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Reviews for The Chains We Wear

By : LadyYeinKhan

From ANON - lostfairyluna on March 20, 2012
Ok, so I tried to wright a review to this back at the beginning of the month, but I forgot I can't post reviews from my phone even though I have the internet of it. So I've been meaning to get on another device to write this - but between work (with the store I'm working at about to go into liquidation and close, because corrporate idiots suck), a husband, a house that needs to be picked up everyday, a pet that needs attention, and of course taking care of myself with being 5 months pregnant - but I kept forgetting and I've just now remembered.

So anyway, enough about me... On to the review!!!

I completely understand that writing can take a backseat to other things that are going on in your life, and I in no way fault you for taking 6 months to post chapter 15. I first started reading this store in August last year and in 3 days I had read all the chapters that you had. I stayed awake sometimes until real late because I was just so enchated by this store and the way you write. So I don't ever want you to think that just because it took you a while to write a chapter and post it that that make you a bad writer. I very much hope that you will post chapter 16 in less than six months but that is just because I am so excited to find out what happens next.

I really wanted to hate Fahd, I really did but as the store goes on and more of him is revieled, and how much he cares about poor Trowa, I just can't bring myself to hate him anymore. I felt so bad for Trowa when he couldn't sleep without Fahd being next to him. It's the same way I feel when I'm away from my husband, I have such a hard time sleeping without him next to me. I just knew though that Fahd would find out about the overdose, when it comes to that man Trowa has no chance of keeping secrets, he can read him like an open book.

I very much enjoyed the sparing match with Duo at the beginning of the chapter. Duo may talk himself around in circles but he always seems to just pull that one little comment out of his ass that sums up everything that has been going on. I am just speculating of course here but I feel that now that Duo weaseled the truth about Trowa's disappearences out of Heero, that unlike Heero who wouldn't - even though he desperatly wants to - follow, or attempt to find out who Trowa is seeing on his own, Duo wouldn't have a problem keeping tabs or traking him out right to find out who the mystery boyfriend is.

Well that's it for now, I am unoffically following you on your Tumbr, just checking from time to time to see how your progress is going. I wish you all the best and wait with great anticipation for chapter 16!
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From ANON - OriginalCeenote on March 05, 2012
Another painful, intense, engrossing chapter from you. I hate Fahd. Seriously. I hate Trowa's reliance on him in tandem with his revulsion, and I keep mentally screaming "Don't let him break you, Trowa!"

But that's what makes me keep coming back. I can't look away. This is very well written, I love Trowa's internal narrative and constant conflict. I loved the sparring match with Duo, too, since it was nice, in a way, to get a little of his own back from Duo's previous accusations of him and what he thought of as Trowa's betrayal.

I'm beating this review to death. I'll quit yakking. Write more of this. There. That's all the feedback needed.
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From ANON - justme21 on March 02, 2012
Holy hell! I loved this chapter. It might be my favorite. (until the next chapter comes out of course) I loved the Duo/Trowa interaction. I love when Duo kept asking if Trowa's "boyfriend" was a preventor or if he was a politician�s secret. He's going to wish it was once he finds out who his "boyfriend" is.

O_O He actually thought about leaving with Fahd.

It was cute when Trowa said he couldn't sleep and wanted Fahd to figure it out. And Fahd told him that he was spoiled.

�You weren�t there!�
OMG OMG Trowa...

As much as he's trying not to, Trowa is falling apart.

"If 03 was so in need of him, perhaps it was time to finish those one or two, or four, things."
I'm just going to pretend that there's not a possibility that he's talking about the other pilots.

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From ANON - lostfairyluna on August 24, 2011
I found this story a few day's ago and haven't been able to stop reading it. Your writing style is captivating and just draws you in with the interaction between the characters, the story progression, and the main characters dilemma. Trowa is my favorite character from the Gundam Wing series so pretty much any store that centers around him I like. However, out of any other fanfiction that I have read, this has to be my favorite. I am entirely amused with Trowa's situation, being half man-half woman and being controlled by a terrorist politician, which he seems to no longer be able to function normally without. I am very much looking forward to the next chapter, for further development of the feelings that Quatre has finally seemed to let rise to the surface after may years. The complete reaction of Heero, and Duo to Trowa's OD, and of coarse Fahd's (cause I'm sure that even if Trowa doesn't outright tell him, he'll find out). I'm also sure that Heero is probably none to happy with not only his lover for supplying Trowa with the drugs, but with Trowa for taking them in the first place, as it is another on a growing list of concerns Heero seems to have for his friend since he has started 'dating' and continues to come home is varying states of distress.
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From ANON - Miku on August 07, 2011
I'm so very pleased you have managed to continue on with this story. I've not been on this site for some time and as soon as I'd seen you had updated, my heart skipped a beat. I can't help but get absorbed by your writing style and Trowa's situation. I love the hold Fahd has over Trowa and how Heero has been seemingly so accepting about Trowa coming back home in awful states. I can't wait for the next chapter to see how the guys interact with Trowa after his bad reaction to the sleeping pills. Thank you for writing this story! xxx
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From ANON - yohlenyaoilover on July 09, 2011
This was such a good chapter! I really love reading how the other pilots react to Trowa now. I so badly want Quatre to get it together and be with Trowa already, reading the interactions there would be so awesome. Can't wait for more! Thank you for updating!
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From ANON - yohlenyaoilover on July 07, 2011
Ah! An update. Sadly I can't read it right now, I don't have the time D= I may treat myself and reread this story from the start again, I'll have time tomorrow. Yay! I'll comment once I've read the new chappie, I just had to let you know how happy I am that you updated!
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From ANON - terracannon876 on July 07, 2011
Thank you for the update =)

I've always found Quatre the hardest to relate to, and thus the hardest to write. Most people write him as a wuss, and you certainly don't do that, which I think is good. He does come off a bit on the harsh side here, though. Part of the problem may be because Quatre's thrown into a situation beyond what he understands -- and everyone acts OOC in those cases; and another part may just be because Quatre was being analyzed through Trowa's eyes, towards the end, which is biased as hell.

All in all, though, good job. Sorry, no criticism =P

I will say this, though. That nightmare was one freaky thing >_> Duo probably should've stated some of the more...potent side effects. I wonder what drugs WERE they? XD

Thank goodness for a Fahd-free chapter.

Hope you update again soon! =)
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From ANON - Just me on June 29, 2011
I'm extremely happy to see that you updated. Very interesting. Trowa needs Fahd to sleep. I hope the Doc met a horrific end. Somehow I knew the pills would cause trouble? I loved your Quatre. For me his selfishness is completely understandable and realistic. To Quatre he put in all this work only to have Trowa be with someone else. I like the way Quatre flip flopped between disgust and want. And poor Trowa knows, but would rather ignore it. It seems that the more he trys to keep things together, the more it's falling apart. And Quatre looks like Doc... Wow. Not only that but Quatre slipped enough for Trowa to make the connection and realize how much acting Quatre really has been doing. Hehe Trowa is mad that he has to wait before he sees Fahd. I really look forward to more. I can't wait to see where all of this is going.
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From ANON - Ida Cippo on June 05, 2011
Oh, I am so happy to see that you updated this story! I don't believe I love another story on the GundamWing site as much as this one. I found it a long, long way back and even then I was fascinated by it.
I would always check on it, everytime on a whimp I would visit this fandom I have put behind me since a couple of years. And every time I would read it from beginning to end and it would make me want to watch GundamWing again!

But I was always sure it was over with and would never update again... But it has! I am ever so grateful to you. It is a most marvellous piece of writting!

I love above all the fact that I cannot tell what you have in mind. Everytime I think I have finally some kind of guess what is going to happen next, you surprise me once again. For example I have no clue in which direction you wish to continue this story, with this strange way Fahd is treating Trowa and that agent in the Preventors, and with Heero's wierd reactions.... I cannot describe the wonderful thrill your story creates.
Also I admire your capacity to give your characters (either your own or your versions of the orginial characters) so much life. That Trowa is a vegetarian and how he sits there his hand going over the motion of writting arabic (I believe?) in the air. Those are the little things I absolutly adore in this fanfic.
Should you be able to continue to update, be assured I will be reading your newest chapters!
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From ANON - Just Me on May 07, 2011
YESSSSSSSSS!!! I just happened to check the site before I went to bed and found this. And I am one happy camper. As I've probably said before, this is my favorite story. I'm replying for the last chapter as well as this.

How sweet yet sad when Quatre touched Trowa's face. Trowa turned into it only to brush it off as Quatre thinking he was someone else. Woo... Heero asked Trowa if he was seeing anyone. Oh Heero, you have no idea. I can't wait to see more interaction between the guys. Hehehe... Just when you think Fahd was being nice by getting Trowa the flute, the vibrator is unveiled.

Trowa wanting the scissors or a letter opener so he could destroy something was so funny. Oh shit... I just thought Fahd was being kinky. How creepy to find out that wasn't him. My poor Trowa. Bravo to him for trying to bite it off. But the taser to such a painful place... OUCH. I have to admit that I normally hate OCs but I adore Fahd. I shouldn't but I do. I love his and Trowas messed up "relationship". Fahd gathering Trowa into his arms. Very cute. Loved, loved, loved Fahd reaction to what happened. Trowa means something to Fahd. What that something is remains to be seen.

Is Heero starting to get suspicious? Trowa made a comment to himself about it not taking that long to do something to
the bike. Was Heero checking for something? Or was Trowa just in pain and ready to go? Loved then end with Wufei. He's concerned.

I can't wait for more.
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From ANON - terracannon867 on May 05, 2011
It's a good thing you're safe. It's a wonder you found time to update at all, at this rate.

Thanks for writing! I enjoyed the Wufei banter at the end, too. Fahd's growing ... attachment was not something I'd forseen; I'd always thought he was into Trowa just as a novelty item of sorts, but it seems like he's starting to genuinely want to keep him (...maybe not as one would a romantic partner, but still, better than, say, a collectible.). Trowa's history was horrible and I did indeed flinch a little upon reading it. Trowa's injury this chapter also caused a bit of a flinch >_>

Thanks, again =D
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From CeeCee on May 05, 2011
Trowa's memories were tragic and intense, and they explain a lot about why he is who he is. Chapter 13 made me want to hit Nizar and Fahd with a bat. Trowa's realization that it wasn't Fahd when he heard the panting made that scene even creepier. Good stuff.

I hope you're managing okay in your current location. I'm stateside, but it's hard to watch the news about Japan.
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From ANON - yohlenyaoilover on May 05, 2011
You updated! I'm so happy~~ I love were this story is going. I love your protrayal of Trowa and how he interactes with the other pilots. I can't wait until they all find out who it is Trowa is 'seeing'. Thank you for updating. My thoughts are with Japan
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From ANON - yohlenyaoilover on April 27, 2011
I'd just like to say that you own my soul right now. This is the best Gundam story I have ever read. Fact. It's so beautifully written and the subject is so unique. When I first started reading I was a bit dubious and didn't really know how I felt about Trowa being an hermaphrodite, seeing as he is my absolute favourite character, but after reading this you have totally convinced me. I can't get across in words how much I love this story. I'm super looking forward to your next update!
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