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Reviews for The Sound of Silence

By : ZaKai

From rinfang on October 25, 2007
That was really, really amazing. Hard to make myself read all the way through, but amazing.
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From ANON - pokezejello on October 25, 2007
u did it. u finished the story and im proud of you. thanks for posting it, you definitly put somethin different out there.
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From radcat on October 25, 2007
Almost feels that this is not an end but a type of beginning. It was one interesting sad well written and plotted ride. Glad I got to take it with you but some days I had to make myself read the updates. I almost seemed to know what was coming. I think people who have never known abuse need at times to read or see what abuse can be to try to understand it. Unless you understand it it can be hard to have empathy. Sorry abuse touched your life. Hope you are alright. It has touched my life also. At least Riza now has an understanding and Ed has an important ally. Ed is so famous that I think most people will know that something really awful must have happened for Ed to have killed Roy. Roy did not always have the best reputation. There has to be other children (possibly now adults/teens) who were victimized by Roy. You did a good job on a story with a difficult subject. You kept it from being salacious (spelling?). That is why I think you are one of my favorite writers. Hopefully people in the FMA world will understand. Hope people out here have more of an understanding also. Well done.
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From eeriansadowthefallen on October 25, 2007
review chp 14

first, i want to both thank and praise you for being brave enough to write this story. abuse is a hard topic, especially when its close to home. my own abuse wasn't sexual, nor was it by a trusted "mentor" or authority figure in my life, but it was by someone i loved dearly and it damaged me more than anyone knew at the time. even our own roommate didn't see what my husband was doing to me until it was too late, or if he did, he never said anything about it. like you, though, i put it down on paper (or on digital, if you will) and i found some measure of release. i hope you did as well.

second, your handling of the whole story was masterful. the whole was appropriately descriptive without going overboard and you characterized so very well. even as dark, depressing and disheartening as this story was, it was still wonderful to read. (i think that was a bit of an oxymoron, though) this epilogue chapter also rounded out things very very well. riza's reactions were, i belive, perfect. this is one of the best pieces of writing that it has ever been my honor to read.

thank you so much for the experience.
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From saint2sinners on October 23, 2007
you are one of the most talented and amazing fanfictionwriters i have ever seen. This story was so honest and real. thank you for writing it. please let me know when you update Aagain. my address is saint2sinners@yahoo.co.uk

it's on the notes area of my profile as well.
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From ANON - Jaki on October 08, 2007
Oh...fucking WOW. Man, this story is ABSOLUTELY great...I mean, it's so angst and yet REAL. Great job.
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From sasquatchsnake on October 07, 2007
My god, that last chapter was really powerful. It's poignancy just hit me over the head. The emotions were intense and you portrayed Ed's confusion as well as the actual events crazy good. I am thoroughly impressed.
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From ANON - Ari on October 05, 2007
It was for Al. Of course it was for Al... of course it was.

The mind processes here are so rich in detail, so real, so gut-wrenching, heart-rending, and beautiful, and sad...

And on top of it all, you even captured Ed's psyche; he could never do for himself. For himself, he could bear anything. If it was someone he loved, he fought. He fought with everything he had. God damn it. You have truly created a masterpiece.

Bravo.
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From ANON - hikaru9 on October 03, 2007
See? I told you they would be satisfied by the ending! :D *read all the comments for this chapter so far*

I still think the saddest part about this whole chapter is the "Fathers don't do things like that" part of Roy and Ed's conversation. At that moment, they're both hurt little boys, and even though you hate Mustang, you can't help but feel for the man. And Ed, poor Ed who only wanted a parental figure he could trust is so destroyed by realizing that Mustang did care for him, and that Ed DID want Mustang to care for him.

Liike i've said before, i love that you wrote this story and posted it. Thank you for taking the risk.
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From Onyxlight on October 02, 2007
OMG that was so damn hard to read ... I think I stopped like 5 times.
Poor Ed poor Al I don't even know what to say to this. Your writing is wonderfull...superb even

BUt the story itself is just so heart-wrenching

Well done and I'm looking forward to the prologue *sniff**TEARS**sniff*
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From ctsama on October 01, 2007
I've been reading this story for a long time, and it took me this long to figure out what I wanted to say. Well, here goes:

Heartbreakingly, painfully, disturbingly accurate.

You paint a very vivid picture with this story. It truly encompasses the damaging (and repetitive) cycle of the prolonged sexual abuse of a child. Ed's struggle to deal with the intense guilt and pain of being a mental and physical rape victim while simultaneously trying to protect Al from himself and Mustang is, well... heartwrending. And your ability to get inside the heads of all the characters involved is amazing, and a little frightening, especially in Ed's case. You make his disjointed and often contradictory feelings and thoughts all too real and easy to understand.

I both love and hate this story at the same time, which is a major nod to your skill as a writer. Many kudos to you, and thank you for writing and posting this story.
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From ANON - Angst-Addict on October 01, 2007
I just mutilated the meaning of the first paragraph in my review with the misplacement of "Although it's hard to tell." That was supposed to be put in the last sentence of the paragraph implying that I wasn't 100% sure whether Roy was deliberately provocative or not. I apologise.
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From ANON - Angst-Addict on October 01, 2007
Hmm Well. That ending didn't let me down for sure. I haven't got much to say but I am curious about what RizaFromKeron said about Roy knowingly provoking Ed. Although it's difficult to tell, this incident concerned Al for the first time and Roy was treating it like any other incidence perhaps unaware of exactly how important Al and Al's happiness was to Ed. That may be why Roy could've indeliberately provoked him.

Also I love the detail you put into all the emotions and interactions. And part of me is sad for Roy, for how he was indirectly killed as a result of his father's abuse. You've been told this dozens of times but, this is a fantastic story and I, like many others will be waiting with ridiculously elevated levels of anticipation for the final chapter.

P.S. This makes me wonder, how does abuse happen? If its passed from person to person then who started it all and why? And would you possibly have plans for a Roy POV of any of this story's chapters?
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From TrulyWished on October 01, 2007
*sniff* Poor baby.
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From RizafromKeron on October 01, 2007
Oh, my God!
I feared this�ld happened, soon or later!!
Can I say a thing, even at the cost to result unpopular?
I really feel sorry for Roy.
Really.
Until the end, I think only �Poor Roy.�
And this is have to do for my love for the character only in part! XD.
I know that from Ed�s part he deserve all of this: the shot, the hits, the hate, everything.
But at the very end, Ed�s found the strength to fight him, in a way.
Roy doesn�t (or so I imagine, I don�t think he killed his father! XD But I hope his father died for a very, very painful disease, anyway). In a sick way Ed fight his demons, Roy makes slime them on: he feel regrets but he�s lost the capacity to fight it. And I think that is because he doesn�t have his negative example and Ed does. I�ll try to explain the best I can (bad English allowing! XD): When Ed wants to do something bad to Alphonse, he thinks to Roy. Thinks: �I don�t wanna be like him, I�m NOT like him�. And if he can to stop it�s only because Roy is alive, Roy�s still doing these things to him. The pain is still fresh. Not for Roy. Roy�s end to be a victim (not at a psychological level, of course, I�m talking of another thing, a more material level). So Roy can�t stops anymore. And I think that now that Roy�s death the risk to hurt Alphonse is very high. The �luck� is that he�s in jail and he can�t do such a thing. And maybe talk to Riza will help, but I sincerely don�t think. In a sick sort of way Ed really needed Roy.
And I�m sad because I�ve had the feeling for all the chapter that Roy�s make shoot himself. I mean, he clearly provoked Ed: a person so careful with word, so clever� He made Ed angry at the point of break. I�m sure of it. Maybe he wanted only weaken Ed, depriving him of intellectual faculties under a wave of anger. Or maybe� But I don�t know. I only know that I feel really sorry for Roy. More than for Ed. This is without doubt one of most wonderful fics I�ve ever read. You�ve built two characters so alive, so human, bad in a sick way, but you can�t really hate them. They�re two victims until the end. Compliments, really, a lot of them! I�ll wait for the last chapter with my heart in hand. A little bit sad, you know? Every Update was a wonderful surprise to me. I hope that with all your school engagement you�ll be able to continue another pair of fics that I personally adore: training Edward Elric and The Game. WONDERFUL WORKS, I admire and envy you a lot!!!!!! *_* Sorry for my grammar mistakes!

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