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From MustangsHavoc on August 18, 2007
*eyes cross and starts foaming at the mouth at the sheer cliffhangeryness of it all*

Wow, I just caught up on chapters 58 and 59. Wow, I can't beleive what just happened! Did Nicoloas really do what I think he's doing? Has it really come full circle like that? I was not expecting that! I'm glad it was Nicolas who finally fought Adieen/Dante. I didn't think Ed would have it in him, and he didn't. Wow there is still so much to wrap up! This really has turned in to and epic story! So much so I find YOUR characters invading my thoughts! Like Raine and Frank.

Two brilliant chapters! I think my favorate part was when Sloth-Nina said "Ew it has drool on it!" Just that little bit of comic relief from all the action was great!
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on August 18, 2007
AAAAAAHHH!!! OH MY GOD!! I don't believe it!! Nicholas killed Aideen/Dante!!! O_O Oh shit! And just like that they're gone off to God knows where for God knows what to happen! THIS my friends is the mother of all cliffhangers! @_@ Oh man! People are hurt and dying left and right around here! Ed's been ripped to pieces *sobs*, Aideen's dead or dying, Nicholas just took them all to the damn Gate, Phillip might have gotten shot (no big loss here), Frank is badly hurt (Nina/Sloth is creeping me out for some reason. I may be aquaphobic! XD :P), Russell's all messed up (He's gonna be seeing Wrath really soon if he doesn't get out of there asap!) - good grief! You don't mess around when all hell breaks loose do you? :) Questions - Where did Nicholas get the little girl's body from? Who is she? Why is she there? Where did she come from? What's he gonna do with her? Is Nicholas gonna use her to somehow pull Dante from Aideen? GAH! So many questions! You have to help me out here and...
Update soon!!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. That is an awesome pic of Nicholas and Aideen! :) I thought Nicholas was a blond tho. Oh well. It's a fantastic piece of art! :D
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From eeriansadowthefallen on August 17, 2007
!!

dammit, you've rendered me speachless. that was... ... ...incredibly intense.
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From Afrieal on August 17, 2007
Oh great goddess two nights of reading to catch up with the whole thing and i feel like i've been dropped off a cliff. Rysh is a puddle of goo sobbing across the room. We both want to thank you for a wonderful story. keep up the great work

Affie and Rysha

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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on August 14, 2007
GRAAH!! Another cliffhanger!! You're killing me with the cliffhangers!! :) Hurry up and write more dammit! I gotta know what happens next! :) Man, my own arm twinged a bit when Dante ripped Ed's arm off. crucial! Ripping the fingers off one by one was bad enough but taking the whole arm off at once *sucks in breath* that's just, oooh, there are no words. damn. I can't imagine. How Ed's gonna save the day when he's down an arm, in unimaginable pain both mental and physical, and he's facing down his own daughter (well, her body at the very least) I don't know. Somebody better get their ass in there and help Ed! Roy? Nicholas? Hell, Hohenheim? I'm desperate over here! :) Oh wait, nobody knows where he is do they? that he's in the tunnels? dammit! *pouts* Just hurry and post the next chapter before I die of anticipation!
Update soon! as in NOW!! XD
Koneko =^.^=
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From eeriansadowthefallen on August 14, 2007
oh gods, this was so intense. i wanted to cry at the end of this chapter (58) you have hooked me so hard with this story arc, though this may be the first time i've reviewed. you have such a wonderful writing style and great characterizations. this is a joy to read.
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on August 09, 2007
GAH!! I hate cliffhangers!! Look out, Ed! Don't let her stab you in the back, literally or figuratively! :) At last the pieces of the puzzle are finally coming together for everyone and Dante's days are numbered! YESSS!! 'Bout time! :) I'm glad that Aideen is still in there somewhere. She's gone thru pure hell fighting Dante all these years all by herself. I can see why she attempted to kill herself. Anything to stop Dante, no matter how horrific, would be preferable to living with the bitch. I can't wait for Dante to finally be expelled and utterly expunged!! I want her end to be exceptionally painful for all the hell she's caused everybody, especially Roy! MWHAHAHAHA!! (How dare she hurt my beloved Roy like this!! XD) I was really hoping that Sloth/Nina would remember everything Wrath told her. ugh. She just HAD to get the one really important detail wrong! dammit. Saying, "Dante 'has' Aideen", is vastly different from, "Dante 'is' Aideen". *pouts* I'm afraid for what Russell will do once he knows that Wrath is gone. Grief is an unpredictable thing. I hope the chimeras don't get him! Right now tho, I'm really worried about Ed, alone, with Dante, in a room surrounded by chimeras, mmm, sounds like hell to me! :[ It infuriates and scares me to death to know she's actually touching Ed! eww!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From MustangsHavoc on August 09, 2007
GAH! That was the cliffhanger to end all cliffhangers! (for now anyways) Pissed off Ed is the coolest thing ever! Pissed off Roy is just sexy. The action is really picking up now! It's so exciting! Please please let Ed figure it out! I'm really happy to see that indeed Adieen is still in her body also, so there is some hope. (clings to hope desperatly) And also please make Dante's deathas horrible as possible because I can't say this enogh I hate that woman! That chapter went by so fast! It was incredible. Update soon!
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From SeverusLutherinSalazarSnape on August 09, 2007
Basically, its the rule in which karma works. You get back three times what you give out, be it good or bad. Do something bad, and something three times worse will happen. Do something good, and something three times better will happen. Everything works in 3's. The good and the bad.

xXxHyuugaNejixXx
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From HawkChic on August 06, 2007
I liked how you slipped in that little reference to Inuyasha in there. And umm... I guess it's a little late for me to be apologizing for not reviewing for so long despite having fallen desperately in love with your work? (which is a very hard thing to do, by the way; Dan Brown and a few other fanfiction authors coming in close) To make up for the lack of reviews, I shall give you this long one, if you do not mind (I tend to ramble, I apologize ahead of time for that).

With For Her. For Him. I noticed a few grammatical errors, nothing major though just tiny ones. Normally, I tend to avoid Mpreg (that story made the second on my list, Baby Blues came first) because I often find it to be quite unrealistic. But the way you put it, I believed it; and that is what made me keep reading.

A mastery of suspense, might I say. These stories are keeping me up later and later at night to read; and normally, I spend that time working on my own. You had me biting my nails at parts! I was panicking when Roy was shot (I'm a die-hard Roy fangirl)! Nearly had a panic-attack over it, but I'm fine now. But yes, Roy is the ONLY guy I've seen who could make an eye patch SMEXY (believe me, I've seen a lot. But bandages work for others *pokes Allen*).

Now, let's get down to some of the other characters. Despite not making a large lead in the stories, Riza did have influence in them; and I cried when she died (despite not her not being one of my favorites). Al, I've always found likeable in any way; but you did an amazing job. The selfishness? Everyone feels selfish at some point in there lives, we're human; it's what we are.

Ed. Now, I had to quit being the fangirl about him when I got my friend Malaya; but he's still remained one of my favorite characters. But just so you know... *looks around nervously* as much as I love Full Metal Alchemist, this is actually the first fanfiction I've read for it. Shocking I know. I could never find someone suitable to pair Ed with (I always saw Winry with Al), but I love the idea of him being with Roy; it just feels right.

Let's move on to another of my favorite characters. Wrath. I adore this kid. Let's leave it at that. I LOVED YOUR WRATH. I can't see the kid as a homicidal maniac like Envy (actually, I can; I just won't admit it easily), but his attachment to Ed was adorable. He needs a mother figure, and I suppose that he found that in Ed.

Splendid job on everyone else; but I would like to talk about Raine now.

I, personally, have absolutely no problem with OCs. As long as they don't turn into Mary-Sues or Gary-Stues, then I'm cool with them. But Raine... I loved her! She's like me in a lot of ways (except I tend to be more violent) and her character was developed enough for me to actually believe that she could exist. Although, at some points she did remind me just a tad of Raine Sage from Tales of Symphonia.

Archer. I hate him. Always have. I liked his death scene. *evil grin* Although, it IS too bad that he didn't still have his limbs... (I would've loved to maim and dismember him slowly...)

The storyline was magnificent, and I fell in love with it. LOVELY. I still have to read more of Worlds Collide (shall do that!). And then don't be surprised if I drop you another long, lengthy, rambling review. (Should I stop now? I don't want to hurt anyone's eyes with all this text...)

I'll leave this review at this for now. But you will hear from me again soon! *waves*

Loved it. Keep up the good work!

Kat.
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on August 05, 2007
*swipes away tears* That was the saddest and most perfect ending ever!! T_T Ya know, I was doing really good keeping myself together until a certain small blonde showed up to welcome Wrath. *wibbles* Edward, *sniffle* my Achilles' heel. *sobs* I've always had such a soft spot for him. (Like you didn't know that already! :D) Through the whole chapter I was trying so hard to be strong, believing all the while that Wrath's passing, as heartwrenching as it was, would not be in vain and that some good would come of it; then, just when I least expected it, Edward appeared and I fell to pieces. With just three short sentences from dear sweet Edward, I became a sobbing puddle of goo. ;_; [hormonal much? :) The Kleenex people are lovin' me!] Oh my God you have no idea!! Izumi and Edward coming to greet Wrath like that really hit home! I have always heard it said that when you die, the people who were closest to you in life who have passed on before you will come to meet you when you pass on. They come to help ease your transition from life into death. Who better to do this for Wrath than his own mother and the first real love of his life? ooh. Man, you messed me up! This was a hard chapter to read! so much emotional turmoil! @_@ *curls up in a ball with Roy plushie and mourns Wrath and, yes, Edward too*

I loved it that when Eckhart went thru the Gate she went to the "fiery-looking" end of it! Yesss! *evil grin* Something the Gate said tho confuses me. "But his [Ed's] power came from two beings not yet of the world [referring to the twins], one of whom never really solidified his own attachment to it." ?? Who didn't solidify "his" attachment to the world? Nicholas? Dante? If the Gate was referring to Dante, why did it say "his"? pish. Who knows what the Gate really meant. and this "the girl would give him trouble" crap! UGH!! That is so typical of the Gate! vague stupid bastard Gate. I mean, seriously?, the Gate's never been fair but there was no reason for that much cruelty! I more or less understand the logic the Gate used to justify it's actions, but was it really for the best to let Dante loose in the world again knowing the pain and destruction she would bring to so many? feh. This would again require that the Gate be upfront, fair, and just which it is not - not as we understand those concepts anyway. *sigh* I hate myself for asking this and I can't word this properly or in a way that doesn't sound so viciously cold-hearted, but would it not have been for the betterment of everyone else for Aideen to be sacrificed so others would not suffer? *cowers* I know, I know! It's so horrible to say that! I'm sorry! It's not that anyone would wish an innocent baby dead but, if you know that the baby is destined to bring pure evil into the world, can you honestly say that you would not consider eliminating that evil before it takes root? Something along the lines of, "The good of the many outweighs the good of the few or the one."? GAH!! moral dilemma! ;_; I'm a horrible person for even thinking this! T_T I'm reminded of an old argument about Hitler that goes along the lines of my question. If you were there when Hitler was born and knew the atrocious things he was going to do, would you not at least want to kill him then and there so millions would not suffer and die later on? Unfortunately, there is no guarantee that your actions would save those millions as it is quite possible that someone else would rise to power and commit those crimes and those same millions would still suffer and die. There's also the possibility that this someone would be worse than Hitler and you're left to decide between the lesser of two evils. *moans piteously* The whole thing's a pointless round and round argument that just makes my head hurt. I'm sorry I even brought it up now. dammit. *cradles head in hands* It's all the fault of the Gate and it's complicated convoluted logic making me think such stuff. :( emotional turmoil bad for head. ;_;

*shoves the angst laden baggage from the previous paragraph aside* OK, let's see if I can't get this review back on track. the new homunculus. Sloth. I'm very glad she got away from Dante as quickly as she did. I hope she remembers everything Wrath told her and that Frank and Kain believe her. Since she favors Wrath because she was created from his essence, it kinda makes her his daughter doesn't it? That's just a twist of the knife for Russell. poor guy. I'm also very thankful that Wrath intercepted Dante's message and saved everyone from another invasion! *hugs Wrath* Dare one believe the Gate was being fair and just this one time?? I'm also glad weird whispering creepy Tucker is gone and I can't wait for Dante to finally get hers! Something to look forward to! :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. Yeah, Ed will probably kick my butt if I don't leave Roy alone! :D But, do you think, maybe just this once, he'll cut me some slack since Wrath's dead and gone? *wibbles* We can comfort each other and commiserate together. I promise I'll be good. I just need a hug to make it all better. *smiles a watery hopeful smile at Ed*
P.P.S. I hope your grandfather is OK. I lost my grandparents yeeears ago. Enjoy yours while ya got 'im.
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From MustangsHavoc on August 05, 2007
The ending for this chapter almost made me cry! It was a beautiful ending! It makes Wrath's death so much easier to take! I absolutly loved how Wrath got to mess up Dante's plans and help the new Nina/Sloth. And Kain and Frank will get a daughter won't they? SQUEEE! I hope so!

You know on a side note, i think I'm reading to much fanfiction because I had a dream last night that Dante was incontrol of our world.*shudders*
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From roely on August 05, 2007
oh that is so sad! i hope that they can get their daughter back! so she will be the one adopted by the two men huh! poor russel i hope u give him some hope!
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From SeverusLutherinSalazarSnape on August 04, 2007
Lol. No, not anything to do with whican actually. I'm a buddhist. Its just the law of karma. I often use it in my stories, and it was ment for Dante. Stupid bitch. Lol.

~xXxHyuugaNejixXx
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From SeverusLutherinSalazarSnape on August 02, 2007
...I'm mad at you... I know I havent reviewed before, but I'm mad at you. I've been following this story for a long while now and you killed Wrath... How dare ye.

Ever mind the rule of three, three times what thou givest returns to thee, this lesson well, thou must learn, thou only gets what thou dost earn.

xXxHyuugaNejixXx
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