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By : nomdeplume

From koorimesbabygurl on June 03, 2007
funny. nicholas is by far my fav character i luv his personality and he's just so lively is the only way i can describe it. poor aideen i think she still has some guilt in her that prevents her from being 'normal' around others even though this was somthing she had when she was younger. i hope ed/roy's relationship gets better and i hope frank doesnt do what i think he will to his father, not that i blame him. ok update soon and luv the story XD
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From ANON - Amethyst-Eyed Koneko on June 02, 2007
Well damn. This chapter was all over the place - lots of ups and downs here. The downs: (1) Aideen's walking around like some kind of gloomy goth. Is she still that messed up because of the chimera attack? (2) Ed and Roy are fighting with each other more than loving one another. Emotional abandonment = a living hell. Shame on you Ed! :( You have no idea how close to home you hit with that part about Roy being afraid he was having a heart attack because of all the stress in his life. frighteningly close. It was like looking in a mirror. Roy's starting to suffer arthritis too? Good God! He's me! T_T No, Ed, you're not the woman in this relationship. You just act like one by fighting with your husband and then running off to spend the night with family. jeez. At least Ed figured out what was wrong with their relationship before things got truly ugly. Hopefully now he can fix it. (3) Frank's mom got the crap beaten out of her and God knows what Frank's gonna do about it. Although, it's not too hard to guess. (4) Dante and Tucker are STILL on the loose. RRGHH!! Damn the both of them!!! I've got a wrench with Dante's name on it just waiting to get in on the beatdown these two SO richly deserve! grr!!! (5) That damnable bastard Hohenheim is still able to influence yet another Ed and Al. Damn this sonofabitch to the hell HE so richly deserves!! GRRR!!!! Go ruin young Armstrong's life and leave these babies alone, ya leech! grr! I could slap the hell out of Noa for naming her children Edward and Albert! Actually, I could slap the hell out of Noa for no reason at all! Betcha the heifer did it thinking she was "honoring" Ed and Al. ugh. I can't stand this stupid cow. blecch. She stole Ed's thoughts when he was asleep and I'll never forgive the bitch for it!! grr!! Thank goodness you didn't mention Eckhart (blecch again) or I might really have come unglued! XD What are Earth Mustang and the rest of that psychotic bunch up to these days anyway? (I have a feeling I'm not gonna like the answer to that question.)

As far as ups go, well, (1) Nicholas seems to be taking things in stride even going so far as to joke around about his arm. *rolls eyes* Why are teenage boys such idjits sometimes? ;) (2) Ed was so adorable asleep hugging a plush kitty! CUTE!!! :D (3) Frank and Kain are so cute together! so sweetly in love. :) Coulda done without knowing Kain had a sweaty back tho. ew. :) (4) Wrath and Russell seem to have settled into some kind of actual relationship. What kind of relationship I can't tell but they seem happy with what they have. Why is Wrath trying to build a rocket anyway? (5) Roy doesn't just look damned good in glasses, he looks un-by-God-believably damned good in glasses! w00t! Hell yeah! Mm-mm-mm-mm-mm-tasty! (Apologies to Quiznos.) If I could get Roy dressed to the nines (with the glasses of course!) and Ed in his uniform together I think I'd pass out! Totally drool-icious!! :) Don't know why but I just love Ed in full regalia! Roy too for that matter! There's just something about a military uniform. *purrs* ;)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From koorimesbabygurl on May 30, 2007
great chapter funny, cute and funny yet again. nicholas is crazy man and i love him, he is just like both his fathers which in itself is a funny and good combination lol. cant wait to read more to update soon XD
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on May 29, 2007
WOW!! I never expected Russell to be so aggressive or so kinky! I like it! :) Wrath isn't gonna know what hit him when Russell starts using toys on him! ;) Good Lord! It kinda scares me to think just how big Wrath is when he's at full attention! How on Earth did Edward manage that beast? Whew! That hurts just to think about it! LOL!! Damn! Brother is hung like a friggin' mule! XD One that big might ruin you for life! :) The little talk between Roy and Wrath was sweet. It was like a son getting a sex talk from his dad. quite endearing!

I don't know why but I imagine that if Nicholas had his way his arm would be so modified that he would look like a Transformer. (Transformers were those robots that could change into things like cars, trucks, planes, etc. You may never have heard of them as they were on TV a long time ago but I remember them well. God I'm showing my age again. *sigh*) I understand his desire to have the weapons but there's no guarantee that having them would help him in any way. Just because you have a weapon doesn't mean you automatically have the presence of mind to use it in a bad situation. Not only that, it would be just one more thing to keep up the maintenance on besides the usual upkeep. And, if Nicholas is like his daddy who was always slacking in keeping his automail maintained, it would be more trouble than it's worth. I never understood why Ed always thought of his automail as some kind of hindrance. As much as he used it in battle you'd think he'd appreciate it a bit more than that. I think it's more Ed's perception of the automail than the automail itself that is/was the hindrance. He couldn't accept it therefore, in his mind, other people didn't accept it or him. That makes me really sad. ;_;

Like father, like son, again! :) Nicholas is eyeing the ladies. Yep, he's Roy's son alright! LOL! "You shouldn�t ogle women like objects." This from the man who's chased more skirts than can be counted?? *smiles and rolls eyes* Sure Roy, do as I say not as I do. gotcha! ;) I liked how Gracia very politely, but on no uncertain terms, told Nicholas that he'd better behave himself. :) Nicholas got schooled! ;) Shame on you, Nicholas, for wanting to flip off reporters! *giggle*

I'm happy Frank and Kain are engaged! They're so cute together! That proposal was so sweet!! I hope they'll be together for a long time to come!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. Please note that it took a great deal of restraint not to comment on Dante and Tucker. sorry sonsofbitches! Oops! Guess I'm not as retrained as I thought I was! ;)
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From ANON - Fulcanelli on May 29, 2007
While in the process of reading up until this point, through both the original story and this sequel, you've updated more than three times. Considering that I hardly put the story down, that's quite the impressive feat.

FMA is probably my favorite anime and manga, and having a story that is both long and well-written is truly a treat. I hardly ever even bother to look at MPregs, because they are so ridiculous. I'm certainly glad I suspended my disbelief!

I'm impressed by how you are managing to write several very complex characters at once and somehow, keep them all distinctive and interesting. I agree, Russell was quite annoying in the anime, but I like how you've handled him in your fiction. I also appreciated your treatment of Wrath, who I thought after the Conquerer of Shambala, needed a little more screen-time than he got.

It's also rare that I find a story that manages to age the characters and have them grow up, and yet, stay the same. I appreciate an author that has the maturity themselves to understand how people change, and still maintain what makes them unique, as they grow older.

The sex scenes are superb! Having many homosexual couples express their love or physical desire, without repetition from couple to couple, or even scene to scene, is very impressive. I can tell that you've tried, and succeeded, in the past couple of chapters to include some kink as well. I'm looking forward to what you'll do with Russell and Wrath; the two of them seem to have some issues (low self-esteem much?) that they might channel into sex. I'm glad, however, that you finally got some of their sexual tension out and in the open. Wrath is extremely stubborn, no?

I'm also looking forward to seeing how Nicholas will handle the handicap (and then advantage) of automail. For a long time, I thought you were putting too much spotlight on Aideen and not enough on her twin, but this should manage to give him a little bit more character of his own. I also liked the silly commentary on the last bit of the previous chapter... it's nice to see how the twins are growing up and developing more of their characters as the age. I was waiting for one of them to show signs of Roy's preoccupation with flesh!
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From SadlerGirl on May 29, 2007
What a lovely chapter I giggled loud enough to annoy the dog when Frank proposed. Frank proposed How sweet this chapter was too sweet. The lemon was great I love how you kept Russell's smart alec-ness even in the middle of sex. How could anyone not love the the tight knit feelings between Ed and Roy and the Kids. As usual This is just too good
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From ANON - Jaugi on May 28, 2007
AHHH this story rocks! i loved the first one but i absolutly adore the second! i was so shocked when nicholas got his arm amputated! and i love the couple of kain and frank and its about time wrath and russel got a kiss in. i was cheering for them. ah i cant wait to read more this is the best fma fan fic ive ever read! i love all the couples! (>.
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From koorimesbabygurl on May 26, 2007
i am so so so so so sorry for not reading and reviewing in a long time and i feel guilty :( all i have to say is i enjoyed every chapter and each one had me on the edge of my chair wanting to know more. finally frank and kain are together, i thought they would never get together lol. and now russell and wrath about damn time they came to their senses. and nicholas losing his arm that made my heart clench then before that the death of pinako and carlida so mush happened i can't comment on all of them. oh btw i saw the pic of the twins and it looks good better than what i can do. can't wait to read more so they can get that b*tch dante and tucker damn i been wanting to get him since the nina incident. don't keep us waiting for too long XD
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on May 25, 2007
Believe it or not, I was in fact speechless. Amazing huh? :) I, me, who can write the longest reviews in all of creation, was left bereft of anything to say! That's quite an accomplishment! Congrats! LOL! Seriously tho, that was an awesome chapter! I didn't even see it coming. I knew Nicholas was seriously hurting from that bite and that it might take time and some of Raine's special skills to purge the poison from him but I was completely blind-sided by him having to lose the arm! Whoa! I've noticed that you've managed several times to do this to me. Either you're that good of an author or I'm that gullible. Probably a bit of both! ;) I'm glad that Nicholas is in good spirits about the loss. That's crucial in a situation like this. Having the right frame of mind can make all the difference in the world in one's recovery from a traumatic experience. That and the love of friends and family helps a bunch too. Nicholas will be OK. It's Ed right now who's needing more support than Nicholas. He's beating himself up for something he had no control over. Ed shouldn't blame himself. It's not his fault the boy's so head-strong. He got that from all three of his parents, not just Ed! :) I'm sure it's killing Ed to know how much it's going to hurt Nicholas when the auto-mail is attached. I remember Ed saying that it was the attaching of the nerves to the auto-mail that hurt the most and Pinako commenting that it was the kind of pain that could bring grown men to their knees. I can't even imagine. On a brighter note, I too have donated my hair to be made into wigs just like Aideen did! It's kinda weird when you think about your hair being on someone else's head but, since it's for a good cause, it's all good! :)

So Wrath and Russell finally realized that they're the best thing that could have happened to each other have they? Good! 'Bout time! :) I remember Wrath getting frustrated with Edward when they were still in Germany because he wouldn't even try to fight for their relationship. Edward would never fight or argue with Wrath over anything. Edward was just too gentle, sweet, and kind-hearted to fight. (Dammit! I'm getting all emotional about Edward being gone now! T_T) I wonder if it was Jacob's timidity that drew Wrath to him in the first place. Maybe Wrath was unconciously trying to recreate Edward in Jacob. Wrath needs someone to challenge him; and goodness knows Russell is a challenge! I couldn't believe Jacob said, "What are you?" ouch! brutal! The little mouse has teeth after all! Favorite line: "Not only do you have Ed�s arm and leg, but somehow, you managed to be part horse, too." Well then! LOL! I think that's pretty self explanatory! XD I never thought about Wrath having different colored body hair before. That's kinda freaky. No wonder he shaves it off! :) A few chapters ago during Ed's birthday party, Wrath was wishing for someone who could bring out the fire in him, someone who could argue and debate with him and still love him regardless, someone to trust with his secrets. I think he may have found that someone! :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - Of Apples and Honey on May 25, 2007
Omg, Aideen cut off her hair! OMG, hah, Nicholas is SO gonna guilt Winry. OMFG, WRATH AND RUSSELL HOOKED UP!!! XD This chapter... Was awesome... That actually kind of scared me when Aideen cut her hair off, I was like "Wtf?!" I'd never be able to do that... And Nicholas is el strong one! Yay! Can't wait 'til the next update.
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on May 24, 2007
*finishes reading and sits in agonized silence, eyes welling with tears* I don't know what to say. There are no words to properly express how distraught I am. I feel kinda numb. I won't shoot you, I wouldn't even if I could. You've taken the fight right out of me. I want to fall out and sob like crazy, but I'm simply too upset to move. Only a year older than his father was when he got his automail (which is what I think you meant by the line, "I�m a year older than you. And it can be replaced with automail." not sure.) and being so brave about it. It wasn't until the sound of the bone saw *cringes* that I, like Ed, fell apart. *takes a deep breath* You have messed me up for real this time! whew! :) I was so glad the Ed and Al killed the beast that did this to Nicholas! What kind of crazy alchemy did Aideen use to destroy those chimeras? It was awesome! She's an impressive little kid! :)

When you post a link to a spoiler photo, you should put it at the end of the chapter so people won't go look at it and ruin the chapter for themselves. I read the comments. People don't listen to spoiler warnings. There were probably quite a few readers who ruined the ending for themselves by looking at the photo first. I found it curious that you chose to dress Aideen like Ed and Nicholas like Al. (I always imagine Al dressed just like in your photo, wearing khakis and a button-up shirt. Don't know why but I do!) I remember from, um *flicks back thru the chapters*, chapter 13 where seven year old Nicholas and Aideen were "sparring" and Aideen was dressed like Roy, eyepatch and all, and Nicholas was dressed like Ed, miniscule ponytail and big red shirt. This is how I, to this day, picture these two - Aideen favoring Roy and Nicholas favoring Ed. I had to do a double take and look really hard at the picture since it so contrasted with how I imagine them. Now that Nicholas has an automail arm *fights back tears*, he is definitely Ed made over! Like father, like son! :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - Of Apples and Honey on May 23, 2007
Yay, I finally finished the whole thing!

... NICHOLAS IS GETTING AUTOMAIL?!?!?! Gawd, the emotional-ness of it all. Ed's going to be a wreak, so is Aideen... And... Yea, I do see Aideen as more of a "Riza" than Nicholas, while I believe Nicholas is more like Edward... Yay! Hope you update soon! Nicholas, automail is NOT fun, young man...
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on May 21, 2007
WAAAAHH!! Nicholas! T_T I hope Aideen knows enough medical alchemy to help him! Poisons are nasty things. The way Aideen was just standing there in that building scared the living daylights out of me! If I didn't know she was wearing her protective necklace I'd be panicking thinking that Dante had gotten ahold of her! She IS wearing that necklace still isn't she? ACK! Now I AM panicking 'coz I don't know what's wrong with her!!! Oh I hope it's just the shock and exhaustion from fighting chimeras that's making her act weird!! *cries* Kain's hurt so badly too!! *sobs* I hope he'll be OK. *wibbles*

When this is all over, Wrath (I can't bring myself to call him Ulysses! yecch!) will be lucky if Jacob will stay in the same room as him let alone remain his boyfriend! Jacob's not liking seeing Wrath's true colors. Oh well, bye bye Jacob! We hardly knew ya and we'll barely miss ya! :) Russell shouldn't worry. The object of his desires will be fine! ;) Wrath has to be OK because he has to be there when Dante goes down! *smiles happily as images of Dante's slashed chopped mangled charred corpse is thrown to a pack of rabid chimeras* I am so bad! *toothy evil grin*

Speaking of chimeras, loved the flashback moment from Ed! "What the hell is it with you chimeras? Why do you keep insisting on attacking that arm?" Ah yes! Memories of Lior and the lion chimera Ed fought there! Wow that was a long time ago! I feel bad that Ed's had to become a "killing machine" and relive all those terrible memories. Unfortunately, killing these monstrosities is the best thing for them. ugh. I don't wanna even think about Ed or anyone else drenched in chimera blood! *shivers*
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From SadlerGirl on May 21, 2007
Ed is so mature ( when he NEEDS to be) ,Poor Al he just can't make the togh choices if they hurt anyone.
Great chapter as always. Thanks a bunch.
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From ANON - hikaru_9 on May 21, 2007
Nice Cliffhanger! The action sequences are good, but i was a little dissapointed that the really wasn't an Ed and Al scene. I'm curioust to how they're faring in all of this. Fun to read as always. :D
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