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Reviews for The Sound of Silence

By : ZaKai

From ANON - Outcast Martyr on May 12, 2007
I was a bit too upset when I finished reading ch.7 to review, but this time I'd just like to say that I like your other story-in-progress more.... I was so completely hoping, like Ed was, that when Mustang finally did that, it wouldn't be anything like THAT. I was somewhere between crying and raging when I finished that chapter...
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on May 11, 2007
I don't think you could have chosen a better way to write this. By writing this strictly from the sensorial perspective, you highlight just how traumatized Ed really is. I was softly crying thru most of this. Ed was just so pitiful when he was begging (in his head at least) Roy to not hurt him. *feels tears welling in eyes again* I was really feeling Ed's panic when Roy conned Al into leaving him alone with Ed! I was trembling and holding my breath in fear of what Roy might do! *tears fall* The bathing scene made me nervous as hell what with Ed being naked and pretty much unable to defend himself. I did smile briefly when Ed refused to take off his clothes in front of Roy making the bastard do it for him. *weak smile* Ed's fiery personality hasn't been completely destroyed! :) I did panic briefly and get slightly nauseous when Roy opened the tube of ointment. (Oh no! Not again! *cries*) I so wanted to beat Roy black and blue for daring to make all this Ed's fault!! "We�re close; we understand each other..." Yeah right. Who are you trying to convince here Roy boy? Ed (i.e. me) or yourself? Your timid hesitant sweet-talk just screams of your guilt. The vicious cycle of what-was-done-to-me-I-now-do-to-you continues.

I gotta hand it to ya - you're an absolutely amazing author! Anybody who can write a story like this that draws so many emotions out of me at once is top notch in my book! Btw, thanks for those hugs from last review when I was empathizing with Ed a bit too much. Your story has made me understand some things about my own situation that I never really took notice of. As you said, "No matter what the degree of the abuse, it�s still abuse, and it�s still destructive." I guess I always knew that but just never acknowledged it. (Denial anyone? *smiles*)

I am becoming more and more curious about the circumstances of the final confrontation between Roy and Ed. I remember from chapter one that Riza told Ed how traumatized Al was and I'm wondering if the reason why Ed finally kills Roy, aside from the obvious one, is because Roy attacked and molested Al. Ed "accepts" all this crap as atonement for his sins but there is no way in all of creation he would stand by and let anything happen to Al. I thought at first that Al was so upset because he'd witnessed Ed killing Roy but now I'm not so sure. Maybe it's both. Maybe I don't know what the hell I'm talking about! :) It's probably the latter. ;) Well, I'm off to find something to settle these nervous knots this chapter put in my stomach. *sigh* I'm such an emotional basket case sometimes!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From crazychemgeek on May 11, 2007
Your writing as always was fantastic. This chapter blew my mind away. I ended up crying at the end of it.
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From ANON - Shiruy on May 11, 2007
I feel sick. And I'm horrified. And just... *shudders*
This is a very intense story and to be honest, I'm not sure if I want to read on.
It's bound to get worse.

I like your writing style or, I don't know... This story depresses me so much, I can't really
say I like it, but it sure as hell draws me in and keeps my attention. The situations are so
frighteningly real, it really unsettles me.

I'm not sure how to say what I think right now. It's really rare that I review a story,
maybe once in two months, but this one definitively deserves it. So I guess it's very, very
good... (and very, very unsettling)
One can understand Ed's feelings very well, his reasoning, his fears, and in a kind of sick, twisted
way I can even almost understand Mustang.

I realize what I just wrote may not sound too encouraging all in all, so I'll say it like this:
You're a very talented writer and what you're writing here touches people.

Greetings,
Shiruy

(And now I'll search for something happy to read. I need it. Badly.)
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From ANON - CapriaStar on May 11, 2007
This story is unbelievable, in a good way. If anyone has gone through anything even remotely similar this is cathartic. Very well written with nuances that make it seem real like you're living it instead of reading it. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - TwilightHunter on May 11, 2007
I'll have to admit, most chapters I've only skimmed. Not because I dislike your writing, but frankly, the topic and pairing bother me. Not that Roy/Ed bother me, but that's the problem. I -love- the couple, and while I enjoy angst...not this kind. Yet, somehow, I keep getting drawn back to the fic whenever you update; sometimes I read the chapters, sometimes I just skim, depending on how...far it goes, if you get what I mean. That being said, I feel for -both- Roy and Ed. Roy's timid attutide in the beginning...both really are victoms. No, what Roy is doing isn't right or fair, but I think you get a hint in this chapter (maybe others, considering my skimming when I get uncomfortable) that Roy really has suffared. That he really does hate himself for what he's doing, yet this is -all- he knows, all he can -do-. People tend to focus and go 'Oh, poor Ed' etc, and mostly, in the chapter, I kept wanting to hug -Roy-. Because while he's doing these horrible things to Ed, I think he's hurting emotionally and mentally from it. He just can't stop, because he doesn't know -how- to, nor does he know anything but that. Both characters are suffaring, yet it's almost more unfair to Roy because he'll never get to heal. Ed may have that chance, considering he kills Roy, and that he has a supportive family. It's a cruel cycle, and it hurts everyone, not just the one on the recieving end.
Yes, I'm done now. ^^;; I love your writing style, and while I'm not all that comfortable with this story, I'll probably continue to skim it. I hope you're not insulted that I haven't read all the details and such, it's just not my cup of tea when it's between a pairing I love to death. But keep up the good work. I'm off to read one of your more happier stories. :)
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From ANON - Hikaru_9 on May 10, 2007
Wow, i almost cried on this one. Ed's fear and Roy's "hoh shit" guilt, fear, and ulitimate manipulation almost did me in. It's just hitting the right w33py button on me. (yes, the actual rape i can take, but the aftermath does me in.. i'm so weird like that) Very nicely done. *hugs*
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From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on May 10, 2007
Oh Jesus Christ.

I just wanna scream at him so badly and I think I scared my mother by cussing my computer out. That sick sunvabitch is doing like all those bastards do. Calmly making you feel so much more horrible than you already do. Threatening you with soft, twisted words and then sending you on your way until they hurt you again. Being nice and comfortable around you, but when you get better--

FUCK THEM!!

...*ahem* Sorry. Geez, Zakai, you really are so freakin' talented. I can't believe how good you are at this! You haven't had something happen to you too, have you? How perfect the way it is freaks me out. Of course, if Ed was older, instead of the young age he is now... I think it would've turned out differently. But because he is so defenseless and easy to manipulate, I would expect this kind of reaction. If he was older, I think he would either defy Roy and run with Alphonse... or he would even use Roy for some kind of pleasure and assurance during his search for the truth and a way to get his brother's body back.
It's great to see how you switch the chapters to make it like we are in his thinking zone. In the last chapter, I felt the frantic, scalding terror he was going through and in this chapter, I sense the fear and pain, confusion he is going through. It freaked me out so bad, because you can never predict how a rapist will act. Poor Edward had to endure his touches again, with those soothing words, with an underlying message sitting behind it. His panic when Al was leaving and his anger at Roy, that with which he can do nothing with.
Maybe I'm getting too into this, but I love it a lot and I still support it 100 percent. It's a wonderful, true-to-life (besides alchemy) story that happens everyday and I always can't wait until the update to see when Ed finally snaps and kicks some ass. I can see Ed in his mindless state, killing Mustang brutally and if that's a bad thing, so what. He deserves it, that- that... BASTARD COLONEL. (although, otherwise he is one of my favorite characters)

Loveyou,loveyou!

lovelovelovelove,
stupefiedNarutard
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From squallstorm on May 10, 2007
that coniving bastard...Mustang that is...pulling Ed around for a merry mind fucking XP

great chapter btw XD

kiki
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From Onyxlight on May 01, 2007
**sniff sniff** Poor Ed.

Well done

Sad... but well done
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From ANON - Tetsuo Shima on April 28, 2007
OMFG!!! This was the best FMA fic I have read thus far! I'm going to fallow your story untill the end!!
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From ANON - krizcrayon on April 27, 2007
gah, so depressing...
I am impressed with the way this chapter flows naturally, unlike versions of such events I've seen in other stories. please update soon!
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From ANON - pheonixofthenight on April 22, 2007
I almost cried as I read this chapter, this is one of the few times I curse my overactive imagination. I could see the whole thing happening. Poor Poor Ed DAMN YOU COLONAL BASTERD!!!!!
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on April 20, 2007
There are so many thoughts and feelings running thru my head right now it's kinda hard to know what to say first. I read this chapter yesterday and was so distraught when I finished that I couldn't write a review to save my life. I don't know if I should be impressed or distressed that you can write so well about so horrific a subject. The rape scene was written so well that it made me sick to my stomach. I mean that as a compliment even tho it sounds awful. sorry. You managed to evoke a very strong gut reaction with your eloquent words. Ed's pain and horror, Roy's rage and brutality, the sheer hopelessness of the situation all came thru loud and clear. Ed considering killing Roy at the end of the chapter was especially moving. "Ed didn�t think he�d actually be able to kill someone...even someone like Roy Mustang." And then my tears fell in earnest. so much pain. so dark and foreboding. such emotional turmoil. It just breaks your heart.

One of the things that pains me the most is Roy's character. Roy is my favorite character in the series (after Ed of course!) and it truly hurts my heart to see him behaving this way. Sadly, I have firsthand knowledge of how terribly painful it is to be subjected to an alcoholic abusive authority figure (i.e. parent) so, in a small way, I can relate to Ed. Don't worry tho. I never endured anything even close to what Ed is going thru so no need to call the cops! :) Oh look. I'm making jokes. There's an obvious defense mechanism! Why I told you that I have no idea. I just mean that I can feel Ed's pain on a rather personal level so, yeah, this chapter was really distressful. Seeing Roy acting like some pod person, some twisted evil twin of the Roy I know and love, is particulary appalling. I already know I'm gonna be reduced to mass of emotional goo when Roy meets his end. I can feel my chest tightening just thinking about it! Granted this Roy is not my Roy but it's still gonna hurt like hell when he dies. *eyes well with tears - again! :)* Even tho he deserves to die for what he's done, there's a tiny part of me that can't bear to see it happen. gah. I'm such a mess right now. I need to go cuddle my Roy plushie dolls and try to get my head in a better place! :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. I'm so glad you already knew about the Hermaphrodite doujinshi series! I was somewhat hesitant to mention them because I was afraid that you'd think I was implying that you were plagiarizing them. Whew! That's one less thing to worry about! :) Those doujinshi were the first thing that came to mind once I really got into your story so I felt had to mention them consequences be damned! :D
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From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on April 20, 2007
I am trembling right now, it's unbelievable. You really captured that... really, really captured what it was like... To think Edward hasn't cracked by now at such a fragile age is beyond me... of course it makes sense because Ed is a strong boy with a purpose in life that he will not give up.

*I feel so bad! I actually heard Vic Mignogna's voice in my mind when Ed was being tortured.*

Anyways, I think the scenario is very befitting and that you really captured the essence of the situation, I was even getting naseuous over reading it. I could feel what Ed was feeling and it was terrible and I'm still trembling, which is crazy.

I really admire you so much for doing this. RoyEd is personally one of my favorites and to use such a popular pairing as a way to get an opinion out... it's very noble of you and I keep saying that because it is. I really, really appreciate it.

Anyways, happy... hold on, let me remember what all today is...

Happy Hitler's Birthday! Happy Weed Day! Happy Hokie Hope day! Happy Anniversary of Columbine! (did I miss something) It's like today was cursed or something... when I say happy, I'm being sarcastic... ^_^' Reading this right now really reminds me of the things going on around in the world and around myself.

Well, your description is perfect and I can definitely put myself in Ed's position... I can even put myself in CrazyBastard!Roy's. Very intriguing indeed. Anyways, your addicting stories never fail me... I think you are my favorite FMA yaoi fanfiction writer. Yep. *worships*

lovelovelovelove,
stupefiedNarutard

p.s. ONWARD ON YOUR NOBLE CAUSE, I'M BEHIND YOU ALL THE WAY!!!

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