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Reviews for Bound by Choice (Ch. 45 up!)

By : Mitamay
  • From ANON - Sora on April 26, 2005
    YAY! *claps* I have fallen in love with your story! Its so good! ENCORE!
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  • From ANON - Zephyr on April 22, 2005
    Awwwwwwwwwww!! Poor Duo!

    As bad as I feel for him, though...I can't wait to see the next chapter! PLEASE update soon!

    Oh...thanks for the image of Relena in pink leather...*feels slightly ill* The idea of Heero in a G-string, though....*snickers*

    Keep up the good work!

    **Zeph**
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  • From ANON - Shinigami-sama on April 22, 2005
    This is an excellent story! Please continue updating! I can't wait for the next chapter.....XD
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  • From ANON - Mynona on April 20, 2005
    Nice and intresting story you've got going here. my only pointer to you, as a writer, is to try and make it clearer who's doing what. in the last chapter (8) I'm not sure if it was Heero who crawled or Zechs. You also need to work more on descriptions, like, what's the srroundings like? yes they are in a huge suite, is it cosy, bare, cold, warm, yellow? Many writers, wrongly (me too... when I started writing, it took years to get out of the habit) think that adescriptions slow things down and just writes the verbs. The things that happen. You're not bad, but you could get better.

    Your grammar, punctionation and choice of words are pretty good. You control the language you use and thanks to the grammar and punctionation it's easy to read. The story flows, but sometimes a little too fast, again, use descriptions to tell what the characters see, feel, smell and hear. It'll make them seem more alive.

    I like the way you used the rape to warrant Duo's reactions and thoughts about gay sex, it shows depth of character and that you know that history effects the future. Some writers forget about that. (like the story where the main character needed to break a window and suddenly remembered the hammer she'd been carrying around all day. *shakes head*)

    I hope you take this for what it is, a help to make you better, and not solely as criticism, I like your story a lot and I want to read more. Now! or even better Yesterday!
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  • From ANON - Zephyr on April 20, 2005
    Awww! I got mentioned! It makes me happy! What can I say? I'm a review whore. I love to review and I know how wonderful it is to GET reviews, so it works out!;)

    Anyway...wow! Major updatage! Like...3 chapters! I'm a happy girl! Now...more major updatage would be nice! I wanna see this whole 'training' thing. If they were willing to do all that just for kicks, I can't wait to see what happens when they get down to business! Very nice work! Keep it up!

    **Zeph**
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  • From ANON - kx on April 20, 2005
    i like the story alot please need more
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  • From ANON - Zephyr on April 19, 2005
    Wow! Very nice so far! I can't wait to see where you take this. Hopefully Duo will get to meet the other four in the next chapter. ;) Very nice work. I'll definitely be watching for an update!

    **Zeph**
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