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Reviews for Finding One Another

By : jedimaster107
  • From Kalendral9 on December 31, 2008
    Tear Jerker!! One of the best!! Oh I hope you don't abandon this story. This is Awesome!! Any more to come?? Please?? K
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  • From ANON - Guice on July 23, 2006
    SWEEEEET!!! XD well thats for all you have written. It's hard to come by good Gohan/Vegeta fics...well its hard to come by them at all. The story itself has an awesome approach to their relationships. Gohan filling in for his father with Vegeta and Piccolo at his side is something I haven't read either. Great sex scenes and I love the approach on saiyan pregnancy (birth channel). The movie that Goku made was a good twist to make things lively. I cant wait until Vegeta and Gohan get some privacy so they can finaly claim eachother. I really cant think of anything else to type. Please update soon! God I cant believe I said that, I hate it when ppl say that. Authors write as fast as they can...but oh well. The story is so good that I want more!
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  • From ANON - gohan_goku_2000 on December 28, 2005
    This is a beautifully written and well thought out story. I love it. I hope you update soon. I can't wait to see what happens when Gohan becomes pregnant. How everyone handles it. I would love to see Vegeta being very over protective. And see him panic when Gohan gives birth.
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  • From ANON - Maria on July 04, 2005
    omgomgomgomgomg! This is deff my fav Gohan/Vegeta fic EVER! This was just...amazing! And I need more! Pweeze? Ok, this whole website is confussing me. I registered but I was wondering if (like ff.net) you can get author updates in the mail...I don't see a button for it...of course, I'm prolly doing something TOTALLY wrong. If there isn't and/or I'm missing something, could you e-mail me when you update anything? powerrangers_r_us@yahoo.com. THANK YOU! Keep ip the amazing work, your...well...amazing.
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  • From ANON - Velika on June 16, 2005
    Oh man you gotta finish that

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  • From ANON - bob on June 12, 2005
    i likey please continue!!!!! and i liked the way chapter 4 was described.
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  • From ANON - anon on May 12, 2005
    “You got it. She had to sell herself to save enough money to come back.”

    There was silence. Then all of a sudden, the house erupted into laughter. None of them could believe it. Videl went from being the center of attention to being a tramp with a child outside of wedlock. Her life had gone down hill after Gohan broke up with her. The group agreed that she got what was coming to her. Videl had thought she would always be in the spotlight with her dad and that she’ll always have the money and nothing can touch her. Boy, was she wrong.


    Awesome. I doubt you could get more hideously out of character for virtually everyone in this fic if you tried.



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  • From ANON - Macha on May 10, 2005
    *Grins* I am so very happy that my review about verbs didn't deter you from continuing to write this story. It is, after all, a good story.

    lol, I am glad the guys have finally vioced their feelings. Now I wonder what is to come.

    On to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - kyou on May 08, 2005
    i think you're an awesome writer, more power to ya, update soon
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  • From ANON - Macha on April 08, 2005
    Well, it's an interesting story.

    You do need to work on your verb tenses. You had a lot of them that were in present tense that should have been past tense. The most common occurance was you used 'when' when you should have used 'went'. Gohan when into the other room. as an example should be Gohan went into the other room.

    There were also times it was just the opposite and should have used a present tense verb instead of a past tense one. With as many times as it occured, I had a feeling english wasn't your first language.
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  • From ANON - Shinna on April 06, 2005
    I enjoyed reading this story. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - shameika on April 06, 2005
    i like this fic update soon
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  • From ANON - aphinna on April 06, 2005
    awesome fic please write more soon
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  • From ANON - Zakurius on April 05, 2005
    I like the story, but you have a lot of mistakes like spelling, shifting verb tenses, and just not making sense at times. You kept spelling secret as secrete and glad as glade among many other misspellings. I don't really mind when people misspell words, but when you spell certain words incorrectly over and over again, it tells me that you're not mistyping; you just don't know how to spell the word. In addition, you have quite a few sentences where your verbs switch tenses.

    "One day, Videl pissed mom so bad that she throw her out the window and then chased her off the land." Both verbs should have been past tense here.

    For the most part, I can piece together what you're saying and make sense from it, but this one small part...

    “That? You wanted me to tell her that you’re still single? Refuse to fine someone to love and settle down? And how you’re pig headed fool to know that you have someone who loves you…”

    I don't know how it sounded in your head, but it's hard to comprehend, assuming people can make sense of it at all.

    Now, I don't want you to flip a bitch about this review. I like your story. Honestly, I do. It has a solid storyline and when you were in first person persective, I thought you were doing an incredible job if you overlook the mistakes. I wrote this review because I want you to improve your writing by fixing those mistakes, so don't go deleting this fic or changing your pen name. I hope to see a chapter 2 soon.








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  • From ANON - xxxvegetaloverxxx on April 05, 2005
    omg please continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! pleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepease ok bye.........PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!
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