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By : darkcrimson
  • From SilverWyvern on April 04, 2007
    Awesome addition to your story.
    I like how your writing has punch and humor to it. The characters are nicely portrayed. Ronin was really brilliant in this chapter. I loved all his interactions with Rei. The real good part about this chapter is how you mingled humor in all that happened. It's one of your strong points are a writer.

    I have no idea why you say this is not one of your best, I thought it was priceless! XD


    Update soon!
    Tina
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  • From SilverWyvern on March 08, 2007
    Whoo-hoo, I'm on part two!


    I loved it again! You get better and better, huh? Talented girl! XD
    In this chapter, we get a good feeling for your main character, Rei. You really develop his personality well. I think it's often hard to give the right personality to a character in a story like this, but you've managed this perfectly! I love how he interacts with the other Beyblade characters, it's very sharp and funny, and I can't wait for more! Keep up the good work!

    See you on the next chapter (lol! XP),
    Tina
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  • From SilverWyvern on March 08, 2007
    Hey there,
    I'm review the first chapter of your fic.

    I must say, I think it's really great. I loved it. The way you set up the story makes the reader curious for more. You have this knack at sucking the reader into your story because you thought up an interesting plot line. Uh huh! Writer quality #1 is to have a beautiful imagination, and you have it. As for your style, your biggest strenght is description. You really set the scene nicely, and the reader can completely visualize what's going on. you don't skim on the details, and that makes your story almost palpable. Mucho congrats on this!

    I'm going forth to review the rest! XD

    With love,
    Tina
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  • From ANON - hanamura on January 10, 2007
    well this story is good i like it very much. . . but there is a prob in this story, some of your grammar is incorrect and so many wrong spelled words. . . so please check it again, but none the less the plot and the flow of your story is ssssssoooooo gooooooooood. . . please update it soon i will be happy to read it again and again. . . and please don't get mad at me, im just a concerned reader. . . peace man. . . V(*^__________^*)V
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  • From ANON - gina on December 19, 2006
    :D i sure look forward to the next chapter... you're such a good writer.. :) i love this fic sooooooooo much..
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  • From ANON - RAYTALALOVER on December 10, 2006
    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!IT'S CUTE.PLEASE LET THEIR BE MORE KAIREI ACTION !!!!!!!!UPDATE SOONUPDATESOONUPDATESOON!!!!
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  • From ANON - RAYTALALOVER on December 10, 2006
    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!IT'S CUTE.PLEASE LET THEIR BE MORE KAIREI ACTION !!!!!!!!UPDATE SOONUPDATESOONUPDATESOON!!!!
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  • From ANON - ria on November 07, 2006
    aaww man u just had to end it there didnt u but i guess i should be grateful that u finally updated. this is one of my most favourite stories and u have really improved in the last few chapters although cause of the huge gap i had to reread the last chapter a bit as id forgotten some of the story which sucked.why dont u post this story on fanfiction.net more readers go there and it will get a wider response.wooohoo some kairei action FINALLY although i cant seem to understand ppls fetish with aking rei a pushover ,oh well.ur a good writer and i hope garland and brooklyn get hit by a speeding train and have their heads squashed the idjits.neways just please update soon kay.it makes the world go round...i swear.
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  • From ANON - Arsinen on November 06, 2006
    YOu know there is just one thin that is bothering me. If Rei was falling asleep wouldn't his hands become lax since his muscles are relaxng? Also there was something about him having his shoulder dislocated unless he's so shocked that he doesn't feel the pain just yet. Other than it was an awesome chappie. Poor Rei he never gets a break. I wonder when a little bit of light will be shed upon him since it seems only darkness seems to surround him at this moment. Anyways please update soon. See ya.
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  • From ANON - BEYBLADED-BOYSLOVERS on November 04, 2006
    YAY!!!I LOVE YOU!!!XD U updated,awsome.please update as soon as u can.i love your story.please more KaixRei fluff.:puppy eyes:
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  • From ANON - NightFox on October 27, 2006
    OMG OMG YOu have to update like asap I love your story it so rox!!!!!!!! Plz update
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  • From ANON - fox on September 26, 2006
    PLEASE UPDATE !!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 19, 2006
    hi!!! i really like your story
    please update soon!!!
    ps: your grammer is NOT that bad
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  • From ANON - MizzGina on August 31, 2006
    So f*cking awesome!! i love it... please please update this asap...

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  • From DiamondRedRose on August 30, 2006
    To: Nashia

    I have something to add to that, it seems you don't have much cat knowledge to start with, yes they have good timing. But their balance, without tail, sucks big time. They need their tail for balance. And about the Rei part, isn't the writer deciding what happens and you'll just have to go with it? Sorry for being a biatch like that but it's not your decision, I advise you to write for yourself if you have your idea's. And seriously.. don't go into the professional character explanation part, it's really mind numbing.

    And just so you know, shitty and crappy aren't a good explanation, give a good reason why it 'sucks' not because you say so like everything you say goes.

    And last but not least, this story is in my opinion pretty darn good, her writing skills are quite advanced even though her granmar may not be perfect, and to be honest. Yours isn't all perfect either, none isn't really. Appreciate a person's effort and taste for art as in this case is writing.

    That's all I had to say, I don't have anything against you. But if you give some critique, do it good and don't bring it like you own it all.

    Diamond Red Rose has spoken.

    PS: DarkCrimson, You rock my socks and so do your stories! ^_~
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