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Reviews for In View

By : ttchaku
  • From kitsuko999 on March 08, 2021

    Absolutely love this pairing an thankful to see an interesting story with them, especially during the ages I like to write with for this pairing. Thank you! 


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  • From SilentHedges on February 06, 2008
    I agree, please pay no mind to the negative reviews - they need to remember this is Adult Fanfic after all!

    Personally, I liked it - it's definitely one of the better stories here, that's for sure. A little weird for my taste, but that's just me! You write very well - I do hope you post more stories :)
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  • From ANON - pun_xy on September 10, 2006
    I liked your fic.
    I've read the other reviwes and personally I think those negative people can go screw themselves because, frankly, it is good to give constructive critisism but some of you were just plain mean.
    I've read suckfics before and this wasn't one of them, it was very well-written. Besides, if you didn't like Vegeta to be a Ped you could've backed off at the sight of the warnings, blockheads. And, honestly, this is AdultFanfiction.net for Christ's sake, you're bound to find odd parings and story plots (ever heard of PWP?).
    Anyhow, I really liked it and I think you're a great author (you're no worse than half of the poeple around here). Go ttchaku!
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  • From ANON - Melissa on September 10, 2006
    Loved it! You wouldn't consider writing more, would you? Pwease?
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  • From ANON - Angel of Death on February 06, 2006
    Well written and quite entertaining. I look forward to seeing what else your mind can conjure up. :)

    Hm, constructive wise: (1) table scene seemed a bit awkward, wouldn't someone have noticed? (2) A few spelling errors here and there.

    All in all, nicely done, keep up with the great writing! :)
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  • From ANON - hhxh99 on January 18, 2006
    Actually, I like this reading. But i have a final question. Did Vegita loved Gohan in the end. Maybe i have a little trouble about the comprehension of the two words " In view".
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  • From ANON - angelnoyami on October 16, 2005
    I like this fic it is actually very well written.
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  • From ANON - anonymous_fan on August 30, 2005
    mmmmm yummy sex scene. especially towards the end. i love a good vg/gh story
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  • From ANON - Rayne on July 31, 2005
    Your writing style is very good, descriptive. Vegeta's dialogue always seemed...off to me. Not the dialogue itself, really... Maybe it seemed out of character for him? But honestly, what fanfiction isn't somehow out of character? Anyway, I do like the excuse you gave Vegeta for fucking Gohan--purely lust because he didn't want his pregnant wife. But then there were the undertones that it was something else. However, the dinner scene came off as pretty unbelieveable. SOMEOBODY had to notice...O_o

    I read your reviews, and I was kinda surprised to see people getting all bent out of shape. I mean, I'm really not a fan of shota, but it's been done before. And I figured if it would be...accepted (not really the word I want) on any site, it would be here. But I guess you can't predict people. I for one, don't really care, because they're not real. I dunno, I can usually let a lot of stuff slide in DBZ (and most other) fics that I may be completely against in real life simply because the characters are all a creation of someone's imagination. Too much work to get all bitchy about it, I guess. ^^

    So anyway, getting off my soap box now, overall this was a good fic. And I hope you keep writing.
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  • From ANON - Honey Nut Loop on July 29, 2005
    Uber good and bon yes yes.
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  • From ANON - The Chichi Slaughter House on July 29, 2005
    Look! Vegeta would NOT molest Gohan! And unless all the other characters are deaf and blind, this wouldn't happen. You have talent, just don't waste it on this crap!
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 27, 2005
    "Remember kid,” he yawned, sinking his head into Gohan’s soft hair, “You…you were just in view.”
    What kind of child molesting bullshit is that. Vegeta is looking for a booty call...and it's either a teen or a child?
    Hell if it wasn't for Gohan it would have been Trunks or even Goten?

    Vegeta is a child molester? That's Statutory Rape!! Hell if he had to fuck...why not a whore like everyone else!

    And what about the adults at the dinner table? they that blind?

    Gohan may have given him a mercy fuck, but it was under threat...rape is rape and that was rape!

    You made him too, much of a coward....pregnant women get fucked...put em on the kitchen table!!!

    And what ...he not man enough for Kakarott? This Vegeta is truly Frieza's Spawn!!! Rape is Rape!!!
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  • From chayron on July 27, 2005
    Well...you have skill. You really have it. But I have to tell this: the begining was rather nice...until Vegeta banged Gohan's head into the wall and started doing that strange thing to Gohan's mouth. But later it got bad, not too bad, but bad enough. Even for PWP it's...dunno... A horny Vegeta molesting a teenager.

    You try to be daring, insolent and scandalizing with those things with Bulma's pregnancy and Vegeta's repulsion to her and Vegeta's harshness toward Gohan, and Vegeta's words if it's either Gohan or Trunks, but you make it look a bit...well...ridiculous.

    And for fucks sake - how many people there were at the table (only Bulma's father and Vegeta with Gohan or what? Where was everybody else)? Was there a table-cloth? And that one: " His hips kept jerking erratically into their hands and helplessly, wanting to cry and not being able to, Gohan laid his blushing face on the cool table, hoping no one would notice. Through it all, Vegeta stroked him soothingly …almost lovingly." Are they all blind????!!!!!

    Well, you have skill. Try to use it.



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  • From ANON - bob on July 25, 2005
    i liked your story you're a good writer continue writing!
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