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Reviews for Flame and Fullmetal 300 km/h

By : Niia

From Yaoigirl69 on March 15, 2007
I'm really enjoying this story. I find myself checking for updates everyday. Thanks for your dilligence in writing it. It's original and has a good plot. It doesn't need more smex but I'm greedy that way so "more smex please". XD But's really good and I will enjoy it even if you don't add more smex.
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From KansouAme on March 15, 2007
mmmmm yummy as usual! Except another damn cliffhanger! Thank the powers that be that I adore you and this story so much that I won't send little chibi Roy and Ed to hound you to post another chapter soon. Ok.. I might *evil grin*

Oh and I completly agree with your "The Dick" theory. They think with it, play with it, love with it and shake it in your general direction when they get out of the shower while making that "woo hoo" call. *smirk*
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From ANON - Pauline on March 14, 2007
I am so sorry that I didn't review your last chapter! I had some dumb school trip. And living without things that are at least a little civil was hard...(=.=' nvm that any way...)

And what I have to say about your story?

You know how to make a story which is even more interesting with every new chapter. Your writing is really great!
I couldn't set my eyes from this even if I wanted to.

I hope you will update soon, because I can't wait to see what would happen next!

^_^
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on March 12, 2007
Oh man! I thought I was gonna have a heart attack when Jenny found Ed in the secret room!! As pissed off as that bitch is at him, I'm surprised she didn't shoot first and ask questions later! :D Good thing for him he's got enough sass to fast talk his way out of that one!

I'm a bit confused about Roy's involvement with the Ouroboros. Is he a member of the organization now somehow or are they just using him to get information to find out who's hijacking trucks? I never imagined that Roy would do undercover stuff and spy on fellow racers. Is Jenny the one responsible for the hijackings? Tucker's an idiot not to realize she's using him. I guess as long as the money's green he doesn't care. She's the one putting stuff in Roy's garage to make him look guilty if she gets caught right? If she's hiding stuff in the secret room and Archer's got forged documents that implicate Roy, things do not look good for poor Roy! I don't even wanna think about what Dante or Lust will do to persuade Ed to join them! @_@

Wrath is just the funniest little guy ever! I love this kid! When he walked in on Roy and Ed kissing in the kitchen and said, "Right. Like I don�t know what you guys were just doing. I'm young, not dumb.", I thought I'd laugh my ass off! Hard to believe he's only 7 years old. :) You're killing me with these almost moments between Roy and Ed! Two in one chapter! Ugh! Teasing is so not nice! :P I'm thinking that Ed is falling in love with Roy. He was getting all fluttery when they were sitting on the couch watching TV. kawaii!! If not for Wrath being there, Roy might have gotten a chance to finish what he started in the garage! w00t! :D More Roy/Ed soon please!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - Silver4HENTAI on March 12, 2007
Alien: Phewee...the suspense is killing. I mean the part with Roy and Ed wow... more secrets and I love Wraths wording..I have been seeing you guys make with the moony eyes at each other all night," he continued. �And now you two are making suck-faces. Disgusting! Get a room, at a hotel please!� "First Mina is making moves on me, and then Scar �gets lucky� with a waitress, and now Ed is �riding steady�? What�s this world coming to? All I need now is for Al to find a girl. Then I�ll totally give up!"
Beautiful. ^^. oh well, I promised Roy a day out cause of ed.
Envy: WhooT!! I own a drug empire!!! LET THE COKE AND ESTACY FL- *I hit him over his head*
Alien:Ignore him i gave him too much sugar. Love the updates (as usual) and I cant wait for more. >_<

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From ANON - mina on March 11, 2007
I'm Back!! Apologise for my absent review concerning the previous chapter, but i didnt finish reading it until awhile ago. After reading the first part of 27 it was like floating on a fluffy little cloud, roy and ed were so cute, then i scrolled down and realised there was no more of them in the chapter :O so i just decided to wait until the next chapter came out before i read the second half. It had such a small amount of roy/ed i would hav been too busy being angry at that to enjoy reading about the furthering of the ACTUAL plot as such :)

My commendations on chapter 28, i didnt notice any wayward grammer mistakes or anything, yeah you! Roy and ed continue to have me *squeeee*ing with happiness. glad there was more of them this chapter :) Dont get me wrong, i def also like the whole suspense: 'who's the real villian? who's framing who and when is everyone's secrets gonna come out?' thing, is just when it took more than 3 quarters of the chapter away from roy/ed it make mina sad :( lol

Hmmm, what else? Oh! the whole domestic scene towards the end with the little impish Wrath was too sweet. And Ed with the feeeeeeling he'd never felt before *faints dead away* It was all too lovely :D

Sad to heard its approaching the end *sheds a tear* but very excited to see what will come before that sad day :) :) :) KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!
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From TrulyWished on March 11, 2007
Moving right along nicely. I think you update very regularly, and quickly. I'm always glad to see a enw chapter.
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From KansouAme on March 11, 2007
Some people just shouldn't be allowed to cook. :)

And yet another wonderful plot twisting chapter... yeah!!! Can't wait to see what happens next. Corruption and deceit all around and our heros are stuck in the middle. I am at the edge of my seat here!!
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on March 09, 2007
Did I like Tokyo Drift? Uh, hell yeah!! w00t! It rocked! WOW!! It was so cool the way those guys made those cars move like that. It was almost like the cars could dance the way they move in sync like that! I'd love to see drifting in real life! ;)

I was really surprised that Ed and Roy didn't spend the rest of the night together. I mean, seriously, they'd been wanting each other for so long that one would think they wouldn't want to be separated from one another so soon after finally hooking up. But, whatever. Guess they wanted to work thru this gradually and make it last! :) Hey, I just realized something. Roy dropped Ed off at 2 am and Scar called Ed at 4:30 am. Ed was still awake and perky two and half hours after leaving Roy. *grins* And Ed was complaining that he wouldn't get any sleep if he'd stayed at Roy's place! ;) Silly man! That was two and half hours that could have been spent "enjoying Roy's company" (i.e. getting his freak on!)!! LOL!!

Ah! the cops vs the mafia! nice! By the way, from the way you describe it, I believe that Hakuro's title/rank is Commissioner. Roughly speaking, police rankings from lowest to highest are as follows: Officer, Detective, Sergeant, Lieutenant, Captain, Deputy Inspector, Inspector, Deputy Chief, Assistant Chief, Chief, Deputy Commissioner, Commissioner. Not every police department will have all these ranks because of the wide variety and needs of state and local police forces. It's a really complicated subject and I could be totally wrong since Amestris is a military based nation. But, Commissioner sounds good for Hakuro! :)

Snake-Circle. It seems odd that the police wouldn't know that the Ouroboros were called "Ouroboros". With Scar's FBI connections, they should at least know that. They might only know about the front companies the Ouroboros own (What good syndicate doesn't have several fronts thru which to launder their dirty money? :D) and nothing about their illegal activities but they should know their name. I guess all the local snitches are too scared of them to say anything. I'm kinda mad at Scar for wanting to use Ed like this. There's gonna be so much hell to pay when he realizes/remembers that Ed and Envy are half brothers. Whoa. I didn't know that Roy had almost beat a man to death! crucial!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. Glad you like my notes! I try to help if I can. I'm surprised that you've never taken an English class before. Not counting the random typos and odd word here and there, you write really well! Sorry about your bad week and sad to see that "the story is speeding toward its end and there is just one road left." Ah, all good things must come to an end. :(
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From ANON - Silver4HENTAI on March 09, 2007
Alien: *dun dun dun* and the plot thickens. I love the chapter hate the ending but I gues thats the best you an do. Oh well, updates on my situation. The nosebleed thing, well I and a very still disgruntled Roy would be hurt if you stopped lemons. (Eds still angry with him) Well, Envy got hit when he was teasing Roy obout his situation with Ed and well...
I said Ed is PmSing still and Envy chimed in saying that he was probably preganant. OMFG you should have seen Roy's face. Well before hes fainted. Envy's poking him with a stick to see if he alive or died of a heart attack.

Envy: Hey, CHECK THIS! If I poke him in his stomach his hands come up and if I hit this...*thwacks Roy's knee and the man howls before going back unconscious*

*Ed shouts angrily from other room*
Ed: STOP THAT RACKET!!!!!

Envy:...*smirks* That happens

Alien:Okayyyyyy...WELL UPDATE PLEASE I WAITING!!
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From milky on March 09, 2007
Oooh, I like the plot...Scar trying to protect his girlfriend and still do his job at the same time adds a lot of awesome tension :) And Hakuro is such a dick!
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From KansouAme on March 08, 2007
Another great chapter. I like how you used the dialogue between the officers to further and fill in the plot. While I love lemony goodness like everyone else, it is so much more fulfilling to read it within a story. Your story has good rhythm, tone and characterization. However, it is stuttered throughout with typos and spelling/grammar errors. Things easy to fix. Do you have a beta? Let me know if I can help. I am still an avid fan of this story and can't wait to see Jenny get what's coming to her! Please keep up the good work! You ROCK!
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From nomdeplume on March 08, 2007
Sorry I've been so negligent in reviewing this. It's really good, and I'm not a big the fast and the furious fan. I like that you're keeping the characters in familiar roles throughout this story, but giving them your own take using this storyline. Also, the most recent lemon in the car, very hot. (Reading over your stories, I still can't believe you're not a native English speaker. I've read so many stories written by people who grew up with the language that don't have the grasp on it you do). Keep going with this.
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From TrulyWished on March 08, 2007
It's kinda neat the way the dots are connecting in Scar's mind. I'm glad that you update so frequently.
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From ANON - michelle on March 08, 2007
i can't wait for jenny's punshiment. i'm just surprised winry hasn't dragged roy out by the ear and force him to buy a wedding ring for ed XD i can see her doing that
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