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By : hibaakaiko
  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on July 01, 2005


    okay...I've been following this for a while...and though it's got a lot of fluff and nonsense in it, there are elements that I find very good...however...you have more typos than a thousand chimps typing on a thousand typewriters for a thousand years...I suspect english is not your first language, and if it is I do apologize but your spelling is excreble...this would improve a great deal if you found a competent beta reader...not just anyone mind you, but someone who understands decent grammar and who can tell when the spellcheck is stupid...



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  • From ANON - bob on June 28, 2005
    I luv this story I've been waiting for the update for this for a long time. I can't wait to see what happens.
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  • From ANON - dbz27 on June 28, 2005
    I have absolutely no clue to where this fic is going........but that's a good thing because it's so unpredictable! please update soon! I haven't seen your work in a while and I miss it!
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  • From ANON - Lorraine Wolfe on May 17, 2005
    Review please. I like this kind of story.
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  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on May 16, 2005


    ahm....first thing I need to know is, is english your second language? if so, the myriad mistakes can be forgiven to some degree, though in either case you are badly in need of a beta reader. at least use spell-check. I find most everyone out of character in this, or very shallowly in-character. with AU this is sometimes unavoidable, but I do think you could do better in your characterizations. you need to stop jumping from first person to third, and your chapters are choppy and the timing is confusing.


    I'm not sure if you're still a member at saiya-jin secrets list, but if you are I am sure you can find someone there willing to be of help to you. the plot is moving fairly slowly, but that may be my perception since the chapters are short. don't cut your chapters off simply because you are fond of cliffhangers, a real cliff is inherent in the story and cannot be forced.

    keep working at it, your concepts are promising but in need of work.


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  • From ANON - AFicR on May 11, 2005
    Even thinking this is an awesome piece of fic, this time I won’t greadilly holler ‘update’. ~_~

    *stomping bubbly greadyness to the ground*

    Just take it easy... and get well!! ^_^

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  • From ANON - AFicR on May 10, 2005
    *thrilled*

    Go on! GO ON!! ^O^

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  • From ANON - db27 on May 09, 2005
    You have Goku's personality exactly right! Him and Vegeta would make a cute couple! Has Frieza found out that they are gone yet?
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  • From ANON - Shalina on May 08, 2005
    O_O OMFG HOW COULD YOU LEAVE IT THERE SHIT ME FLAT

    YEs i love it do i want more??? HELL YES I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I WANT I

    ^_^ please update soon I love you
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  • From ANON - AFicR on May 06, 2005
    VEGETA and GOKU finally MEET!!! ^ ^

    Excellent!! Mild plot for this one chapter but it fits smoothly in the story. It doesn’t sit well to be overly antsy while writing; a certain measure between intense/light scenes is always a must and highly appreciated –at least in my humble opinion... And the actual meeting of the saiyans was plausible enough. I particularly like the fact that Goku is portrayed as naïve/innocent and cheerful but capable of serious reasoning, and not the utter dumb/mindless creature many fics set about deriding.

    Oh! Nice touch... the pink ‘BAD MAN’ shirt. *cackles*

    Weeeeell, that said... I’ll be waiting for the next UPDATE!! ~_^

    ^-^

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  • From ANON - AFicR on May 02, 2005
    YEEEEESSS!!! *does a little happy dance*

    Wohoo!! All the chapters from the previous post are on! *cackles gleefully*

    *craving for more*

    And noooow... something NEW, brand new chapters!! Coming soon... hopefully. *beams, anxiously*

    *waiting for brand new chapters*

    Keep going!! KEEP GOING!! ^O^

    ^-^

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  • From ANON - AFicR on April 30, 2005
    ^_^

    *WAITING*

    GOOOOKU is near!!! *chuckles, excitedly*

    *WAITING, anxiously*

    *grins widely*

    ^ ^
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  • From ANON - db27 on April 28, 2005
    NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!!!! I love it! Can't wait to see what happens to Radditz and Vegeta and Napa and everyone....and how Frieza will fit in to all this and everything, ooooohhhhhh.....I know this will be an awesome story....I really don't know where this story is going! That's what makes it so worthwhile to read!
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  • From ANON - caseyj0 on April 26, 2005
    AWWW!!!!!!! How cute! A V/R! I love it! Please continue....Goku gonna be in the picture soon? And what about Frieza?
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  • From ANON - AFicR on April 23, 2005
    Waaaaa! Two more chapters!!... *swoons*

    And the big saiyan fur-ball AS LANDED!! Wohoo! *jumps around, ecstatic*

    It’s almost there! It’s ALMOST THERE!! JUST a little more... and GOKU will appear! *gushes excitedly*

    And then, and THEN... maybe an update to the story?!!... *prods, hopefully*

    Keep going! Pleeeeease?? – with sugar on top!? ^_~

    ^ ^
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