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By : Petya

From ANON - Kaworu on May 30, 2006
Oh, at last you're back! We (me, pilot_02, and Black) were worried sick... //_^"

So... First of all, some fanart (that was drawn quite a while ago... //_^)
http://static.diary.ru/userdir/4/9/5/9/49592/7107541.jpg (Kira gives Aslan flowers XD) (a bit crappy)
http://static.diary.ru/userdir/4/9/5/9/49592/7107675.jpg (Well, it's not AsuKira... by far //_^")
http://static.diary.ru/userdir/4/9/5/9/49592/7107803.jpg Ishida-sama's and Hoshi's characters: Aslan, Mikael (Tenshi no Narumon), Hakkai (Saiyuki), Yuda (Saint Beast), Kaworu (Evangelion), Xelloss (Slayers Next, Try); Kira, Sugino (Tactics), Goku (Saiyuki) (this one is REAL crap //_^""""")

Now... on with the show )))

...especially a battle-hardened veteran Coordinator, would faint _form_ it...

...Yet the rhythmic sound that assured him that his baby, his tiny in size, yet enormous in significance, personal reason to live and be happy was fine...

Yeah, yeah... What was it? "It's a small step for a man, but an enormous step for mankind"... Sorry, I just can't help the associations. This phrase makes the scene comical.

...'it's nice to know that at least one man can find out what women go through with a pregnancy'...

Yesss! XD

...I'd be happy to have some company and take care _for_ another expecting mother...

...She nodded "I'll see what I can do._"_ But now let's get moving_....

...She turned the car in accordance with the instruction of the car computer...

Erm... Did you mean GPS?

...I hope that the medical references are not too boring or far too many...

Well, it's OK for me, but Black will bugger me for weeks. Again //_^" (And I'm not even a medical student unlike some Hakueis and Zoisites //_^)

Now, I can't wait for another chapter //___^ Did you have to continue when I have to defend a diploma project in a month or so? //_^

I can't wait to see Lacus' reaction... *grin*

I like your Kira really much. Even in such circumstances he doesn't go into hysteric but stays rather logical and relatively calm. I would personally throw a tantrum and crash every breakable thing available *//_^*

BTW... I was wondering for a while now if you knew Russian... It could be just my imagination though... Anyway, if you do, you can visit me here (if you're interested, that is):
http://www.diary.ru/~yaoicoalition/
and if you don't, I have an LJ:
http://kaworu-renritsu.livejournal.com

Oh! Is an e-mail mentioned in your profile valid?
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From ANON - Tyson on May 29, 2006
That was AWESOME! Great story! man poor Kira, but plez update soon!
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From ANON - Apchi on May 29, 2006
uuuwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa sugoooooooooi~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I realllllllllllllllllllllly love this story! >////////< you're such a good writer!! *glomps you* ASUKIRANESSSSS~~~~~ *cough*
sorry, the heat kinda do "stuff" to my mind XDDDD (just failed a final exam in math because of it, and this story just made me forget it ^^ thank you~~~)
anywwwwwwwwwway!~
I JUST LOVE THIS FIC!~ it's so well written and described! ><
good luck with your exams!! ^^;;
keep up the good job with the chapters~~~ can't wait for the next chapter~~~ ^^
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From ANON - Anon on February 11, 2006
It's killing me! I can't wait untill Athrun finds out and him and Kira are together! PLease update soon! the suspense is kiling me! argh! Keep up the goog work!
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From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2006
I love this fic! It is one of my favorite AsuKira fics! The plot is good and I love your writing style! Please update soon!
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From ANON - M on January 20, 2006
I realized today that you would have replied to my review here and come to see it. I hope you will be kind enough to not kill the baby and that's great that at least Athrun has realized the truth. The suspense is killing me. I hope you update soon.
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From ANON - Luna_Meow on January 19, 2006
Hi. I've been following this story for a while, actually, just that I have quite little time to review.

I'm actually not really into yaoi or shounen-ai, but I like this story a lot. I like how you describe both Athrun and Kira's feelings, the lust they have (yeah, people can be naughty sometimes), and the pain they have to suffer when both of them misunderstood everything they hear (or see). The idea of m/preg you present is also... well, very new and very logical since Kira is the Ultimate Coordinator, and also acceptable (for me that is).

Now that I'm waiting for the next chapter, I just can't wait to see what would happen to this Kira-mama wannabe :P And also to Athrun, of course.

Keep up your good work!!
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From ANON - Tyson on January 07, 2006
Wow that was so cool lol i really like it, so PLEZ UPDATE SOON OK? ok. lol
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From ANON - Kaworu on January 07, 2006
Did I say anything about the _japanese_ encoding? //_^ Actually, it wasn't in Japanese. I've just figured... O, well. Never mind //_^

And before I say anything about the actual story... First, I've kicked Vega-sama to draw Aslan:
http://static.diary.ru/userdir/4/9/5/9/49592/5558247.jpg
And I've drawn AsuKira myself:
http://static.diary.ru/userdir/4/9/5/9/49592/5558289.jpg
Here, it's for you //_^

And from now on you can visit me here:
http://www.adultfanfiction.net/aff/authors.php?no=1296789481
...if you want to, that is //_^

And I promise to write an AsuKira MPreg fic (I don't know how to name it yet...) after I'm done with another fic I've already promised to write (Tactics anyone? //_^ harukan's cute //_^) (and after I've translated Hagaren movie into Russian... //_T My sister'll kill me if I don't do it... //_T Especially after I've ignored her Kumo no Mukou translation //_^)

/end of off-topic //_^

Now, I'm writing all the comments that come to mind during the chapter //_^ (Sorry if I'm not very clear, but it's 1:45 am //_^)

Awww... Why do I _love_ Gil? //_^ Nee, will there be Gil/Rey later? *hint-hint* //_^ Any hmentions would be fine.

He dreaded what more nightmares could befall him. Not that they could break him further than he had already been.
Was it a hint? //_^

Hmm, don't you think Aslan is a bit too pessimistic about the whole situation? He'd just jumped to the conclusion that Kira was sick from the very thought of Aslan loving him... I think that's a bit too pessimistic and insecure for his character... But you can have your own thoughts about him, of course //_^

"You know I don�t pretend to know what exactly is going on in Kira�s head, but I saw the records, and to tell you the truth from a side point of view it looks as if you are proposing to Cagalli."
I think I'm going to love Dearka... Finally, the voice of reason! //_^ And here I was thinking Lacus will be the first one to understand it //_^

"Didn�t you pay attention to the flower? From what I understand he was looking for you, not his sister, so we could safely assume that the flower was for you. I don�t think someone disgusted would bring you flowers, and even a simple friend is unlikely to do that. I don�t recall seeing him giving you flowers, whatever the occasion."
That was priceless //_^ I think I'll draw Kira giving Aslan flowers, say, for the women's day //_^
Oh, and trust our lovely 'drama Queen' to put it like this *lol*

He smiled, his tears now gone and thanked them. He was indeed lucky to have such friends.
Of course, if he's such an idiot //_^

With that she left her friend behind and walked to her car wondering what Erica Simmons could need her so urgently and secretly for.
Yesss. It'll certainly go easier when Lacus knows the details. She's a smart girl.

You certainly didn't disappoint me, rest assured //_^

Hmm, am I such a pervert or is angst really easier and more interesting to read than sap? You can make them suffer, you can kill them... I'll still be happy //_^

Still looking forward to the next chapter //___^

And a few lines to phoenix (sorry, I couldn't resist it //_^)

I would say that Kira is likely the easiest character to do a well explained mpreg with that I've ever come across.

Sorry, but what about Heero Yuy? You can do all the same things to the Perfect Soldier //_^ Not to mention Saotome Ranma... In _his_ case you don't have anything to explain //___^
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From ANON - claire on January 06, 2006
Excellent job!
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From ANON - apple on January 03, 2006
aaawww thats soo sad though im not to keen on the pregnant kira thing! but hey somethig diffrent!
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From ANON - mikyu on January 03, 2006
I knew it!!!! what the fu+*"� do I wrong??? that crappy review system here isn't working properly!!!!! So once again ... my post since the one above doesn't make any sense.
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I've no problems that Athrun finally realized that Kira misunderstood their conversation. I'm already too tired of the sillines in GSD (I mean ... c'mon, there where so manny hints that gili was evil). besides, you'd have killed me if the story would go on just like that! ^^� and I also don't like soaps^^. I wish you good luck for your exam, I'll have mine at the end of january til the end of february, so it might also take some time for my fanarts XD (but I'm planning on a whole website, because I already drew several outlines) But ... how can I draw more pics of pregnant Kira if you're going to kill the baby !!! *cry*
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hope it works this time
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From ANON - mikyu on January 03, 2006
I've no problems that Athrun finally realized that Kira misunderstood their conversation. I'm already too tired of the sillines in GSD (I mean ... c'mon, there where so manny hints that gili was evil >.
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From ANON - phoenix on January 03, 2006
Umm.. mpregs they're interesting. If well explained, they're not too bad. I would say that Kira is likely the easiest character to do a well explained mpreg with that I've ever come across. Dr. Hibiki genetically engineered him and his fetal development took place in an artificial womb free of all female influence. It's not a far step to a male pregnancy. I've actually been thinking a lot about the subject since my animal physiology course covered the hormonal aspect of human reproduction. Since Kira would develope essentially as a hermaphrodite, there wouldn't be the issues associated with transplanting a uterus into a male "host" after birth. The only major problem with this system is the lack of progesterone in Kira's system. The testosterone in his body can be broken down to estrogen by an enzyme (aromatase if you're interested) so that won't be a problem but it's the progesterone that keeps you pregnant. High levels of progesterone are required to prevent the binding of estrogen to the muscles lining the uterus because it is the binding of estrogen to the muscles lining the uterus that causes contractions. So, if you want him to miscarry it would be after 2 weeks when the placenta would take over progesterone production and in Kira his progesterone levels would drop or you can give him progesterone supplements and he should, in theory, be able to go to term.

Well, sorry for the biology lesson. Hope it's useful. Good story so far.
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From ANON - Icarium on December 29, 2005
Man, the plot of this story has more twists and turns than the Monte Carlo race track! Read and Find Out how it all unfolds.

Seriously, if I had read it than it's worth it. Why? Well, it's long, I don't like Gundam Seed as much as its most avid fans and I am not too keen on the idea of reading about all male love story to put it mildly. Therefore if you are a real GS fan and you know, dream about Kira x Athrun all day long, there is a distinct possibility that you will love this story. Just be prepared for anything. ;)

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