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Reviews for The Sound of Silence

By : ZaKai

From ANON - Leigh on July 07, 2007
=O ok i've just finished reading the story so far and its... wow... you are an amazing writer. i was kinda iffy about reading after i saw the child abuse warning but ahh my curiosity got the best of me... =P anyways i really love it, just like all your other stories! and i would appreciate an email when you update this one please =)
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From ANON - hey.hey.monkey on June 16, 2007
my...gosh..this story...very addicting in a really morbid sense. the reality of the situtation makes it so much worse. crying over a story isnt my forte, but..wow..this story sure has me at the very least tearing up every chapter. it is very well written and makes my chest constrict when i read it.
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From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on June 12, 2007
I swear this story makes me cry every frikkin' time I read a new chapter. Edward was so grateful to Riza and he WANTED to tell her everything, because his strength is deterring and he doesn't WANT to... feel the things he does... and the intensity of that was really voiced in his thanking Hawkeye. I'm glad she was there or who knows what Roy might've done to him. I was just thinking of 'Hell is For Children' by Pat Benatar... it's one of my favorite songs and relates totally to this story.

I really love the raw emotions being explained and the things Ed has to do broken down in detail. I really liked the after effects of his actions and feelings after he was through with the colonel. Yes, people in abusive situations feel as if they are the bad ones and the one abusing them are doing it for their own good since they are such bad children or people in general. Most deny any such thing as abuse happens to them at all. Edward seems to be blaming himself already-- thinking that he deserves this... yet he knows he doesn't. He feels so sick of himself and his life but he can't stop because of his love for Al and that emotion and thought just makes me cry.

Ed's embarrassment at arousing himself was very well explained. You are a wonderful person. Now I feel like Ed with Riza. Thank you for your... not silence!!

This is such a beautifully heart breaking story.

Anyways, I can't wait until you update again and sorry for taking so long in reading this chapter. I was really busy with exams. Thankfully, school's out now!!

lovelovelovelovelovelove,
stupefiedNarutard
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From ANON - Kuroneko on June 09, 2007
Your writing is fantastic, and I don't know how else to describe it (or how to write a reasonable review, as a matter of fact O_o).
But, I'm tired of cheking almost every day for updates, so please email me when you updade any of your stories here on AFF.net.

Thanks ^_^

kuroneko_sama@walla.com

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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on June 07, 2007
*cries* Bless you, Riza, bless you!! Oh! Ed wasn't the only one who near about fainted with relief when she stepped in and offered to take Ed home with her! :) When Ed was lying on the couch deciding if he would tell Riza about what's going on with him and he decided that if she asked and 'really' wanted to know then he'd tell her, I was reminded of chapter one when she went to see him in jail and only after she said, "Ed, I want to know. Ed...please...tell me why you killed Colonel Mustang.", did Ed finally begin telling his side of the story. Oh if only she had hugged him just a bit longer and maybe tried to get him to talk about his little rampage on the streets things might not end the way they are going to (i.e. murder). It would've helped him cope so much! He might have dropped a few clues about the abuse and then she'd be able to help him get out of it but, no, all that's just wishful thinking on my part. She didn't sit up with him and talk simply because she doesn't know any better. Honestly, I think she strongly suspects something bad going on between Roy and Ed but has no proof and she doesn't want to corner Ed and force him to talk. It broke my heart when Ed paused his mini-rioting to wonder if there was anyone who was willing to love him like a son properly and why he was so willing to take someone for a substitute parent, no matter what they did to him, even if they used and abused him like second-hand garbage. (I so paraphrased that sentence!) *sobs* The actual "encounter" (for lack of anything else tactful to call it) in Roy's apartment was very well written. You had to have some graphic details otherwise it wouldn't have made sense. I had wondered how Ed was going to make himself want Roy's attention. Now I know. Desperation is a powerful motivator. I think the most impressive part of the opening scene was how close it was to one from the anime. It started off just like the anime scene but was quickly skewed and twisted into a barely recognizable raunchy parody. wow! You got mad skills! :) Add me to all your update notice lists! jill_emory@hotmail.com
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - tati1 on June 07, 2007
So...based on the last chapter and this one, I'm going to make a guess as to why Ed killed Roy in front of witnesses /and/ his brother. You mentioned Al's 'little body'; my guess is that Roy either made an insinuation or looked at Al the way Ed remembered Roy looking at him, and Ed snapped in order to protect Al (since that is generally the way Al operates). Or it was just the snapping point for poor Edward, and he just couldn't handle seeing Mustang...perhaps they refused to let him leave the military and he couldn't stand the thought of being around for Roy to toy with anymore? If you don't mind, I don't care if I'm wrong or right, but could you please tell me what precipitated the murder? I'll still read the story (obviously; you don't pass up this kind of writing just 'cuz you know a bit of info), but since I otherwise won't find out for months (probably) I'd really like to know now please. Please?
--tati1
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From ANON - tati1 on June 07, 2007
Poor Ed! All that, and then to find out that neither he nor his brother can condone the sacrifice necessary for the creation of the Stone...
Gods bless Hawkeye. Is that why he's telling her all this? Because of what he owes her in this chapter?
Excellent chapter; it really is. Poor Edward...
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From ANON - TwinnyHeartilly on June 07, 2007
Your story is one of most beautiful I've ever read. It made me cry (chapter 7-8 and 9: Stream of suffering! XD)! Oh, my, what a shame, at the age of 23 crying for a fan fiction! But it is so. At the beginning I couldn't understand why Ed killed Mustang (note: i LOVE Roy Mustang, I hated Ed in the first chapter for killing him). Now I wanna kill him with my hand!!! Son of a B***H! I scream against him with all my friends, i was deatly angry. What the Hell, I AM angry! I dont' know if you can undestand my feelings: as I said i Love Roy Mustang, but in this story is so disgusting that makes me feel sick! >_< Compliments with all my heart, not very often a fic do this to me. And sorry for my very very bad english, it's noy my language.
I'm Italian.
I'll waiting desperatly for an update, I'm so much curious to see what's going to happen! *_* I'll check on adultff.net every day! XD
Twin
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From ANON - indonixgirl on June 06, 2007
jess, you updated. i liked it very much, thank god riza was smart enough to take ed to her place instead of letting him go to mustang. can't wait for next chapter. make it fast okay.
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From ANON - indonixgirl on June 05, 2007
that colonel sure is a bastard! hurting poor ed, i can't believe no one is noticing that ed's changed. update soon okay.
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From ANON - Chloe on May 29, 2007
I've been reading this for awhile and I just got the internet in the new apartment, so I thought I should review this time too. =)
This is a very well written story, and it just gets better with each chapter. You've taken a very careful approach to an issue many authors tend to gloss over or use in a completely different context. This is very well thought out, and Ed is clearly going through all the things as a real victim would, and the way you show how Mustang blames him and how easy it is for Ed to believe him. I just wanted to say I enjoy reading this story (and then looking for tissues afterward) and I can't wait for the next chapter.
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From MustangsHavoc on May 19, 2007
I hate Ed is jail! I ABSOLUTLY HATE IT! But the way you write makes me want to read on and read on I shall!
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From ANON - pokezejello on May 16, 2007
i actually had to walk around and think about whether i should read chapter seven or not for an hour. This story is extremely hard to read. Ive read oh so many books about child abuse and yet every time i pick up a new one its still hard to actually sit down and read it. You seem like such a mature patient person.....I love how you have written this so well! Take as long as you need to write this story out. It's defimatly worth waiting for the next chapter. I would not be able to stand being touched like that. I can't even stand it when anyone over 11 hugs me for more than 3 seconds. How are you able to write so....well about this? I know you get a lot of praise about your writing and I think a lot of kids out there might appreciate you taking this seriously and not just as something pleasurable and pornographic. Basically......you rule! =]
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From ANON - Lynn on May 14, 2007
This is probably one of the most well written pieces of literature on this site.
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From ANON - Macvanaly on May 12, 2007
18? oops, I must of forgotten. And yes! I KNEW Roy was molested...gosh this chapter made me cry so BAD. First because of how nice Roy was acting and then that one part where he just turned everything around and said 'This is all your fault, you know that, right?' AH! from then on I was possitively sobbing. So sad and REAL. Do I have to mention again how much I love this story? And Roy is insane, I think, but that can happen after brutal abuse. One moment he's almost apologizing (he did this another time too, after his mom died) and then he's like 'If you weren't so reckless I wouldn't have raped you'. Wtf? Sigh, aw well. Evile Roy is hard to get used to, but you do it SO well. I wish someone would find out, because very rarely do abuse victims (especially sexual) ever TELL people about it.

Can't wait for your nect update. I saw this one and it made my day!

Love ya -Aly
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