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Reviews for When There Are Two of Me

By : chayron

From ultistarmon on June 23, 2007
I passed over this story for a bit, thinking it was a bit cliche. You know the whole woke up has to relearn everything over again thing. However, this is refreshingly different! I love the mystery element, I'm completely hooked! I wanna know whats up with Bulma and Goku seems to be acting weird. Just what has the other Trunks been up to. God, all these questions! I do hope that everything turns out well. I'm a sucker for happy endings.
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From ANON - Saiyajinprincess on June 16, 2007
ouhm, i didnt get that. ^^�
thankies you for the explanation!!^^

i really thought that there were some evil plans, calculations
or something for whatever on that cd and that trunks had destroyed
it because he knew, that goten is absolutely right by behaving passive
and not trusting him.
i thought he felt guilty and anger with himself /
the other trunks that he�d screwed up the relationship
between himself and goten and that the "new trunks" can�t fix it so easily now.
he was so schocked by what he�ve found after he�d hacked the
hidden information on his own laptop.
thats the reason why i came up with that
"evil plan on a cd"- thing.
i am relieved now, that there isnt something!
err...well yah.
even if there never WAS something. XDDD

the last chapter was great!! uuuhuuuhu! ^^ i love trunks
cooleness. you gave him such a adorable mixture made of cooleness,
intelligence and sometimes with a little touch of an five year old,
who just loves to playing games with everyone. very sexy, very interesting!just great!
the conversation between him and that kanou was just awesome and a good
playground for his charakter for my feeling!
i really enjoyed that. d^^b well and the passport thing. ummmh.
wow. ~.~ it seems to me that he�s trying to totally get rid off his other self, now.
i dont have a clue if that is good thing or not. maybe it is, maybe it�s making things
worse.
i dont want to know whats happen when his other half decides to show up again,
or if he begins to remember things.
i doupt that one is able to "reborn" himself in that way,
without getting serious problems on his hand.
all those visible changes and now even another passport
to change his own identety completely.
hopefully it works for trunks himself either.
i doupt that it will work on goten.
well, trunks maybe can change a lot of things but not gotens memories, i think.
dont know if that will work so well.
whaa, i really hope it�s turning out good for both of them.
but i can say that your story becomes more
and more interesting with every new updated chapter!!! ^^

you�re very welcome! :D

i cant read your stories
without leaving a comment, you know.
yah. and it seems that my comment are becomming
longer and longer.
i really wonder, why this "to write in english
shortens the sentences"- thing- doesnt work in my case.
very unfair.
umm. okay in my mother tangue it�s worse, tough.

please keep on, i am looking forward
the next chapter!
bye :)

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From cueball2 on June 16, 2007
Well done. This is quite an intriguing development. I wonder why Trunks had all those extra things set up.
Looking forward to more. :)
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From Robyn on June 14, 2007
Yes...I want to know the answers to all of these things at least as much as Trunks does!

I hope this passport thing turns out okay. :(
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From ANON - Saiyajinprincess on June 09, 2007
wha...?! three complete dessertations in such a short time �O wow that�s what i would call unbelievable unfair now i�m sure i dont like him. no matter what he will do next XDDD

well,now i think i know what you�ve meant by `goten doesnt know EVERTHING about the trunks he felt in love with. that cd. ...i�m bloody curious what it is about.
and if even trunks himself get worried when he found out,what he�d done,than it surely is dangerous. i think otherwise trunks wouldnt have freaked out like that and destroyed the cd after goten left. oh and whats more, i really love, what happened between goten and trunks now. it�s very interesting to read, that trunks is trying to make son goten trust him. but on the other hand goten now seems to become more and more ...umm, passive? errrh, well or at least i think, that he tries to be passive. more then before, i think. well everthing between trunks and goten seems to be very fragile and everthing is unsure and kind of insecure.
gwaah. i just can hope, that the cd will not destroy everything what�s left to built up a new friendship...looove! *-;* *smirk*
umm. but i wonder, what could have been saved on that cd, that it is so much dangerous and even able to shock trunks himself when he found out what he�d done. �O` a bomb!? a killerandroid?! gen manipulation stuff with some peoples, or something? O.O
i thought that, because one of the dessertations was about that gen stuff, ne? gods, i hope that he wasnt going to do experiments on goten or stuff like that. weird imagination though. ^^� but anyways. he destroyed the cd. gooood. :D so if there isnt still existing a copy, it will hopefully be alright, then! :D
yeap, i have to wait for the next chapter and i can say, that i�m enyoing to wait for it.
you�ve done a really adorable job so far and as i said, i�m bloooooooody curious, what will happen next! i love to know nothing clearly! *giggle* very exciting and it�s just thrilling me out of my chair!! *loves it* ��m looking forward the next chapter! d^-^b Please keep on!
bye! :)
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From ANON - Macha on June 04, 2007
wow...not THIS is getting interesting! WHOOT! :) PLOT! YAY!
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From ANON - Asha on June 03, 2007
okay, all of your stories leave me cursing the end of each chapter and leave me impatient for the next, but this one is the WORST for it!!! Its got so many little mysteries going on, and I just can't wait to find out more, and the resolutions of them. I really look forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - Saiyajinprincess on May 27, 2007
waaah! ^x^ he dyed his hair black and has a new haircut! uhh, wow that�s a shame. i loved his violet hair a lot. but well. i�m sure, trunks will always be a sugarcutie pie, now matter if he has green,blue,violet or black hair, right? yessss. *smirks* and i�m also sure that it will help him and maybe all the other ones to see that he�s different now, and not only inside. heck, i still dont know what i�ve to think about him. i like the new trunks, but sometimes he acts so err...deceitful. actually very deceitful. �O but maybe he�s just to clever for his own good.
HA! so he WAS dangerous!! Uhmmm. but than i wonder why goten is so fearless and behaves so normal in his near, from the very beginning on. i mean he couldn�t know in the beginning, that "his" trunks is "gone", could he? but goten kissed him anyway. well, goten loves trunks. but to risk that he maybe could have been killed, becuase of that kiss...and if trunks was that dangerous.. i guess, it has to do with what happend three years ago, right? maybe everything has to do with that!? mwahh. ^O^ it just confusing to no end. sooo goooood!! but so verrry exciting at the same time! it really thrills me not to know what�s going on and what the other trunks did, before his accident had happened. well and how the last chapter had ended was a little mindopener, for me. because as a reader i only knew the "new" trunks, not the other one. wasnt easy for me to get a grip on this twoperson- thing, before.
but as i read the last chapter, i dont know, but it has helped me to understand him better.
err. or at least, i think i did. ^^ ...the truth is outthere... *giggle*
soooo, i can�t wait for the next chapter!! and i�m sure that i cant get more curious. i really cant.
please keep on. bye d^^b
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From Robyn on May 25, 2007
Wow...a whole lot of self analyzing going on in this chapter. I liked it.
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From cueball2 on May 24, 2007
Interesting turn of events. I want more! :)
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From Robyn on May 12, 2007
Well, this was a fun, exciting chapter. I wonder how long Trunks will continue to do these things. Or if/when he remembers who he was, if he will return to being the same.

I found it interesting he talks about his past self in the third person.

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From ANON - Saiyajinprincess on May 12, 2007
wow, your ideas are just adorable, you know ?!? ^^ there are already so many headnuts to think about. :) god. i cant wait, to finally know, what happened three years ago, between goten and trunks. and there happened also something between goten and his dad, right?? it seems to me, that they had have a querrel or maybe something more serious. *.+ and maybe because of trunks?...??
well.i really wonder, why everybody is tryiing to hide the fact, that Trunks has SSJ Powers. i dont think, that he would freak out or something... that�s weird. i dont have a clue, why nobody tells him, because if they would simply tell him, it would be easier for all of them, including trunks himself, wouldnt it?
and than those blood tests...was the "other trunks" dangerous? stronger than usually AND dangerous?? hmm. ugwaah. indeed verrrrrrry mysterious. and how i LOVE it! *grins* please, update soon. ^^
i am looking forward the next chapter. i am more than just curious what will happen next.
bye.
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From cueball2 on May 10, 2007
Intriguing chapter. Trunks knows bits and pieces more than he's letting on. I wonder what he's going to do next. Goten seems to be getting along well with Trunks... so far.

Keep it up! :)

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From ANON - veggiefan2 on May 10, 2007
Very good. I love that both of the Trunks' have effects on Goten that he's not sure he likes and Gohan...that's a mystery between him and our lavender haired boy genius. I can't wait to see what you come up with next. Ja'ne.
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From Robyn on May 03, 2007
:) I like this very much. The concept is fun, and there are going to be all sorts of opportunities for chaos and misunderstanding.

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