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Reviews for Monster 2: Resurrection

By : Camaro

From ANON - Kat on June 19, 2006
I am so glad that you picked this story back up!! And I have to say that this chapter is just awesome. I really do love your stories; they�re absolutely fascinating to read. Well, while going through the story I decided to write down comments as they came to me, and that�s what I�m going to post here. It�s filled with quotes too. That way I�m giving you an accurate account of my opinion of the chapter as I read it for the first time:

And so the obsession continues... Goku still can�t seem to cast the monster out of his mind. I wonder if Bulma knows and how she feels about this? After all, she was captivated by the Devil too.

�Is that why I couldn�t orgasm or even get off on my wife unless I pretended she was him? If so, then let the records show, love sucks. Seriously.�

Ouch. Now, if that doesn�t hurt a woman�s ego...

�Besides, he knew what I had done with Vegeta. I fucked the devil! Not exactly some brilliantly hidden secret!�

*Snicker* No, I don�t imagine it would be... Still, wouldn�t have thought that of Yamucha (Yamcha? Not too sure on the spelling). *raises one eyebrow*

�She�d know who I was thinking about the entire time, as I figured she probably did even now.�

Well, that answers the first part of my question about Bulma.

�Except, it was only his memory now and that couldn�t fill the void; the emptiness dwelling inside where I guess he�d been before.�

You know, I was reading this part when a random thought popped up in my head. I wonder what the real Vegeta thinks of all this? I mean, Goku�s essentially �in love� with his body, at the very least. I can imagine the cursing now...

�We could no longer take everything for grantite...�

I think you meant granted...

�I had married Bulma only months after the fall, both of us seeing the peace as a promise from God that this was justifiable, that it was right. But I guess we both knew it wasn't. We didn't love each other, not exclusively.�

Okay, I think that answered all of my questions about Bulma.

�Was it easier for me to simply say he didn't love? Was that the quick fix?�

Probably. Humans are suckers for that quick fix. It�s how we end up thousands of dollars in credit card debt :P

�...realizing that the moment I impaled him, I stood beyond myself and the situation entirely, a being finally understanding that I'd killed the one person I'd ever truly been in love with.�

Awww... poor Goku.

�A simple world. A jaded world for sure. But a world a far-stretch better than ours.�

LOL. Gohan�s world sounds familiar somehow... :) I love how you incorporated that into your story.

�Was it so horrible for him, I had to wonder within myself, to see the epitome of his fantasies as a flawed, fallen hero?�

To paraphrase Grace from �Will & Grace�: Everyone has that time when they realize that their parent(s) is/are human.

fotten = fought

�Trunks' cruelty and simple fascination with death were solidified in his earlier years.�

Ahh... so we find out that Trunks seems to take after his father in behavior as well. Assuming, of course, that his father is �Vegeta.�

"He's just a child expressing himself," she would insist.�

Mothers will insist anything about their children to protect themselves, not that she isn�t protecting Trunks also, but she�s trying to protect her sense of normalcy as well. After all, it�s been threatened a lot in the past. BTW, ewwwwwwwwww...

�But indeed, as I gazed around the world that remained after the wreckage, weren't we all just manifestations of Sin?�

Indeed. An excellent way to end this chapter, not that I was expecting anything else. Sorry this review is so long, and if you prefer them shorter, just let me know. Like I said at the beginning, I only wrote down my thoughts as I read through this chapter. Can�t wait for the next one!! I hope we get back to the part where Goku knows that the Devil is back, or we could see more of �Vegeta� after he woke up. I�m sure that�ll be a treat :) As always, loved your work!!
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From ANON - BrucesGirl on June 17, 2006
AHHH!!! You wrote a new chapter! Fucking HALLELUYAH!!!! I starting to suffer because I have the first chapter memorized. I guess I'm gonna have to start quickly on BOS...remember...you gotta read along. Even though you've already read the whole damn thing. Who knows...you might find something new...

In other words...REVIEW!!!! AHAHAHAHA! Since I'm done begging now, onto the meat of my review. ^_^

I fell for a monster a long time ago; a monster with the face of an angel; a devil that brought out the demon in me and made me love every single moment of it.

Isn't it funny how someone can introduce you to a dark sideof your personality and it just feels so fucking good? Who's that person for you? I have a few of them in my life. Like for instance, the first person who introduced me to dark fiction writing...*cough cough* And the first person who convinced me that Yaoi is really...actually...really fucking hot. And I was such a bad girl each time...and I fuckin' loved it. We indulge in the darker sides of our personality as if though it's our own personal, sinful, chocolate cake, and we wallow in the pleasure that it brings to our body. So why is it so evil to be bad? Because it feels good? Why do the right things have to be hard and hurt us? Are we sure that right isn't wrong, and wrong isn't right?

Good times, bad times; all wrapped up in the same instance.

The angel from my nightmares, the devil in my dreams.

He used to beat me senseless. Bloody. I was terrified of him. I hated him. But I loved him too. God, he was such a bastard, but I would have taken anything for that man just to hear him whisper those words in my ear as we fucked. He was definitely my devil...and yet, in my nightmares of pain, he was my angel. I think the scariest part of recovering was understanding that part of me actually liked the pain...craved the fear...just because of the strength he had to turn around and be an angel to me. He was my pain and my salvation. God I hated him. I still do. But I still love him. It's all a blur now. I know I was meant for better. It's amazing how we, as humans, seem to blur the line between beautiful and ugly as long as we don't have to look at the face.

When does light shine the brightest except when a contradiction to the darkness? I needed the bad in him to solidify the good in me.

The darkness cannot be ANYTHING without the light, and without the shadow, light would have no meaning. Enemies could not be so if they had no heroes to fight against. They have to have each other to define each other. Perhaps that's what Goku is trying to say. That without Vegeta, there is meaning for him. Lost...with no potential. God... what a hell on earth.

But indeed, as I gazed around the world that remained after the wreckage, weren't we all just manifestations of Sin?

Oh my God....Is Trunks really Goku's son? Sounds like he'd be more of Vegeta's son at this point. Is it possible that humans were made for sin? That we were born in it and intended to indulge in it for our own, stupid, selfish purposes? What if that is our destiny? Oh listen to my rhetorical questions. Maybe we ARE a product of Sin. A people divided by war and destroyed by anger and rage. A people that ignores rape and drugs on the street and fathers and mothers molesting their beautiful, innocent children and smiling over their trembling bodies.

If we are Sin, then there is no hope.

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From ANON - Macha on June 16, 2006
How could I forget how this chapter started out? O.O...but I did. Puts a VERY interesting spin on things. I'll have to keep it in mind for future chapters.

Trunks gives me the creeps. Bulma isn't so much a genious if she is willing to over look those things. She's just your average 'mom' here.

I am glad they have Gohan on some fairly good drugs. I don't want to know what he would do if he didn't believe in his DBZ world he is always telling Goku about.

Goku....ouch. There is so much going on there. Too much. I am not so surprised the chapter starts out the way it does with all of those chaotic/emotional thoughts/feelings going around & around & around & around in his head. Would put anyone in a looney bin.

Yamcha?! Yeah, Goku is desperate if he is even flirting with that waste of flesh.

Excellent chapter Camaro. :) Good to see the update here.
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From ANON - Blackbloodeyes on June 09, 2006
O.O!!! Camaro, you never seice to amaze me. And truly i have to wonder where you come up with this stuff sometimes, because truly it is amazing and i can see why people send you so much betaing shit, because you truly are a master peice. XD And your work is too. And i still say you should replace the names a make a book lol.

-Love
Lauren
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From ANON - Misty on February 11, 2006
That was intense.
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From ANON - Anon on February 07, 2006
Ohhh, this is so exciting. I can tell this story will be awesome just by the first chapter. I'm anxious to see where this will be going. Already I can see that this story will be quite amazing just by the details in this one chapter and the descriptions that are so vivid and well-written. Keep up the great work, I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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From ANON - Camaro on February 05, 2006
hahaha Oh.. be gone little Keiko! Shoo! Shoo! Or are you still sore from my last comment on Hiba's reviewboard? How predictable really. Yet still, the bipolar bitch in you has reared its hideous head again and you come to my story sniveling like your positively emo self so often does.

Save your petty, boring insults kiddo. I've heard that little line several times and believe me, its gone stale years ago.

And... sniff* sniff*... I'm not "special". Look babe, just because I didn't wear a helmet to school like you doesn't mean I'm not "special". And please, if I wasn't, dearest little rodent, why oh why are you knocking at my door looking for some sort of fight?

You must really love me just as obsessively as the rest of your little flamer pals; to strive so pathetically for even the most negative of my attentions.

Be gone little nothing!

They'll all remember me far longer than you.

Camaro

Ps... I do want to point out that I appreciated your attention to "grammer" this time! LOL! Dumbass.
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From ANON - Keiko on February 05, 2006
Have you seen the anime Monster? It gives me the same vibes as this fanfiction and Monster 1, which is a very good thing. Oh and you're a rude bitch. You are not special.
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From ANON - Dominic Shade on January 31, 2006
Absolutely perfect. I can't wait to read more of this, and to see how Goku handles it. His psyche has gone through so much, lol.

Good times and rock on,

Dom
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From ANON - Kat on January 30, 2006
And the Monster's back... I don't really know what to say to this chapter, except ewwww!! Although the priest wasn't exactly a pleasant person, there is something to be said about the horrors he saw before his death. Well, we actually don't know if he died, but I'm assuming he did. It makes more sense. Poor Goku, he knows that the Devil is back... literally. That would explain his attitude in the preview that you sent me. I don't know, I want to feel sad for that priest, as a fellow human being, but I find that I can't. His death was horrible, but just thinking about all of the boys whose lives he ruined and how he didn't feel a damn bit sorry makes me think he deserved it. It's a fitting death, to me. Still, talk about disturbing and graphic, which is of course why I love your writing. Well, it's one of the reasons anyway. Glad to see that this story is back, I was wondering when you would start it up again. Of course, I know why it's taken awhile and I'm not complaining in the slightest :) I can't wait to read more, this introduction really surprised me!! Again, I wouldn't have expected anything less from you. Later!!
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From ANON - Camaro on January 29, 2006
... Excuse me Phoenix? Fuck you. Seriously. DO NOT criticize my reviewers if all you have to say is.. "ohh nice story by the way."

Like.. ok, "Nice fucking spawn of Satan your mother shit into this world... by the way."

Seriously.. like it isn't hard enough to get decent freakin' reviews on this site, we seriously don't need punk ass bitches like you wandering around and making people feel insecure about what they write or review. So seriously.. shut the fuck up and DO NOT COME BACK unless YOU HAVE something more to add than "nice story."

Pfft... go back to ffnet you week old cum stain.

Camaro
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From ANON - Phoenix on January 29, 2006
BrucesGirl: Kiss ass much? Pathetic.

Nice story, by the way.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on January 28, 2006
Wow! Just amazing as always. Your stories really make me think about how I view myself and others. It's great. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - It's me! Nigga! umm it's Sara on January 25, 2006
Ahhh Shit! You're back again. Hellz ya biatch! anyway...

Girl I love this so much. It's like your my (to steal from a lame ass song) dirty little secret. Mwhahaha. Miss Perfect at school (kinda). But boy do I love reading your material. Such a shame my friends are punk ass bitches who can't handle one mild sex scene. Fucking pathetic. ANYway. You're writing is fine and the same as ever. Good descriptions I visualized...EVERYTHING. You didn't reuse the same words over and over, which I highly appreciate. You give the right amount of description. Not too much, not too little. Man what the hell can I say...just that YOU'RE BACK AGAIN BITCH AND DAMN I MISSED YA!

love, Sara
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From PrincessKoriandr on January 25, 2006
Shiiiiiiiiiiiiiiit! Awesome First Chapter. You said it was something to be proud of and I agree. I couldn't decide if I should have ran away in fright or give in to the childish notion and say: "He's Baaaaaaack!" Really, I can't wait to read more. Its always inspiring when a writer gives you something to think about, hell, or even 'pause". Show's that you give people plenty to think about.

~Kenya
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