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Reviews for The Chains We Wear

By : LadyYeinKhan

From ANON - on July 05, 2016
Omg! I can't wait to see how this ends!!! Gah I need him to have a happily ever after lol he is such a torturd soul right now! Someone show him real love =P Tro is my fave ^.^ keep writing author-nim!!

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From ANON - Winter on March 03, 2014
Thank you so much for all the time and effort you put into creating! Thank you so much for putting such beautiful work into the world!
I've been following this story excitedly and wish you all the best in the world.
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From ANON - terracannon876 on October 24, 2013
I noticed this late, but thank you for updating!

I liked this POV of Heero. I actually like it better than the previous time you wrote in Heero's POV, although it is actually from a lack of sinking into his thoughts. Mm... Lemme see if I can explain this right. To me, Heero isn't an introspective step in that he sees something, he processes it, and he doesn't worry it like a dog on a bone. He leaves it be, and so in the end his thoughts tend to be rather minimalistic. Rather, this is what I see his GW self being, and since your Heero is improving from that, the slight addition of feelings and attention to other people's emotions works really well.

I also liked that Heero didn't mention anything about Trowa's "different" body traits at all, as though it wasn't something that mattered to him. What mattered to him was Trowa - the person - and not the traits of the body (though I'm certain those will be addressed since it's the root of all his trauma).

The scene where Heero witnessed Tracey was one of my favorite, along with all of them taking inventory and just ripping through Tracey's apartment like a collective hurricane. I think my favorite bit was when the boy was talking and I just thought, "If all of them were regular teenage boys ... this would still totally happen, in a 'Time for a makeover!!' kind of way." It's like they're redecorating his place (from an outsider's POV) XD

Thank you, again, for the new chapter! I'm sorry I couldn't review it sooner. I noticed you're caught up in AO3, too, though, so I'll follow you there! I still haven't figured out if there is a subscription system for AFF.

I look forward to reading more! And I hope whatever is happening in your life resolves itself if it is something stressing you out. While I have no idea what's going on, I wish you the best :)
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From YojiKato on September 30, 2013
Very interesting. I like a Trowa-centric fic, so I am definitely enjoying this. I really hope there's a happy ending somewhere here, keep it up. ^_^ Oh, and as a fellow writer who suffers from numerous typos herself, it wouldn't hurt to keep an eye out on those. But the plot line and story are very unique. I look very much forward to the next installment. ^_^
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From ANON - Tenshi no Hoshii on June 14, 2013
...I stumbled upon this fic by chance and I was a little hesitant to read it from all the warnings in the first chapter, but decided to plow ahead and do it anyway. By the end of the first chapter, I was even more curious how this will play out. By the 2nd I unbelievably intrigued. Now I'm sitting here, wondering why I'm willingly enjoying this Trowa torture. I feel awful, but this is well written.

I'm still reading on, but I stopped to review now to just let it be known, that you have gained a new reader and that ... for a minute there... that whole chapter 8, I hardcorely shipped Trowa and the Bartender. No regrets. Carry on.
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From ANON - Chezaswulf on March 10, 2013
Hello, i wanted to say this is such a great fic! You Did such a good job. I really enjoyed the intensity and the way it wasn't predictable or boring! Wow good job. I hope you will finish it! Btw are you from nj? I am but now i am teaching in japan. You really made me miss it haha. Hope you continue! Cheza
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From Daydreamer79 on March 07, 2013
wow, that is a nasty cliffhanger. Now I'm going to be anxious until the next chapter. I love this story, especially now that Fahd is in jail. I really like that these later chapters we get to see things from Heero and Duo's pov. I'm really looking forward to the future chapters. :D Keep up the good work.
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From Daydreamer79 on March 06, 2013
I really loved this chapter. While I love reading in Trowa's pov, I really liked seeing Heero's. And I am so happy that Heero wants Trowa. I am curious how things will work out over all for everyone. I am also ecstatic that Fahd is in jail, and will hopefully stay there. I will say that you did make a character that I despised, which is pretty rare for me. I almost couldn't stand to read any scenes with him and skipped all smut involving him and many scenes with him and Trowa. XD. It will be hard for the boys but I'm really anxious to find out just how you're going to work things out :D
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From Daydreamer79 on March 06, 2013
I really liked this chapter. I think mainly because of the obvious show of connection to Trowa that the other guys have. Up until now, it seemed almost detached, as if Trowa was the odd man out so to speak. This chapter showed a growth. Duo showed he wanted to help by giving the pills to Trowa, even though they managed to fuck him up. Heero was ready to fuck someone up when Trowa screamed. Quatre...he bothers me a little, mostly because of his internal thoughts concerning Trowa's hermaphroditic state. It's understandable, but I'm hoping that Trowa will find someone who will love all of him. Constructively, I think a lot tends to happen in short amounts of time, so some times it is hard to follow everything that is happening. Scenes change abruptly and I feel kinda loss and trying to find my grounding in following the story. It's very well written and very little in terms of grammar errors. I'm still enjoying this. Thanks for posting.

As you can tell, I'm reviewing as I read, so you'll probably end up with a lot of reviews. This story is just too huge for just one review at the end. Also, I feel you about the AFF upload system. It still lags me out a lot.
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From Daydreamer79 on March 06, 2013
I'm not one to tell another author how to write or what to do, so I won't. I'll simply tell you what I wish. I don't mind the angst. That doesn't bother me. In fact I like it but I'm still bothered by the fact that Trowa doesn't seem to be moving toward anyone as far as a loving relationship. Is this whole fic supposed to be Fahd/Trowa? Is Trowa not going to end up with anyone else? If so, well from a personal standpoint, that's disappointing. Also, I was a bit confused with the dialogue between Heero and Trowa when they had lunch. I reread that chapter twice and I couldn't follow it. Is Quatre in a relationship with Duo and Heero??? I'm really confused. I tend to skip any smut involving Fahd so it's possible that I missed it there but did not want to back track and read anything sexual with Fahd. There are times when this story is hard to follow and it confuses me at times and yet I keep coming back. It is a wonderful story and I praise you for your portrayal of Trowa. I'm still not finished with what you have posted, so I'll keep reading and hope things turn out better. Trowa needs to do something other than let Fahd fuck him. He should just kill the man and be done with it. That's what I think he should do hahahaha. Anyway, onto the next ch. Good work.
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From Daydreamer79 on March 06, 2013
Well, I must say that while I am loving this, I'm not so much loving the sex. lol, in fact I skipped it all together XD. I guess I just want to kill Fahd so bad that seeing Trowa have sex with him turns my stomach a little(read as alot). To me it is rape, regardless of sexual gratification and I don't like reading that. I'm hoping something happens to save Trowa from this soon(in other words, kill Fahd painfully). The story overall is still great and I'm enjoying it, but I'm hoping it will shift a bit away from torturing Trowa and have things look up for him. Well, onto chapter 11.
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From Daydreamer79 on March 06, 2013
I'm only on ch. 4 but I just felt the need to go ahead and review. This story has me blown away. I'm so curious how things will unwind in general. I've always found it interesting when people wrote about hermaphrodites. You don't see that too often. I love Trowa's self hate of his body and I'm curious to see if he gets someone who will show him that it doesn't matter. So, just loads of praise for you. It's 330 am and I'm having trouble putting down the story even though I need to sleep. That's saying something hahaha. Keep up the good work. :D
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From lostfairyluna on January 24, 2013
Evil, woman... I hate cliff hangers. However, I have to say 'It's about time!!!' The guys have found Trowa, I'm so excited to see what happens. Please, please, please update soon.
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From ANON - Justme21 on January 16, 2013
Woo... a new chapter. It was awesome. It was awkward and strained between the boys but that is expected. I can't wait to see how their reunion continues to go. And what's wrong with Trowa? Hopefully he doesn't die. I hope you do put the WWII au up when you can. I am interested.
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From ANON - Ceecee on January 16, 2013
You're killing me here!!! I love the details in the latest chapter. The tension when the boys confront Trowa is tangible and almost painful.
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