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Reviews for Flame and Fullmetal 300 km/h

By : Niia

From ANON - michelle on March 05, 2007
now, if roy would tell ed that he loves him. finslly, jenny knows that ed means more to roy then she does XD are you going to pare al with anyone?
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From Lore on March 05, 2007
I love this story! The characters are really convincing and the storyline is good. I want to know what happened between Roy and Speed!
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From ANON - Silver4HENTAI on March 05, 2007
Alien: well, just as I got better you had to go and give me a nose bleed huh? Well, envy is laughing at me and ROy is moping cuz he just red that lovely update but his Ed is still pissed at him.
Though it has its perks, he bought me more icescream. Envy stole my tissue so I am having serious fangirl nosebleed control problems. The chapter was soooo cute and what better way to cut tension than with some nice car sex? (I cant say the same for Roy who is looking at my bedroom door longingly.
Ed barricaded himself in there and I think Eddie is just sleeping but some how Roy convinced himself that he's cheating on him with some muscular blond hottie with a bigger penis than his - and you can blame Envy for that one)Gave me a nice image of it when he transformed *cough* right after he stole all my paper napkins. Oh well I gonna call nosebleed control and huggle Kura a bit.
Remember I want what?
Envy: UPDATES-psst specifically more boy love so I can amuse my self by watching he trying to control the blood flow.
Alien:*pushes him from infront com* Whatever just update...PLEASE!!!!WITH A CHOCOLATE COVERED ROY MUSTANG ON TOP!!!!! OH CRAP MORE BLOOD ENVY QUICK,CALL 911 Envy: No way, this is too much fun.
Alien: GAH!!!!! IM DYING FROM NOSEBLEED INDUCED LOSS OF BLOOD THIS IS NOT HOW ITS SUPPOSED TO END!!!!
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From KansouAme on March 04, 2007
FINALLY!! OK it's not a locked room but hey the backseat of a car is so way more appropriate for our boys! I know.. I should have more to say but.. I just love your story. Keep it up cause I am waiting to see Jenny get hers! *evil grin*
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From ANON - Pauline on March 04, 2007
It's good that they finally are together! Great chapter and I hope you will update it soon.
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From ANON - Dae on March 04, 2007
YAY! Thank you for the latest chapter! argh.. too hawt! *drool*
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From milky on March 04, 2007
Mmm, very hot indeed! Though I do hope they eventually work out all of what is upsetting them.
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on March 04, 2007
Now THAT was one hell of a road trip! :) love it! :D I was scared that while they were driving that Roy would say or do something stupid and completely ruin his chances of getting back with Ed. whew! SO glad they've managed to start finding their way back to one another!! :) I just hope it lasts and they're strong enough for all the hell (the Ouroboros, Roy's past, that bastard Speed and that bitch Jenny - grr!) that I'm sure is waiting just around the corner for them.

There are three little boo-boo's that I found that I want to tell you about. #1 - The difference between lime and lemon. Lime means heavy petting, masturbating, and/or going down on someone. Lemon is the full-on act of having hard-core sex - full blown (no pun intended! :D) penetration and cumming usually after doing some or all the lime stuff. This is the second time Roy and Ed have done it and both times you called it a lime when it was really a lemon. Don't think I minded one bit that this was a lemon and not a lime 'cause I love me some Roy/Ed action! w00t! :D #2 - This is just a minor thing but several times you've used the word "pried" when you meant to say "pride". It's not something that spellcheck will catch either since both are legitimate words. just a typo thing. #3 - Roy's blouse. Men do not wear blouses. They wear shirts - dress shirts for when wearing a tuxedo, tee shirts for casual, button-up shirts for a more snazzy look (though depending one the print, style, and color of the shirt, the image one projects changes considerably.), and polo and pull-over type shirts (sweaters) for dressy casual but they don't wear blouses. Blouses are for women. I imagine that Roy was wearing a nicely pressed button-up shirt since that seems about as dressed up as he would ever get. :) Even though he'd be sexy as hell in a dress shirt, cuff links and all, he probably doesn't even own one! :D

OK, enough of me yammering on. :) I'm gonna go watch "The Fast and the Furious: Tokyo Drift" now. Did I ever mention that because of this story I've gotten inspired to actually sit down and watch at least one "The Fast and the Furious" movie? It's true. It's all your fault! LOL!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - mina on March 03, 2007
Not the quality we're used to???? was that sup to throw me off? Because it did! This is quite posssibly my fav chapter so far. *squeals* Let me tell u just how much i loved this chapter: i was supposed to go out with my friends but i had some work to finish up first and because i was reading this while i was doing my work including stopping to reread parts and squeal in excitment that by the time i finished my friends were ready to go home lol

But i dont mind. YEEEAAAHHH!!!! You've made me so happy. *hugs you* And ur so sneaky! you didnt tell us we were getting a lemon in this one. i was so surprised! Ed rolling down the hill and the 'i missed u' stuff at the end... *sparkles* *floates away happily*
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From ANON - Pip on March 03, 2007
YAY!!! *jumps up and does a little dance* They made up, heehee. (^^,) Wait, let me get over it...*giggles gleefully for several minutes*

Great chapter, I can get down to work again, haha. (^^,) And in case you're wondering, deprivation did get me to work--I finished all the work in a day so that nothing would get in my way when the update came, so...(^^,)

'Til next time! (~.^) Ooh, I just want to see Jenny get what's coming to her...that would really make my day...(^^,)
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From ANON - Blissful Ignorance on March 03, 2007
Yay! Roy isn't such a loser after all! Woohoo for them! XD -throws fist in the air- Wonderful chappie. Poor Ed, same thing happened to me today. I can relate, man.
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From ANON - Silver4HENTAI on March 01, 2007
Oh..damn my fricken com got sick, im sick..but i had toi read your updates..I LOVE THEM KEEP UP THE WORK I WANN READ MORE!!!!!!!=^.^= Please? Eddie says please too.
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From milky on March 01, 2007
Hooray! I like that they figured this stupid plot out. But that still has to really burn at Ed, that Roy would say he was special and then be with someone because she was "there". He has every right to be upset...
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on February 28, 2007
*blushes* I'm so pleased that you like my reviews! I can get a bit wordy sometimes and always fret that I'm saying too much when writing a review that is longer than what most people write. I just don't like short reviews. How are you supposed to get your point across and offer encouragement if all you write is, "Love this. Please write more."? I always have opinions and I love to share them with anyone who'll listen! :)

Now, on to the review!! Oh! I was SO glad that Ed left with Roy!! YAY!! *happy dances* Surrender to that dark temptation, Ed! It'll be good for ya! ;) I could just hug Gracia for "accidentally" spilling that drink on Jenny! LOL! While I'd have loved to have had Jenny get scalded with hot soup or have her hair set on fire by a waiter walking too close to her with some flaming dish, ruining her dress, and subsequently her date with Roy, works just fine for me! bitchy ho. What was wrong with Ed when he considered going back into the restaurant for Speed?? I know he needed a ride but damn! Had he lost his ever lovin' mind?!? He knew he'd been played and yet he still thought about going back into that shit?!? Lord love him but he wasn't thinkin' straight. And what is up with Speed having the nerve to act all rejected and disappointed?? Hello dumbass, you're the one who's been connin' Ed and you got the cojones to act all hurt and some junk?!?! What a freakin' idiot! whatever. Where's Winry with that wrench of hers when I need her? :) Wrath is so cute with the explanation of, "He can't sleep", to explain Ed being in love! Little man's got it all figured out! :D Oh, it should be that Wrath and Scar were watching the monster truck rally on cable on cabal. A cabal is a small group of conspirators who plot and plan evil deeds not something you watch TV with. just a little FYI. :) Anyway, can't wait to see how Roy explains away all the hurt he's caused Ed. If he'd quit being such a smartass all the time, he might actually get somewhere with Ed. :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - mina on February 28, 2007
I hope roy realises he is one damn LUCKY bitch that ed has it majorly bad for him. I mean come on! i didnt see no damn apology, no remorse. Just "you coming?" and "it was a yes or no question" Seriously this yout is one cocky ass bastard. But (or maybe because :) i do love him so. Still feel sorry for Speed despite it all, really curious to know what went down so wrong with roy that they have all that beef. Clearly that was not a good break up. Have someone tell that story one day pwease :D Yeah! So in love with this story. Waiting EAGERLY for next chapter.
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