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Reviews for Persistence

By : chayron
  • From ANON - kit-kit on October 31, 2005
    nice that arguement with the servant was funny
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  • From ANON - Macha on October 30, 2005
    YAY... Kakarot Lives! That's a relief, of course, it wouldn't be much of a story without him, now would it?

    Vegeta has set him up very nicely in that room. I suspect Kakarot will get bored soon, but at least he has food. hehe Poor servant, I'd have probably been staring also. *drools* Kakarot in a towel. Yummy.

    Thank you for the quick update and the explination of what the heck had happened.

    I like this story, and although I don't expect updates this fast very often, update soon again please.


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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on October 30, 2005
    Another good chapter.

    The wheels keep on turning. :D

    *waits for next chapter*
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  • From ANON - Macha on October 29, 2005
    Um... Okay, what the heck just happened?

    Oh, and before I forget... YAY an update. WHOOT!

    But now you have me intreged, and I hope you update sooner!
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on October 29, 2005
    wow its about time there meet up
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on October 29, 2005

    Part 4


    I like how you described the baquet and the past nine years. Everything has changed so much. Wonderful descriptions.


    Keep it up!


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  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on October 29, 2005


    Nicely done cliff...*snerks*

    *eyes calendar*...and where _have_ you been?


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  • From ANON - kit-kit on October 05, 2005
    nice chapter vegeta dad made the hate come its all vegeta's dad fought.
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on October 01, 2005
    Wonderful chapter!
    I think that Veliro should have told him the truth by the time they reached the turning point by the lake. But this is more intersting.
    There were a few missing words in some of the sentences but overall it was enjoyable to read.

    Keep it up. Once I find a way to set aside some time, I'll continue the stories I have written.

    Good luck.
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  • From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ on October 01, 2005
    Hmm...well "Veliro" finally got some...he certainly was PERSISTENT!

    Apparently the "starcrossed lovers" couldn't catch a break...after all that...to be thwarted by your own father...and kakarott...he now believes he was used...ruthlessly....and the betrayal...

    What is to become of them?

    'til next time!
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  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on October 01, 2005


    ouch.

    okay...if you're late updating again I might get.....restless...*snerks*


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  • From ANON - Macha on October 01, 2005
    @!@@#$?!@ It makes me so mad that Velrio's father can't see love when it's real *sighs* Well, this is going to make for an interesting story any way.

    Ah, as far as the power thing is concerned, I am more than alright that it doesn't get explained. :) Although, for one moment, I had a thought, "What if working in the smithy makes it so Kakarott's tail tip is dirty... but then, I remembered all the regular bathing. *drools*

    Any way, good chapter... looks as though things are going to get worse before they get better.
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  • From ANON - Macha on September 23, 2005
    Excellent chapter. Nice back ground setting. Mwuahahahahah... Now Veliro (sp?) is going to have a ton of questions as to how a third-class became so strong, and I am interested in seeing how you are going to tell it. :)

    YAY, I love this story.
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on September 23, 2005
    Chapter 2

    Heh. Things are getting more interesting by the day. :) Poor confused Veliro.
    And Kakarott, with his shyness :D

    I look forward to chapter 3.
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  • From ANON - ~anz~ on September 23, 2005
    Addicted to Kakarott? ...ummm yummy!!!
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