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By : Kousuke
  • From ANON - Pepp on January 10, 2006
    Roy /not/ be perverted? *snorts* Impossible!!! ^^lol

    Oh, I can't wait to see what happens next! Oh no! Ed's not going to be seen! Roy might try to adopt Al by his self! Without Ed!! NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    *sniffles* poor poor Ed!!!


    You got it right in one that I'm protective of Ed-kun!! (grabs plushie and starts making baby voices)


    *ten minutes later, she is putting the pludhie doen for a nap... the doll is starting to look at her funny*


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  • From ANON - Juna on January 10, 2006
    Yay Roy is here to save the day!! XD *hugs author* Loved it even though it was short i just loved it cause Roy came along and the way you described him my gosh i could see how sexy he looked in there well he is sexy all the time. Eh i am sorry i am just babbeling. =P Anywyas He better see Al! He can't adopt anybody else!! He better see Al say he is interested in adopting him but them Al says he has a bro and Ed comes along and fgives him some mouth i mean cusses and such. XD Okay sorry i am babbeling on again. =P Sorry sorry. Anyways update soon cause i want to know what will happen ya? =3 gratsi!
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  • From ANON - Juna on January 07, 2006
    Boo no Roy. But it is alright, The chapter was sad and so sweet. I love Al saying he would cry for Ed's behalf. OMG! I was sniffling. So cute of him and loving of him. Loved it. I enjoy your story alot. Please update soon. I can't wait for Roy to step in the picture. Keep it up. =3
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  • From ANON - Pepp on January 07, 2006
    I loved this chapter!

    Though I felt that it was a little rude of Al to get Ed to make that promise..

    We all know how literal Ed is, and he might complete the promise by welcoming the first person to be interested in him, even if its against his instincts!!

    And we all know how Roy can be perverted, when his mind is put to the task!! *cries* ^^lol

    I can't wait till the next chapter!!!!
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  • From ANON - Pepp on January 07, 2006
    Aww! How DARE that evil child even TOUCH Ed?!? *growls* He has no right!! I'll get him back if he ever even LOOKS at Ed again!! And Al! The poor dear!!! ^^lol I guess them being kids is just too much for my (unontrolled)emotions... Great chapter, by the way!! Hurray!! And how old /is/ Winry?
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  • From ANON - Heretic on January 07, 2006
    I just read all the chapters for the first time and its an awesome story so far. I really like how your going into detail with Ed's feelings and bringing out his character more. Keep up the great work and i'll be looking forward for an UPDATE ... ^^
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  • From ANON - Juna on January 07, 2006
    I love the whole child thing, i like this story alot. I love how you have been writing it. I thought this chapter was nice. I love Ed defending Al, so cute..well he does do that in reality but still so cute especially when they are kids. Oooo Roy soon coming? Yay! I cannot wait! Pleas update soon. =3
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  • From ANON - Pickles on January 05, 2006
    Oh boy...

    Here we go.

    Al dodged the pillow and frowned, "I know that bad things happened to you..." he began, but Ed cut him off.

    "No, you don't!" he yelled, "You don't know because you were the one that was raped!"

    Al was the one that was raped? Don't you mean "weren't" the one that was raped?Even if you did mean 'weren't' in stead of were, it still wouldn't make sense. Ed is responding to Al as if he had said "I know how you feel". If you read it to yourself, you'll see that it sounds really weird and confusing.

    Winry nodded, in understanding, and turned to Jeff, "Al is 10, and his brother, Ed, is 11."

    "Only a year apart, that's perfect."

    After being informed that Ed and Al were the only twin boys they currently had, Jeff left.

    You can't be a year apart, and be twins. That would be a really fucked up pregnancy. Might want to change that.

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  • From ANON - happyonna on January 04, 2006
    This is really enjoyable so far. I can't wait for the next chappy! Update soon!
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  • From ANON - Pepp on January 04, 2006
    *sniffles* Oh no! It didn't really happen did it? Poor Ed! And that Jeff was evil! EEEEEEVVVVILLLLLL!!!!!!! I suppose you could say I'm hooked, but if you /do/ think of slacking off, I'll cry, I swear!! ^^lol
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  • From ANON - Juna on January 03, 2006
    T_T *Sniffles* Poor Ed! And Al but especially Ed!! Anyways i didn't like that jeff gu either he was creepy. I like your story alot it is lovely. Great job. Update soon. ^^
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  • From ANON - Marchan on January 03, 2006
    Love your story!! Please update!! I really want to find out what hapepens to them! Thank You^_^
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  • From ANON - Ri on January 03, 2006
    Got my attention and i am so into it now!! Update soon cause i would love to know how it shall turn out. ^^
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