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Reviews for Yakuza

By : Yaoimunculus
  • From Safir84 on January 12, 2008
    Squeals, this good, really good in fact! Okay, so you have some spelling and grammatical errors, but those're always quite easy to fix. And if you're unsure on how to spell a word then just google it! Now about the fic, so if this is an AU, I'm wonderin' something: It seems to take place in modern day, right, and you've written twice that Edward has his automail (the arm) and then when you wrote about the automail thingy I got a bit confused, cos if it's set in modern Japan then why does Edward've his automail, huh? Oh, well, it just confused me that's all!

    Anyway, I really think the plotline is great as well as the description of the characters, even though Edward seems to be a little out off topic! And Envy is just so great, one of my favourite characters along with Edward, of course and the best pairing there is according to me at least, haha!

    Cannot wait to read more, so please update soon...
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  • From AJAngelique on October 14, 2007
    for the lov of god please UPDATE!!!!!!!!
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  • From Qiana on August 30, 2007
    Please update this soon
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  • From radcat on July 05, 2007
    There are a few things I am wondering about. You wrote that Roy and his people are the good guys...does this mean they are working for the government/military? Why were they at the hospital...was someone inside the original person who was going to be the one to go on a mission at the Devil's nest and Ed just came at the wrong time? Is Ed being abused for some greater good that Roy and his people think they are doing? (If so..still is wrong.) Ed does not seem to be his usual self in this story. He should have bit down when giving Mustang his blow job. Is the object at the Devil's Nest the philospher's stone? A few grammatical errors but the more you write the more you learn. Please update...would love to see Ed save himself and to see what direction you take this.
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  • From Finnel on June 27, 2007
    O.o Wow an up-date!
    ~happy~
    please continue!
    ~waves the 'we want more envy/ed/greed' banner with a smile~
    ja!
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  • From minaaaaaaaa on June 24, 2007
    hmmm i cant really enjoy it cause i feel kind of lost as to what is going on and why. Hopefully subsequent chapters shall shed some light
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  • From AJAngelique on June 08, 2007
    omgomgomgomg!
    please update soon *watches*
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  • From Finnel on April 11, 2007
    ((looks at the end of the page and bursts into tears!)) It was just getting to Envy as well! Soooo cruel!
    Can we look forward to an up-date some time soon please?

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  • From ursweetheartless on February 08, 2007
    AAAAAHHHHHHHH BAD ENVY!! BAD ENVY!! keep your dirty hands to yourself >.< *is gripped*
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  • From TrulyWished on February 08, 2007
    Looks good, very interesting. Keep it up!
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  • From ursweetheartless on February 07, 2007
    O M F G the world needs more of that, and i think its your civic duty as the mother of this great and wonderful fic to give us more. otherwise i might predict a riot ... or maybe we'll send you mooninites dressed up as explosives and they'll have to close your city
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  • From on February 07, 2007
    I like it too! For some reason I love anime AU's and there are very very few FMA AU's that are worth reading. This one has a lot of potential I think. XD I always think that if Roy wasn't a military man, he'd be a lot more naughty. The idea of him as a gangster is uber cool.

    Are you going to have Hughes in here? It's always good to see Hughes. And how are you working in the homunculi? Are they going to be just regular people, or are they going to be humunculi, or are they going to be humans with special powers? What's it gonna be? I really want to know!

    According to the summ, you're working in my two favorite FMA pairings, so I'll be checking this for updates. Please keep working on it!
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  • From milky on February 05, 2007
    Mmm, I do love me some tied up and raped Edward. One suggestion as far as your formatting goes: in English, we start a new paragraph each time someone new starts speaking.
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  • From TrulyWished on February 05, 2007
    Look promising, but you might want to have another skim for spelling. But that's just me.
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