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Reviews for Torn

By : Lyokofreasion
  • From ANON - MildredCurdle on December 26, 2005
    Interesting, I'm not so sure of your structure, or you paragrphs, but the premise sounds interesting.
    With a good beta, you'd have a nice story on your hands.

    Good luck,
    Millie
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  • From ANON - anz on December 24, 2005
    please divide the long run-on sentence column into paragraphs...

    good premise, but now i have a splitting headache...

    people take the time to read ... so please show a little more effort and break this up into paragraphs.

    Person's will appreciate it and reward you with decent reviews...
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  • From ANON - Little Bitch on December 24, 2005
    Ok my first suggestion would be to please seperate your story into paragraphs. Its very hard on the eyes when its just one big block.
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