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Reviews for Tinkerbell

By : Brightside
  • From ANON - Dlady on November 05, 2006
    You're a Genius. I swear. Great story ^^
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  • From ANON - Aurelie on November 01, 2006
    *snickers* Ha! Tinkerbell! *snickers some more*
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  • From InuKagnSessy on September 19, 2006
    this story is awesome. i just love it. do you think u'll be continuing it by chance? its just perfect, perfect. would just love to read more. great job
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  • From ANON - pun_xy on September 16, 2006
    Bwahahahaha! Edo is Tinkerbell! God, I can't get any air!
    And then this:
    "Gulliable – maybe not as much as he hoped.
    Sweet – Pfft, yeah right.
    Young – He wasn’t pedophilic, and 14 was pushing the limit a bit.
    Girl – He didn’t need to answer that, really."
    This was awesome!


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  • From ANON - Kumiko on September 10, 2006
    i like this story. its cute! Tinkerbell... id never think to call Ed that. lol. write more!!
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  • From Earendel on September 09, 2006
    Did you just call Ed a fairy?
    Hou, I knew some one would eventually.
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  • From ANON - BrucesGirl on September 08, 2006
    I really should write a Scar/Roy fiction for you... So we can both pant and take cold showers. lol

    This was really really cute. I love your style of pauses and punctuation, and I think that this was a feel good, fluffy kind of fiction.

    A couple of pointers, love. I know when we RP that there isn't much formating to speak of, but in stories, it's very important. The human mand thinks in spaces, and if there is no spaces between paragraphs to signal a change of thought, it makes the story run in together way too muc.

    Also, description is a huge thing for me...of course you notice that in any of my stories. And in the way that I RP.

    Consider these sentences:

    Roy fucked Ed.

    Compare:
    Roy drove himself into Edward's quivering body while the boy dragged his fingers across the officer's muscled, lithe back, his own hips rolling up into each thrust.

    Description and clarity defines the regular authors from the REALLY good authors. And I know you have it in you to be one of the best in this section.

    Great oneshot! I loved it! ;) KakashixIruka forever!

    Ja ne, Bright-chan!

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  • From ANON - cm34 on September 08, 2006
    issues honey big time but good
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