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Reviews for Monster 2: Resurrection

By : Camaro

From ANON - Macha on July 30, 2006
Dear Lola,

If you are looking for more originality in fanfiction, why don’t you post your own stories?

The DBZ fandom could really use the boost generated by creative competition.

Sincerely,

Macha

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From ANON - Lola on July 30, 2006
To kat and Bruces girl and everyboby else who had something to say to my first review:
It seems that you haven't understood anything. I don't 'stick into small words', I enjoy reading a work beautifully written, when the language is used in an intelligent way to make the story flows naturally. You should read more the great genious of literature to understand my point. But I'm against of such abuse in a pretentious author. This is my opinion, I think I've got the same right to express it as anyone of you.
And about the ideas, if you think that this is so original and profound, well I think that is great that you read fanfiction, I use to do it but just as an entertainment, most of the times it can't be taken seriously, again my advice is that you should read
too the work of great authors and philosophers, if not this polemic is pointless. And you shouldn't take so bad other's people opinions just because they don't like the same things that you like, it's good that there are different points of view, this way the world is a place more interesting.
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From BrucesGirl on July 30, 2006
Lola, obviously you don't know talent when you see it. Forced talent isn't something that Camaro sports, and nor will she ever!

You are the most stuck up, ignorant, jacked up bitch on this site for reviewing a masterpiece like this without understanding the underlying meanings to what she's saying. You can't even pick apart a sentence and take a little worth for yourself.

That's what her fictions are for. For you to interpret and take something out of them for yourself. But you wouldn't understand that.

I guess philisophical meaning in life is lost on you.

So fuck off and let the adults talk.
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From BrucesGirl on July 30, 2006
*swoons* Finally, my dear! A new chapter, and what a great chapter it is. I had to grab a glass of sweet tea and sit back for this one because I had criticism and praise alike to give! First, I love the way you've set up Goku's mentality. He's considerably darker and much more experienced which is something I adore in this fiction so far. He's been through so much, and it would suck monkey nuts if he were all bright and chipper.

Maybe there was no real fate at all and despite the probable paternal blood flowing through his veins, Trunks would grow to be considerably normal. And also, maybe I saw a lot of things I wanted to see.

What a great statement. Don't we always see what we want to see? Philisophically, there's a difference between truth and fact. This, I'm sure you know. Truth is always set through the eyes of the beholder, and fact is exactly what happened, with no observation included. Deciphering between the two is always hard, and I get the feeling that it's especially difficult for beautiful Goku.

Medical science will never understand the effects of something supernatural.

Ain't that the motherfucking truth!?! Don't you hate it when people claim insanity so many times in court and they let go each and every single time. People just say nutcases are fucked in the head...that's it's a mental imbalance. I think differently. ^_^ Great line.

"No." He said suddenly, catching me off guard. "You're a hero. You're always a hero."

He slowly lifted a hand to cup my face, the flesh of his palm cold against my cheek.

"Never a bad man." He whispered.

God, do your wonderous moments of "Jesus, that's powerful" never cease? Those couple of lines really got to me for some reason, and I don't know why. I love it. How he's done all this shit to fuck up his relationship with ChiChi and Gohan...how his mother is dead...and how he's locked up in a looney bin, and he STILL loves his father. Fucking awesome.

"I want to wake up," He said suddenly, almost cutting me off. I sat up, staring at him in shock. "I want to be real."

How many times have I told myself that? Do you ever tell yourself that when you get up in the morning and look in the mirror? Do you ever wonder if anything around you is real or if you're just locked up in some crazy fucking hospital, screaming your heart out to padded walls? I dunno. I question reality a lot lately. A lot!

Does childhood abuse define a person?

Maybe.

Absolutely...if they let it.

It was the worst when I would see him in the faces of others, or hear even the slightest accent in someone’s voice that reminded me of his. Because then, the loneliness and the acceptance was irrefutable.

I could write paragraphs on this, but I have to say something. This one line was like a direct hit to my gut. I always cling to my past, wandering 'what if' or 'how did i' and yet, I never seem to be able to move on because someone will remind me of him or let me see him in their eyes. Puh. I'll get over the bastard soon enough.

Anyways, great chappy. And guess what... I'm writing again. ^_^ Miss ya, hon.
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From ANON - Kat on July 30, 2006
To Lola:

Even though I know that Camaro can take care of herself, I'm responding to your review because it pissed ME off. How about you practice what you preach and stick to small words huh? Also, if you think Camaro should pay more attention to spelling and/or grammar, you could just say so nicely instead of being a bitch. As for her focusing on religion and it not having any impact, I suggest you go back and read all of the reviews for her stories and you'll see that your opinion is very much in the minority. You know, it's not even the fact that you apparently don't like her stories that got me riled up. After all, I believe that's your choice. However, to completely rip her writing style apart and debase it like that was uncalled for. Decorum goes a long way in life, a lot more than being rude at any rate.

~Kat
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From ANON - Lola on July 29, 2006
This is the most pretentious and pedantic thing I've ever read.
You seem to put such great effort in marveling everybody with your so-called talent that all seems false, forced. It isn't credible. You seem to think that if you use many great words together everybody will worship your infinite wisdom. But the real talent consist to express things with naturality, the words and ideas must sound true, authentic. An advice, if you want to use such grandiloquent words learn to spell them before or use a dictionary, and use them when they're really needed.(Maybe you could correct some of them: Hallucination not hullucination, monstrosity not monstrocity, solely not soully, semen not seamen).
And this obsession with religion is just pointless, if you think that they give to your story a deep meaning or that they are profound philosophical reflections, well these ideas are just commonplace and denote lack of originality.
And the idea of Goku seeing a psychiatrist, absurd. Ah, wait...is it that you're planning a serie with every character of DBZ being psychoanalized, you already did one with Vegeta. Haven't you got any other idea to based your stories on?

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From ANON - vegetachik7 on July 29, 2006
Oh how exciting! I loved this chapter! The writing was beautiful and I was entranced the whole time. I loved the paragraph on Critics and how everyone has them. I loved the explanation on the questions to God and why he must have left humans on their own. I loved Goku's thoughts on himself! I just adored everything in this chapter and the ending got me. I am very anxious to see what is happening...soon. :) Great stuff!
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From ANON - Kat on July 29, 2006
You seem to always write Gohan as being unstable. It’s not that I think there’s anything wrong with that; I just thought it was interesting to note.

“I want to wake up," He said suddenly, almost cutting me off. I sat up, staring at him in shock. "I want to be real.”

*sniff* That just about made me cry. How sad, how really fucking sad. *sniff*

Ooooo... Satan's coming back is he? Now, the only question is how...

Oh, and I just noticed today that in your description of Monster 2 you have M/M/M. I'm dying to find out who that third "M" is in there. I'm pretty sure I know who the other two are (:P), but that third one eludes me, although I do have three guesses. I suppose I'll just have to be surprised when it comes up.

I also loved the Goku/Gohan interactions in this chapter. I just don't know who to feel more sorry for. I mean, I would say Gohan because I can't stand the thought of not being aware of my past and present, but then I feel sorry for Goku because "ignorance is bliss" and all that.

Hmmm... this review was longer than I thought it would be, although it's not nearly as long as some of mine have been. Now that the plot seems to be picking up I can't wait to read the next chapter!! Later :)
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From ANON - vegetachik7 on July 17, 2006
Wow...this chapter was great. And it was scary, too! I was freakin out at the end when Trunks was drawing all those pictures...ah! Well, I must say that I adored this line: " “Why is it that I scare you so much?" I raised my eyebrow. "Why is my idolized figure incapable of weakness, incapable of sexual desire for someone of the same sex? Were all super heroes always white, straight males you suppose? But I tell you my feelings and you fear me for them. "

I forget if I told you, but I go to an art college and am studying to be an illustrator, and in class we had a very similar discussion about super heros(because that's mostly what we draw, haha) and how they are mostly the same..."white, straight males." I loved how you looked past that and have noticed that not all heros, in real life, are like that, that "real life heros" have flaws and weaknesses and have possibly done things that would make a person frown upon them. Well, yeah, that's just what I noticed.

Again, great use of vocabulary, haha! I love it when people use big words in fanfics :D Great use of extreme detail and description. One really feels...horrified while reading. I know that I can definitely feel Goku's anxiety and fear toward this whole situation and you pull it off nicely. So....great stuff, as usual.
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From ANON - Washu Right on July 10, 2006
And.... I'm back

So I just finished chapter 3. The idea of goku going to a psychaiatrist seems ridiculous. I mean the stories goku must tell that poor man! I think he may need medication to deal with it himself, you think? However, everything Goku said to him is true in a sense.
Trunks disturbs me, you see I'm around babies and toddlers alot so I know how they act. When I compare them to Trunks. I have to shudder and that right there is talent. To make a person physically shudder where the sit as they read your words... yes that is talent.

How sad is it that I look foreward to other installments just to shudder and read what you have for me next?
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From ANON - Washu Right on July 10, 2006
I just read chapter 2, and all I can really say is. . . geeze have I missed this story! I've been reading Perfection and re-reading Strong Heart, however neither of them hold that little place in my heart that the Monster series has. So I'm happy to read this new chapter! Now usually sequels aren't up to snuff with orignals. So I'm always a little edgy about sequels but here I am sitting down to Monster 2 and I'm just as fascinated with your writing style as always. I have to stop once in a while and just read out loud a line here or there that I find so delisiously amusing! I have high expectations that this will be every bit as good as the original.
w00t
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From ANON - Kat on June 28, 2006
Well, since I’m already known for leaving long reviews, who am I to disappoint? I’ll be reviewing this one in the same way that I did the last chapter as I had much more fun that way. On with the show!

“...the inferior creation instinctually acknowledging the presence of something higher on the food chain.”

LOL. I think I’ve seen that look actually. Of course, that was my brother and he KNOWS he’s below me on the food chain.

“‘Vegeta is gone, Vegeta is gone’ and FREE yourself of him."

That’s right Dorothy. Just click your heels three times and you’ll be back at home in time for supper...

“The world thanked me soully...”

I think you meant solely...

“It was all the superiority proof the humans had ever needed and in their detachment from God, they replaced his image with a fleshly dealer of justice: me.”

So Goku’s the new religion huh? The new fad shall we say? Poor Goku...

“While jerking off in front of your TV?”

Oh Goku, have we no self control at all? In front of the TV...

“It hadn’t been easy and by the twentieth session, the doctor had become frustrated with me, urging me to tell him the truth of what happened. And when I did, countless sessions later, he still cringes when preparing himself for the morally-deprived situations that lie ahead.”

You know Doc, maybe sometimes you should just let things go huh?

“He remained silent, watching my every move with the careful eyes of a doctor who has witnessed one too many psychopaths flip out in his presence.”

This isn’t making me regret my decision to become a psychiatrist. Nope, not at all... *sweatdrops*

“The human fascination with the grotesque.”

Doesn’t that explain why we’re reading this story also? We just can’t help ourselves really.

“Or maybe, more probably, I miss myself. Feelings -good or bad- made me alive and now? I am as numb and cold as ever.”

For some reason, Goku reminds me of Louis from The Vampire Chronicles. Just that utter sense of hate and love mixed with the numbing pain. Louis described Lestat much the same way that Goku describes “Vegeta.”

"You know you're crazy," Vegeta had said to me two days before, as he lay next to me, rolling his eyes at my predicament.”

Hmmm... not a dream, but not really a vision either. I think the word hallucination works though.

“I was the copper snake that walked amongst them and within me, they put their every trust.”

Wow, I never heard that story before. I’m not really sure it’s wise to put all of their faith and trust into one person though. I shudder at the thought.

“And again, I was isolated because I was the only one that had witnessed them.”

Okay, now that was a vision... not to mention freaky as Hell.

“Now I gotta tell you, I’ve seen some beautiful women in my time cheat, but somehow, I just never pegged Briefs for a slip-n-slide you know what I mean?”

Disgusting. Narrow-minded. The kind of thing I would never expect to be in here, which is why I’m so glad that it is.

“I could feel myself crushing through thin layers of flimsy material, fucking that hideous hunk of gangrene filth.”

I don’t know why, but I never pictured Goku one for necrophilia. Oh, and as usual at least one time per chapter, eeewwwwwwww...

“In one way or another, she knew.”

That’s got to suck so much, knowing that it’s “sin” and not even being able to even talk about it. I wonder if/how Bulma sleeps at night?

“A man wearing the skin of four of his family members, walking around with his wife's legs loosely heat-duct taped around his own.”

*raises one eyebrow* Well, it IS creative of him...

“I watched with fascination as he lodged scalpels and knives into their wombs, forcing open their uterus's and ripping out babies, aborted by unknown mothers.”
“Who knew sticking an unborn fetus in an envelope or box could cause such desperation?”

Okay, now I understand why Goku doesn’t get much sleep. Maybe it’s just because I’m female, but God that’s just wrong. My mouth was hanging open in horror and everything. I do admire you for writing it though.

“...the doctor frantically telling her to push when she had just stared, glossy eyed and in horror as the baby clawed its way through her uterus and into the outside world.”

*shudder* Eeeewwwww...

“I wasn't needed anymore, they seemed to say. I'd fulfilled my purpose and had no place in this.”

Ouch, that’s harsh. True, in a really cruel sort of way, but harsh.

“I seen it in my head.”

Ahhh... so Goku isn’t the only one who sees “sin” in his head. I wondered if Trunks did or not.

“'Please God,' I pleaded silently, my eyes darting over various other pictures, 'let me be crazy.'“

Have you ever had that feeling? The one where something so surreal is happening that you pray you’re insane rather than it being real? I HATE that feeling. The sad thing is, you already know you’re not insane, because if you were you wouldn’t be wishing it.

“A pizza cutter.” He said without looking up.”

So Trunks sees things that “sin” did before he was even born? Just when I was thinking that he couldn’t get any freakier...

“No.” He shook his head, voice harsh. “No, you don’t love me like he does.”

Uh oh. Not that it’s not true, but I think I see a future conflict arising here.

Well, that’s that. This chapter disturbed me, intruiged me, and just all around kicked ass. I can’t wait to see where this sequel is going. Really, the suspense is half the fun, but I hate waiting. Fascinating really, how much I look forward to these updates despite the gruesome nature of the fic. Then again, no one ever said I was normal, for which I’m extremely proud. As always, I can’t wait to read more!
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From ANON - Macha on June 27, 2006
Wow...yes Goku is TRUELY obsessed. @.@ Hiring a P.I. to find your dead lover's body. Well, we all know in this case Goku has every right to be concerned about whether or not his lover has returned. The question is, if he has returned, why? I think Goku may be in for some serious trouble if he thinks Satan/Vegeta is doing this 'all for him'.

Goku is in a serious bind here. Yes, he can save people, but who is going to save him? Not the doctor that is afraid of him. Not the wife he can't talk to about anything. Certainly not Trunks...and not his gone over the edge son, Gohan. Yeah, that doesn't leave him much in the way of recourse.

Trunks really creeps me out.
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From ANON - Anon on June 27, 2006
I'm excited....this is awesome. I love it. Yes.
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From ANON - Asha on June 27, 2006
mmmmm...........I had been passing Monster by for ages and ages and ages. Finally fell. anyways, it was bloody brilliant, and I am very glad you are continuing it. Your writing is brilliant. A delightfully pessimistic look upon humanity, but not without a faint light. Its beautiful, but ugly as, well, sin, and thought-provoking for that. You have a great talent that I must say damn near justifies your occasionally off-putting arrogance in your authors notes. I respect both your stories, and your arrogance, since you have the skill and guts to back yourself up. I absolutely look forward to more of this.
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