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By : RenaSama
  • From ANON - Little_Bitch on January 25, 2006
    "...You must be shaking your head in disgust now. That I would stoop so low. Thinking 'what an douche-bag I turned out to be' after all this time..."

    Nope! Not me. I laughed and laughed. XD

    "...he pulls another Twizzler from the bag. I told him not to eat my damn candy!..."

    GAH this made me laugh too!! Then when they fight at Gokus house, Chichi appears with her frying pan pf doom, bashing Veggie on the head with it!!! Man this whole chapter had me laughing. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Hell Im enoying this whole story and the waiting KILLS me!! Next chapter please!! ^_^v
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  • From ANON - Macha on January 19, 2006
    *poke, Poke, POKE!!!*..... okay, that really didn't get my desire for more of this story out of my system, but I had to try.
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  • From BrucesGirl on December 31, 2005
    I have to tell you a funny story. I was sitting on my little laptop, drinking my nightly kettle of tea, (don't ask) and my husband asks me..."Whatcha readin?" I told him, "One of those gay porno stories about DBZ that you hate so much." He sputtered for a while and shut up, went back to playing his stupid PS2 game, and I went back to reading. I'm glad I'm not a man, because if I was a man, this laptop would have raised the perverbial 5-8" off my lap if I had a dick.

    That being said, (no matter how crude) I must say that you are a master (or mistress if you prefer, Rena-sama) of sexual tension mixed with certain obvious facts of a tedious marriage. Trust me, I know all about the life of a tedious marriage, and I started reading this, and my mind is telling me, OH MY GOD that's my husband. Or GEEZE I think I act like that sometimes.

    All in all, it's an excellent fiction, and you've made it to my favorites list. Bravissamo!
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  • From ANON - Camaro on December 30, 2005


    LOVE LOVE LOVE! LOVE!

    This was probably one of my favorite chapters so far. There were things that nearly kicked me in the teeth and there were others that were so subtle that maybe only me and you even caught on to them. So since you like to have me read things when I'm sober and when I'm on AIM with you.. (and you weren't around today) I kept an open email next to me where I could copy and paste my favorite parts as I read through. (Now come on.. you love me! SAY IT! hahaha)

    Alright.. so let me get this thing started.

    They couldn't steal what didn't want to be stolen.

    This quote for some reason made the Goku from the show automatically appear in my mind NOT as you have so awesomely formed him.. but as the old Goku.. the original from the series. The innocence, the kindness, the happiness and that terrific smile... I remembered him because it strikes me as though Goku is somehow in a sense reverting back to that old personality. Because he so often blames himself.. (which yeah, he should.. but let me continue) Goku from the series always seems to hold the weight of the world on his shoulders.. and so much else. In your story, he's doing the exact same thing.

    He blames EVERYTHING on himself.. even sometimes ridiculous things. His relationship with his wife ISN'T all his fault. The two just aren't compatible if you ask me. But he takes every failure as though he could have ultimately prevented everything... but he doesn't really accept that that's just part of life! That life is full of unpredictable failures...

    "Strength is not whether or not a man ever falls.. its whether or not he gets back up again."--loosely Confucius

    It almost seems as though subtly (and I may be crazy) he also sees a lot of his deviousness in Goten. It's odd.. but let me continue.

    I've been a peeping tom for several months? When I look at you I think of Bulma? When we make love I think of Bejiita?! That I secretly resent you for never giving me a blow job, nor being the oversexed vixen I need you to be? That many of the problems in our marriage are the result of my own selfishness? That for all our new found intimacy and bonding, I have no idea what it is I feel towards my own wife anymore?

    This paragraph LITERALLY made my heart sink. Honest to God, I just felt almost ill when I read that. Because Goku suddenly concretes everything we've already suspected. Where there was just the question of his feelings, he's GONE OUT and just said "yeah, the suspicions are correct.. this is how it is". And as much as we want to sympathize with him because we love him... I can't. I hate that he's unable to love ChiChi for what strikes me as very selfish reasons. I mean... I kinda get irritated with him because I'VE had boyfriends and the type that made me feel as though all they gave two shits about was sex..so I can relate to ChiChi. Hell, maybe HALF the reason she doesn't put out is because his affections SHOULD be deeper than that. So in a sense, while I love him.. I hate how flawed he can be.

    Unless of course Chichi is suddenly into role play. 'Here Chichi! Wear this blue wig for me!" Or 'Try on my old saiyajin outfit from the Cell saga* It'll look great on you!"

    Ok, this made me laugh slightly.. it was an imbittered "you-fucking-male-pig" laugh.. but still, a laugh.

    Somehow the world was never big enough for the two of us. The god's must be laughing at me. Are you laughing too?

    I really liked how that was written. I like how yeah, it's true and I've even considered it before.. the world ISN'T big enough for those two egos or super powers. Also, the question asked at the end makes it again, feel as though Goku isn't just reiterating this time in his life, but he's speaking to us! He's addressing the reader and wanting us to, in a sense, come closer. Like WE aren't the peeping toms in his life, but part of the journey through it. I loved that.

    So what's the first thing I do upon seeing him after all this time? Wanting him as badly as I do?

    I pull back my arm and sock him right in his gorgeous little face.


    hahhaa.. not even I saw that one coming. It was perfect. it was FUCKING FLAWLESS.. but I didn't see it coming. I cracked up because it was just SOoooo.. unique I think. So unexpected. Here I'm thinking that in a lot of ways, Goku has reverted back to being the ol' blame himself for everything guy and then he pulls something so completely contradictory to his nature that I have to sit back and marvel at how far he's come.

    Honestly, that was awesome.

    The bite was... odd. I liked the uniqueness but it also sent my mind reeling. I don't know how to feel about it honestly. I don't know if it was supposed to be plotmoving or just in there as a subtlety to represent Goku's desperation. I just know that it really caught my attention and made me almost weary of Goku. That as much as what he does is unpredictable... there's something about HIM that's now unpredictable.. not sure how to word it.

    Anyways, I think I'll leave it at this because I don't want to tear everything apart for the readers who check reviews before proceeding. Any questions.. IM me. Other than that... I LOVE it.

    Camaro





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  • From Orchideater on December 30, 2005
    Ooo-hoo, I loved the bite scene. It was such an act of savage desperation, and what's more, Bejiita seemed to like it. Great fight scenes; you write them very well, and fights are hard to do, IMHO. In this chapter I get the distinct feeling that Bejiita might just be going through the very same turmoil as Goku-- desperately wanting the other that he can't have, taking out his frustration in violence and excessive sex (the 15-times record) with the one he can have, his wife. Questions, questions...
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  • From ANON - Macha on December 29, 2005
    *Happy sigh* There's the story I love so much. Thank you for updating! I am glad Goku has come to the realization that he can't really ever go back, unless of course he wishes to have his memory taken from him, but then, wouldn't he just repeat the same mistakes?

    I am sorry and releaved he feels bad for his and Chichi's relationship. That's a terrible cross-roads to come to in any relationship.

    Now I just want to know if he is going to make a decision to let her go, or is he just going to keep stringing her along, and hurting the both of them in the process.

    I guess I'll wait to find out. A lot of it probably has to do with Vegeta's response. Some how, I get the feeling, Vegeta won't be happy if Goku dumps Chichi and proclaims his undieing lust for Vegeta.
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on December 29, 2005
    Fabulous
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  • From FelixMcKadden on December 29, 2005
    It's like excruciating pain reading this. Except it's like a GOOD KIND of pain. It's like your fic is a blender and I happily throw my brain into it. You make all the characters so... real. You take the realm of the fantastic, bring it to our doorsteps, and not only have us wholey accept it, but you do it in such a spectacular way that it enhances itself. It's like taking something grandeur, making it mundane, but that's what's so lovely about it. However, this fic is far from mundane. It's anything but. You can really see the subtle development of Goku's character. Like taking steps, or brick by brick, you have to slow down and watch or you miss how something so small became something so big. Stunning.

    Ok.. I'll stop kissing up to you now. :P
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  • From ANON - Felix on December 29, 2005
    I'M DYING HERE.
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  • From ANON - Macha on December 22, 2005
    Can I beg you for an early X-mas present? An update to this would be fantastic! PLEASE?!
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  • From ANON - Camaro on November 29, 2005
    Well as always I feel like I put the better amount of my thoughts in my IM's to you but I did just want to give you props for supplying us with SUCH AN ABSOLUTELY INGENIUS story. While you would suspect that threesomes and yaoi lemons could consume a story, sometimes the parts I find almost more sexual are the ones that appeal to our human senses, the ones that are very subtle and only detected by those who can appreciate your talent enough to look for them.

    Truly, the more and more we come to know the characters (especially Goku and Chi Chi in these chapters) the more we symapthize with them and can compare them to ourselves as people. I also love that you give them such obvious flaws and yet we adore them for those as well... and I MUST MUST MUST give you well deserved props for your portrayal of the often misunderstood Chi Chi. She is very well liked in this story.. at least by me and that's rare.

    Keep em' coming!

    Camaro
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  • From FelixMcKadden on November 26, 2005
    Deviously addicting. That's what this fic is! I loved this chapter. Maybe I'm a sucker for fight scenes, but, maybe it's because the physical violence matches the inner turmoil. It feels like it parallels their last fight with a role reversal. This time Vegeta's angry for their.. predicament? relationship? situation?.. while Goku, while obviously still hung up over him, seems to be more in control this time. Well played, my dear Rena. :)
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  • From ANON - Macha on November 23, 2005
    Well... that as most interesting. Hmmmm (has to ponder) So, Vegeta calls him for a 'fight', but other than making induendo, nothing happens? Or is Vegeat just making sure Goku hasn't forgotten about him?

    I am glad that Goku was able to resist doing anything, but I have to wonder if Vegeta is going to continue to string him along one spar at a time.

    Excellent chapter! I am so happy you updated before the holiday weekend. If you cellibrate it, Happy Thanksgiving!
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  • From ANON - GreenEyes276 on November 23, 2005
    Heh heh Steer. No we cant have the yaoi stop! That would make me very sad. Anyway, nice, violent chappie. Poor Goku it just brings everything up again. I await the next part. XD
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on November 23, 2005
    Good fight scene. Goku couldn't help himself. lol

    I love your writing style.

    Keep it up.
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