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Reviews for Aftermath

By : Asidian
  • From ANON - aspiker on June 23, 2005
    The way you are able to capture and communicate emotions is amazing. The feeling of Al towards Ed as a mix of a younger brother idolizing an older brother, admiration for Ed and brotherly (and not so brotherly) love was great. The way the roles are now reversed, with Al providing support and comfort for Ed is very well done.

    The plot development, what happen to Ed and who was involved, I'm expecting to be just as good. You've done such a good job at the rest. 8-)

    I am a bit puzzled about Ed's reaction to the correspondance between Mustang and his kidnappers though. Is it the realization of the passage of time since his capture and rescue? That the kidnappers had been in contact with the goverment yet nothing was done (no ransom paid)?

    Great chapter! 8-)
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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on June 23, 2005
    man your good, and love you all the more b/c you update regularly. Keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - MultifacetedTune on June 21, 2005
    Oh. My. GAWD, you are one eeeeviiiiiiil, maniacle, sadistic person, you know that? Which makes me wonder just what that makes me, seeing as how I enjoy this story so much...... ^___~ The characterizations is this still never cease to amaze me, and the plot!bOMG, it's just SPECTACULAR, and I am DYING with anticipation to know what happens!!! ^^ It's just so sad that Ed acted like his usual hot-headed self and left right before Al confessed to him.......and all because he misunderstood, too!!! *sniffles and cuddles with her Edward plushie* Honestly, if he wasn't so "beat up", etc, I would soooooo TOTALLY be pissed at him right now!!! ^___~ Keep up the good work, and PLEEEEASE~ update ASAP!!!
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  • From ANON - aspiker on June 21, 2005
    This was a good chapter --> you did a great job in describing the change in the brother's relationship once Al got his body back. Nice description of the developing feelings of Ed for Al (and for how jealous he was when Winry came for a friendly visit).

    Now to see where the plot goes... 8-)
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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on June 21, 2005
    yeeeeeeeeyyyyyyy, an update so quickly. Keep up the good work. Cant wait for the next chapter
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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on June 20, 2005
    beautiful as usual, and i really love the fact that you update frequently. Keep up the good work and torture.
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  • From HettyBobcat on June 20, 2005
    I have to say I am totally captivated. I love a good angsty story and if you were a musician I would call you a superior lyricist. You use of wording and description truly turns this writing from a fan-fic to a story. I eagerly await further chapters. So far everything is wonderful.
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  • From ANON - aspiker on June 20, 2005
    I'm glad you are taking your time in fleshing out the characters and situation Ed and Al are currently in. The temption must be great to rush ahead, but this development of the brothers and how their relationship is changing in regards to Ed's changed body will yield great dividends later in the story.

    I love the way you are showing the strength, tenderness and compassion in Al. 8-)
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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on June 19, 2005
    Man i love this. Keep the updates a-com'n cant wait for the next one. Eddi-poo will get back to normal wont he??? Well anyhoo, keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Kiya on June 18, 2005
    I like it keep up the updates I like the soft hearted moment in chapter 5
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  • From ANON - aspiker on June 18, 2005
    A great chappie. You do have the gift for being able to capture emotions and communicating them in such a way that it is easy to feel with the characters! 8-)

    The tears shared when watching Ed's first sunset in years was beautifully done. Also, Ed's final burst of pride and ultimate reaction to Al's gentle bathing and shampooing (man it feels great to have someone shampoo my hair...) I enjoyed too. That last "I can do it" before going back to sleep was priceless. 8-)
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  • From ANON - silvertales6 (not signed in) on June 18, 2005
    HOLY SHIT! WHAT DID THEY DO TO ED?! *RAAH!* I'LL KILL THEM!

    good story though...very nicely written. poor ed...*sniffle*
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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on June 17, 2005
    aaaaah i want more, gimme more. Please!!!!!
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  • From ANON - aspiker on June 16, 2005
    You're doing a great job! 8-)

    The effort and detail being put in describing the brother's feelings and action is well done. It is easy to feel their tears of pent up fears and relief at finally being together again. I could see Ed cringing in the dark in fear of what Al's reaction to him would be. Al's horror and gentle feeling of Ed's wing to come to terms with what had probably happened to Ed was well described.

    I especially like the end of chapter 4 where Al gives voice to the idea that it is time to get out of the darkness. It hit me on a couple of levels. Yes, there is the literal "let's get out of the cave". Then there is Ed's comming out of the darkness of fear into the light of day. To his friends and other's.

    Good job! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. 8-)
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  • From ANON - RYOU MOON on June 16, 2005
    Love it update soon please and thank you!!!
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