn't really get the concept of being frozen in ice but not, just a suggestion.
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  • From ANON - Sakura-sabn on December 17, 2005
    Waii! Can't get enough! Update soon!
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  • From ANON - Spark on September 12, 2005
    ARE YOU EVER GOING TO UP DATE!!! AHHHH!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - AJAngelique on September 05, 2005
    MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Debbie on August 23, 2005
    Hey, great story! I love how you use so much descripttion in your story, it makes it very entertaining to read! Just one suggestion, though; more paragraghs. I don't mean make it longer, just punctuate your story a bit better. I know it's a pain, and it's sometimes hard to know where a thought ends, but you really need to use paragraphs more effectively. That is the ONLY thing that is keeping this story from being an absolutly AWESOME read! Hell, if you want, I'll be a beta reader for you. It absolutly kills me to see a story as good as this held back by something as stupid as grammar.
    If you're interested in my beta-ing your stories (which I would LOVE to do!) drop me an e-mail! I may be picky to the point of insanity, but isn't that a good trait in a beta? ^_^ Any-who love love LOVE the story!
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  • From ANON - Spark on June 22, 2005
    UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!! ^__^
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  • From Tamura on April 08, 2005
    sounds good. there are so far envy/ed pairings as is.
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  • From DrkAlchemist on March 28, 2005
    Thank you sooo Much hun!!!*huggles*I will post the Second chapther as soooon as Im done hand to god^^
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  • From ANON - Cringe on March 28, 2005
    hate you? No way, I loove you! MOOORE!
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