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Reviews for Monster 2: Resurrection

By : Camaro

From ANON - ~anz~ on January 25, 2006
Dreams... who's to say what dreams are... fantasy... reality.... a gateway to another dimension? Or is it retributions way of telling you that somewhere down the line that you've been royally effed?

Julius Ceasar's wife was warned in a dream of his upcoming demise.... the soothsayer warned him also... Beware the Ides of March, but did he listen? and worse he failed to heed his own advice...surround me with Fat Men... for thin men's eyes are too close together and thus they are lean and hungry...murderous, ambitious...I do not trust them... And so on the fifteenth day of March... one very shocked ambitous Emperor Wannabe consumed by the monster Imperious Immortalus Deus: Emperor of Rome, strode into the senate... and was stabbed to death... betrayed by his thin eyed ambitious friend...who had been seduced by his own monster: POWER! And as he lay there dying on the cold marble floor of the Roman Senate, gazing at his hands covered in his essence, his life's blood, watching as it seeped out of him, soaking the floors of the chambers, his mind shrieking at the irony of his betrayal--at how they could do this to him after all he did for them, but all he could think of to say as his final words were: Et tu Brute? Et tu? [You too, Brutus? You too?]

I guess the priest now knows how Julius Ceasar felt.

Dreams... who is to say what is the fantasy and what is reality? Is this waking monstrosity we call life a dream? or is it the nightmare?

The only time the soul is free is during the dream...the dream is the reflection of the soul... the only time we have to see what really is.

Dreams...the final reflection of our minds....our hearts... our souls.... our ultimate yearnings...

Well that's a helluva way to find out that your boyfriend's back!!!

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From ANON - Addict on January 25, 2006
Great. Love the imagery, however disturbing. I don't know where you're going with this but maybe just maybe it's Trunks this time? Ony because at the end of Monster you said his eyes were calculating and not Gokus (or something like that can't really recall), maybe I'm getting ahead of myself! No matter, because this is great! I still love Fathoming Love though... but anything from you is spectacular.

Thank-you again!!

Addict
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From ANON - Chloe (chainsawgames) on January 25, 2006
I like this. I want to know what happens!!! Very nice shift from the priest being your regular nice old man and then him actually being a child molestor and a person who doesn't want to help like... People screaming. It's like watching your opnion of someone take a slow downward fall, with little jolts here and there. I like it. Very sad that the monster accidentily killed the one nice person. =( The only connections with the original Monster so far seem to be at the end, with the craziness. Also the priest, seeing as there were priests in Monster I. And the literal Monster! Craziness! Eeeeh! I can't wait to see where this is going, it seems like it's too early in the story for me to make particularly useful comments. But anyhow, I'm thinking this is the beginning of Sin? Perhaps?
There's a few spelling things I saw (rapped, somewhere), but the writing a great return to the whole style of Monster. Ah, refreshes all those memories. =P
Anyhow, YAY for UPDATE!
Toodles!
PS. Hope your flying grooming supplies don't do anything too crazy... O.o
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From ANON - chayron on January 25, 2006
Was it Goku who woke up after having a vision/nightmare? Will it be again told in his POV? Oh, cannot wait!

Yes, everybody already told, and I’ll just repeat, but anyway: the descriptions are wonderful! So detailed that just simply sweeps into the other world.

“For emptiness can never be destroyed, killed, stabbed or slain. It can only be filled.” Oh, that one…makes one take another look around.

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From ANON - You know who on January 25, 2006
*pops open the champagne* it's a big night for both of us, baby! We've (or rather you) been planning this for a loooong time.. ^_~ but we couldn't let THEM know, huh?

Ahhhh..the last part was perfect.. and the first part was sad.. it reminded me a whole lot of Shelley's Frankenstein. :/ The monster and the child and the death of the pureness. Sigh...
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From ANON - Macha on January 25, 2006
OMg...... Wow.... that was so graphic. I liked the intensity of it. There didn't seem to be much of a pause, either in the Priest recollection of his past doings or the horrific dream someone else had of his history and happenings.

WHOOOT.... LOL... I am glad you couldn't wait.

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From ANON - ahh holy chao on January 25, 2006
What could I expect but another fiery beginning of a sure-to-be masterpiece. Around this time last year I read Monster 1. It seemed to remove me from the world and place me in that stream of nightmares interspersed with reality, filled with death, torture, and that mysterious force called sin. I am so grateful to you, Camaro, for writing something so powerful that could do that to a person. I am religious, a Christian in fact, but was determined not to cringe from, judge, or condemn bloody descriptions of torture, sacrilegious statements by characters, and various other shocking acts of violence. I try to keep in mind that your graphic style, poetic and cruel, has a purpose and a message that can only be delivered through brutality and profanity. And I find the same is true in this chapter.

Beautiful introduction. Very interesting abstraction from the actual DBZ timeline, talking about ...Sin? the birth of Sin or Satan? Don't know. But very moving, the curse of the mirror really makes me think. And the last sentence about emptiness.

This chapter seemed to have it all--gore, brutality, sacrilege. It seems I have accumulated practice at reading your stories, so no cringing, no judgment. Just appreciation and gladness again that you have explored psychological justifications sick people like pedophile priests use for their own actions. You always bring up a view that I have never thought of before, and you make me realize just how messed up people can be. It is especially significant I feel because these kinds of people are common, and we hear about them often, as opposed to killers like the pizza man or the priest of eyes. It is easy to confine those kinds of psychopath murderers to works of fiction and horror movies. But pedophile priests? On the news, in the churches, still molesting children and getting away with their unbearable hypocrisy. I am glad you chose such a character in this introduction. He was human, guilty, idle, until his world fell apart and he realized he could not escape.

I love the line the altar boy says at the end about mommy and daddy not hearing. Immediately I thought about how it connotes that God the Father is not hearing, even after the priest prayed so fervently to be delivered. Apt ending to that man's life.

The altar boys crawling along the walls and ceiling remind me of a monster from Resident Evil 2 (the movie). But altar boys are so much cooler than zombie monsters.

I absolutely love it when Goku says "shit!" I can imagine all this playing out as a movie. That's where the viewers heave a collective, nervous sigh that there's just a bit of humor in an otherwise shocking, piss-in-your-pants introduction.

Thanks again, Camaro, you never let me down.
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From BrucesGirl on January 25, 2006
Alone, monstrous and empty, it remained, scratching its talons against the shield of rock that embraced it.

What amazing start to a story. We so often lock ourselves up inside of walls, clawing to get out and stretch our wings, and yet we fear the freedom of love itself. Love has the ability to rip our walls away from us, yet it can clip our wings and teach us to hate. So beautiful, and yet, in a delicate sense, so dark and deadly.

Wonderful start, sweetheart! I�m so excited about this story. I think it�s going to be your most spectacular work yet!

The sensation of man approached as the years collected and soon, the monster began to understand what the term �companionship� meant. What friendship was. And it in its black, wretched heart, it yearned for it if only for a moment.

How we yearn for love! We search for it. We live for it. We kill for it. That one moment that we can grasp it sends our lives into a plethora of beautiful sunrises and sunsets, and when it�s gone, all we see is darkness. No more morning, and no more dusk. We crave that light and we crave the beautiful emotion that accompanies it. Take it away�and it fills us with hatred.

Maybe hatred in itself is the FEAR and the DISGUST of emptiness. Maybe hatred is the human answer to emptiness where love is the divine answer.

For emptiness can never be destroyed, killed, stabbed or slain. It can only be filled.

God, what a beautiful statement. Emptiness can be filled, but just as we can fill it with love, it can also be filled with hate. An empty barrel can hold a bushel of delicious, fragrant, perfect red apples, or it can hold a bushel of maggots, rotting flesh, and stench. Perhaps we look for the wrong things to fill our emptiness.

Maybe hatred doesn�t fill it at all.

'Don't look back,' he made himself promise, breathing hard. 'Don't you dare look backwards!' Yet, human nature turned his head, his feet crumpling beneath him as he landed on his knees.

I don�t know how much you know about the Old Testament in the Bible, but there is a story about Lot and his wife. When God burned down Sodom and Gomorrah, he told them not to look back or they would die. Human nature of curiosity got the best of Lot�s wife, and she turned to look back, and she was immediately turned to a pillar of salt. She risked her life for that one look.

Maybe human nature deceives us in itself. So odd that our own instinct is our downfall and death, yet guides us correctly through the daily routines of life. I have an enemy living inside of me, and so many people can�t even control it.

Babe, this chapter is just� WOW. Amazing. I can�t wait for the rest of it. I�m so amazed at your talent, and now I know, I�ll have to work extra hard on The Breath of Sorrow to keep up with you. ~laughs~

Good luck with this endeavor. I intend to be with you every step of the way.

BG

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