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Reviews for Gundam Slave Boy (Finshed)

By : Sephanie
  • From o0littlehands0o on October 13, 2009
    I liked the initial idea....and that's where it stopped. it seems to me that you're taking ever critique as a personal attack, but even so, i hope that someone would be able to get through to you: get this beta-ed~~ >_
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  • From ANON - Yume on October 29, 2006
    Hello Ace. My name is Yume and I must say that fic Gundam Slave Boy was a good idea and I am glad that you wrote it. But I must say that it was a litle too cruel. Heero was too cruel for Duo. The end was very good. Fix the things between Duo and Heero and Quatre and Trowa was great. And what happend with Wufei? Did he leave them?
    Really, I like your fics and I hope you will write more of them. You are really good. I think you have a great talent. ^-^ Only others don´t must be so cruel. But it was great. Bye bye. Yume ^^
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  • From Sephanie on October 17, 2006
    P.s. I am only "attacking" because I am being Attacked. Your the only person I have ever "Attacked" If that is how you want to put it. You want to go to war Well lets go Cause I got the God of Death Deathscythe on my side and Sandrock and Heavyarms and Nataku or Shelong and Wing Zero. and Zero 1 and the Talgees Eaveon (There love thar spelling mwahahahahahaha) You can say I am crazy But I already know what! This is to much fun I love this thanks for letting me have so much fun.

    Quatre's Angel and Quatre is an angel ^_^ awww Quatre with wings how sweet!
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on September 05, 2006
    Aw. That's all? I'm glad that everything worked out though. I'll be waiting for you new stories.
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  • From ANON - kittycat on September 04, 2006
    awwwwwwwww you finished it!!!! DAMN! I really loved reading your story!!!!!!!! I hope you write many more:P!
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  • From ANON - kittycat on September 04, 2006
    awwwwwwwww you finished it!!!! DAMN! I really loved reading your story!!!!!!!! I hope you write many more:P!
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on September 02, 2006
    Well, that takes care of the whole Trowa and Duo thing with their Masters I guess. Mm. Good chapter. I wonder if Wufei is going to get a slave too. Update soon please!
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on August 30, 2006
    Ow. That has got to hurt Trowa. Guess things are going to get even more interesting now that Quatre has Trowa's soul.
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on August 29, 2006
    I'm really glad that you updated so soon. Now Wufei comes in. I can't wait to see how this will turn out.
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on August 28, 2006
    Really, really, really good chapter. Poor Quatre. I like how you had Heero handle the situation with Quatre. Update soon please!
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on August 27, 2006
    Interesting turn of things. I wonder what Quatre and Heero will do next. Update soon please!
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  • From ANON - Anya on August 26, 2006
    Well, thank you for the personal message. But don't you think that it would be good to actually listen to what people say? From your message I assumed that maybe I wasn't the only one. And what I wrote to you as an advice was not a "hate" thing - I showed you what to change, it's the same as if you had a beta... But you don't listen, that's ok. Won't push. Just wanted to say that the idea was good, and it would be a shame if it was wasted.
    Again, the grammar and spelling - at least use Microsoft Office Word - it usually shows the misspelled words *btw not 'aloud', but 'allowed'.
    As for my writing - a very good answer - I don't do thing that I know I'm not good at. That's why if you want to complain you can go to my LJ *shevaleon.livejournal.com*, where you can say all you like about my drawings. Maybe smb at last would tell me what they REALLY think as I love criticism - it makes my works better. :p
    Huggles

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  • From ANON - Anya on August 25, 2006
    Ok, why exactly did you delete my review?
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  • From ANON - Anya on August 25, 2006
    This seems better, but not much.... Can you get a Beta? maybe this person will help you. And as I've already said write in Past tense. You keep skipping and it's bad for interpreting the lines.... AND when you have a compound sentence - break it. Make it simpler and easy to read, thus you won't miss all the commas.
    The plot... the 'spell' thing was too much. Write a warning somewhere that this is an AU story. And some ‘Heero thinking’ would be nice, too, - at least we would know his motivation. Some agony would be good for him, too.
    And lastly, try to work more on the feelings. Not just write in words what the charas feel, but show it with their actions.
    Update soon,
    Huggles
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  • From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on August 24, 2006
    This is a really good story. I love the master/slave relationship. I can't wait to read more. Please update soon and keep up the good work.
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