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By : Robyn
  • From ANON - Pixelgoddess on May 18, 2007
    Goku is such a wanna be submissive. Now that Vegeta has realized how enticing that is, I hope they continue to take advantage of it. His submission is so voluntary, while Vegeta's needs to be forced from him.
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  • From ANON - Vegetachik7 on May 18, 2007
    :O Oooo....Ahh...Why wasn't I aware that you updated?!?! God, this chapter...was so good. Amazing. Freakin hot and...wow. I think you know you did an awesome job. So yes. Great stuff.
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  • From ultistarmon on May 18, 2007
    Holy shit, that was HOT! I love this story more and more with each chapter. I'm still waiting for the whole Bulma found out thing to hit the fan. Great work and keep those updates coming.
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  • From ANON - Irol on May 18, 2007
    well maybe vegeta is finally getting things straight in his own head now and kakarot can finally show him some better things.
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  • From Dragon7 on May 18, 2007
    Grate chapter!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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  • From MasterofPie on April 29, 2007
    an interesting story - usually i stay away from 'rape' stories and such. But i must say i am enjoying your story. It is very well written, and a great plot or whatever you call it. I just love how it has involved, and how you show the different views on what has happened between Goku and Vegeta (view on their 'affair'). Can't wait for the next chapter !!
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  • From Katiefoolery on April 20, 2007
    You did such a good job of bringing those concepts and metaphors from chapter six and melding them into Vegeta's dream. It just worked so well and re-inforces the fact that everything in this story is linked. I really enjoyed chapter six and I was just waiting to see if you were going to expand on it... and you did - in such a satisfying way for this reader, too. :)

    I like the way things are so far from settled at the moment but there's a chance that Goku and Vegeta can understand each other a bit better if they just stop misinterpreting every action and reaction.

    I loved the scene where Goku wakes up and leaves to keep himself from giving into his reaction to Vegeta... and oh, he'll just have to unwind this tail from his leg before he leaves. It seems like such a small detail but I liked the apparent significance of it.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 18, 2007
    Awww...great chapter! I just LOVED the way you had Vegeta so out of it and defenseless and weak...and Goku had to carry him around all carefully and gently. I LOVE IT! That scene with the rigor mortis was terrifying. I can't even imagine the disgust and horror I'd feel if I couldn't feel my limbs from being dead for a while. I liked how you had Vegeta is a sort of state of shock. Very nice. The dream Vegeta had is quite interesting. It seems his own mind is trying to figure out his life for him. Poor confused guy. I just love all the details you put in that make him so in depth and descriptive. There are so many fanfictions out there that just do not cover Vegeta's real serious mental issues like this one does. So complex....very amazing.

    Vegeta's jealousy is another point of interest. It seems that Vegeta cares for Goku even more than he realizes. I almost feel bad for the twins as they have to watch the interaction between the saiyajins. I also very much enjoyed the interaction between Vegeta and Trung. They are both jealous of each other, yet have to live in the environment before Goku's eyes! I loved the dialogue between Vegeta and Goku as the confusion still hovered there. I think your descriptions and details on Goku's frustration and confusion toward Vegeta was excellent. But how can Vegeta explain himself when he doesn't even understand himself?! God...great points here. Have I told you lately that I just love your work? :) Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - darkserapha on April 18, 2007
    I loved this chapter! After all the angst the change of pace was wonerful, and that Vegeta is finally discovering his other, more dominant side is such a relief. The tension between the prince and the twins was just delectable. Can't wait for the next update!
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  • From xerosky on April 17, 2007
    “Hn…it’s not from hypothermia, Kakarott. It’s from rigor mortis.”


    Much love for this line!

    As much as I want to smack Vegeta upside the head, I'm glad that you have them misunderstanding each other even now, after showing so much of their private selves to each other. I liked his dream and the way his thoughts are changing -- it's painfully slow, but constant, as if all his certainties are crumbling.

    Also, Vegeta being made to suck his own tail in order to shut him up was evil. And awesome.

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  • From ANON - Trista ML on April 17, 2007
    I have to admit i love this story ALOT. Abundantly, really. I'm impressed with this chapter more so than any other chapter that you've written so far, and i commend you for the time taken to write it. You have done a fantastic job, and i hope you take that as though it was the first time you ever heard it.

    I'll admit that I was not a fan of the other characters and the Smithy realm they live in, and that was probably because of the vagueness of it all, but i like where you have taken it and the way you took it there. I love this story, i love the indepth and dark explanation of actions, thoughts, and feelings, which is part of what you're known for. I also love the fact that the get together involves others, especially others that aren't a part of the normal DBZ scene. I believe it was chayron that mentioned people shy away from threesomes, but here, haha, you've even got a foursome.

    I would pinpoint sentances and paragrahs, but I find it almost unnecessary, the review would be too long and boring for me to say "fantastic!" or any other happy plea of wanting more, so instead let me say once more i cannot wait to read the next chapter and i hope I am just as pleased with that one as i am with this one.

    You rock, have a fabulous Day,

    Trista Michelle

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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on April 17, 2007

    Chatper 15


    Awesome chapter! We got to see a bit more into the characters and why they are the way they are. Great job!


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  • From VeggieSlave on April 03, 2007
    That chapter was intense. Kudos for intricate details, I loved how Goku was actually able to bring Vegeta back to life. Very original.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 02, 2007
    Awesome chapter as usual. So....wow. Goku definitely broke the rules there. I wonder how much trouble he'll be in and what the kais and other worldly beings are going to say. I see that Goku and Vegeta's little secret may not be so secret soon. The fact that Goku ripped Vegeta from death will not go unnoticed. And wow...I absolutely love your details in everything you do. You don't leave the reader guessing on how things work and what's happening, you're so in depth and detailed. I loved it. Goku bringing Vegeta back was intense and perfect! I also loved Vegeta's line "never do this again." I'm guessing he means bringing him back from death. Oh my! Poor confused saiyajins. Love it! I'm excited to see what Bulma may happen upon and what she'll say. Poor woman, too. Jeeze. Again...loved it lots. Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - Irol on April 02, 2007
    wow, this was intense. i can't believe goku seriously killed vegeta. but at least he brought him back. pretty ingenious way, if i do say so. great work1
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