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Reviews for Idomu

By : Robyn

From angelwarrior1 on May 21, 2013
I'm so glad to see this story is still up. I couldn't find it again and thought it had been deleted. I was very sad. Luckily, I found it on accident after reading through Tryst again. This is one of my favorites, simply for its maturity in writing, great job of pairing Radditz/Gohan together, and for how awesome it was reading a time travel/au story about Vegetasei still existing. Never take this story down please.

Angelwarrior1
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From TristaML on May 23, 2012
I am SO glad you wrote an epilogue! I would have said the same thing your beta said!

Can't believe I am just now finishing this story... you put so much into each chapter, every detail put in it executed beautifully. I've honestly read through several of the chapters twice for my own personal gain :D So happy to read your work, and content with the ending. I think Radditz's idea for their "honeymoon" was very romantic, and of course they still have their obstacles to overcome, still the relationship was right. (Honestly it's upsetting to me that there aren't so many hits on this story- why does everyone freak out over the incestual parts of the story- they are fictional characters after all. Besides isn't homosexuality itself considered immoral? Moreover, you'd think the idea of bloody fights and violent sex would be more disturbing to the mentality then FAKE incest...) Radditz seemed like such a smooth talker, all of his conversations with Gohan were brilliant, real life conversations most people can't even choke out. Everytime he talked I said, "Damn!" Their straightforward approach to gaining back one another was admirable to say the least.

I was secretly hoping you'd have Kakarot take the Prince, excuse me, King, and I like how you brought back the dildo (and the gag:D). Fate is in favor of love I think. And as for Goku and Vegeta back on Earth, for all Vegeta knows Bulma was recording...

I am impressed with this story all together. Very intricate and very daring and very, very well done.

Thank you so much for writing!

TristaML

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From Spacefille on March 22, 2012
This is one of the best fanfics I've ever read. I read it over the space of the last couple days I really enjoyed the desperation Gohan had at the beginning "I'd like to wake up now" and then the developing love story. It resolved so nicely, and the characterization was phenomenal (the main timeline's Goku being shy in bed, Gohan's pain when he first gets wished back). I also appreciated the fact that Bulma has to be about sixty in this fanfic and yet Vegeta is still sleeping with her and cares about her... it really stuck out in my mind. Chichi died young, eh? And the ending, the ending! Thanks so much for wrapping it up happily, I spent most of the fanfic scared to death that one of these wonderfully developed characters were going to die permanently. D: Anyway! Great job, thanks for the excellent read!
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From angelwarrior1 on August 19, 2011
Thanks so much for this amazing story! I love this so much, as sadly, it's the only Raditz/Gohan story I've ever come across. The Goku/Vegeta, PV/K was fun too. Looking forward to any future stories you write!

Angelwarrior1
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From Lorichelle87 on July 10, 2011
I read this a few weeks ago but you have become my favorite author on this site so I've decided to come and offer my personal review of all of my favorites of your stories.

This was one of those epic fics that stay with you long after you read it. It is easily one of the best stories I have ever read. You had so many layers of the story and were able to have the reader enjoy the progression of each individual character. And the emotions were so real. Love love love!

I want more stories from you! :)
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From ANON - Viandra on March 28, 2011
Dear Macha,
I stumbled across your fanfic just days ago. I am not so fond of Gohan, but decided to give the story a try anyway. What can I say, soon i was hooked. Your style is amazing! I loved the characters and the mood your detailed way of story-telling created. I dreaded the story coming an end, because I wanted to hear more. Thank you for such a great experience! This fiction is one of the best I have ever read. Keep up your good work and having fun writing.
Yours,
Viandra
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From TrinityFromtheEraofBlood on October 20, 2009
I loved this whole story and honestly i cant see why you don't have like 20000 bazzillion hits!!! i loves it with a passion so thanks so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From jadeflowerbooks on April 25, 2009
Please keep on writing. I really want ot read more. Cold you create another sch story with an ke Gohan. An idea is the Sayians and Namekes were oppisite each other in temepermant. Namiks war like and Sayains peaceful. The Namiks attack and Gohan ends up in Piccolo's court, via Nail or another Namik. I don't care if you have to change things around to make the story work. I am already trying to write this story and it's not going well. I hope that you have better luck.
Thanks.
Jade
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From ANON - jade on April 09, 2009
I love this story. Please write another like this one, please? I really liked how you made the chareters natural to their planets. i can't wait to read more.
thanks,
jade
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From Robyn on April 08, 2009
:) I'm glad you are enjoying it.
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From glasseyeviolet on April 08, 2009
This story is getting so addicting! I can see where Gohan gets his brains, nice tye into the story.
Hehe I hope Vegeta and Kakarott end up together (I believe they will.) Oooh loving this story, I will be sure
to keep on reading.
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From glasseyeviolet on April 07, 2009
Wow, this story seems interesting! And your using the DBGT timeline instead of the Z timeline which is great. It adds to the effect. ^-^
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From Robyn on July 20, 2008
Oh, wow, thank you Asper! Wonderful comments, even the pointers on details and the added knowledge my characterization is getting better are greatly appreciated.

I wouldn't say that I am not writing DBZ any more - just that inspiration/muses were on vacation. (Really? How to top a novel?) I've got a cute/fuzzy story that's been in the works since I started writing Spiral. (It was my therapy story for when things went too far in Spiral.) I've got two epics to write, one an incest and another a crossover, both of which will never see the fandom light of day, and am currently working on a challenge fic. (Thank goodness my muses appreciate good challenges.)

Anyway, I could go on and on about me. :P I just want to let you know I appreciate the review, even if it did come at a rather unexpected time!

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From Asper on July 19, 2008
I apologize for being... *checks watch* 11 months late to review this, but hey. Better late than never, right?

I loved Idomu. I loved it so much that I just couldn't stop reading it, and stayed up for hours doing so. The plot was intricate and rich, not necessarily for the primary arc alone, but considering the details you put into it. You really got into each character's mind � the scientist, the hungry concubine, the prince, the bitter sergeant � in a way I have NEVER seen in any other fanfiction. Situations were well orchestrated and carefully executed, and the story was clearly planned well from the beginning. Your level of description was occasionally a bit less than the ideal, but I cannot recall a time when your description become tiresome, which is worse :P. Additionally, the story was a testament to the unrivaled sense of *consequence* that you possess. Where other fics tend to sugar coat or forget the bitter/negative after effects of extra-marital affairs or hopeless situations, you seem to have a firm grasp of character psychology. It was a novel, and a really good one at that: exciting, vibrant, clear, and rich.

The sex was great too *goofy grin*. To be honest, I didn't even like the pairings at a conceptual level, but the execution was such that the story made me like it, much like Spiral and Jaded made me appreciate the events even though they didn't sit well with me.

I especially liked the way your characterization has improved from your earlier work � reactions to consequences in secondary characters made more sense in Idomu, and even Chi-Chi's sad realization at the end of chapter 13 made much more sense (and was more poetic) than Bulma's realization in Jaded. Everything was just so well planned; I forgot I was reading a fanfiction, especially a yaoi. It is truly an impressive work.

You deserve many more reviews than you have received. This is truly a must-read in its genre. I know you've stopped writing DBZ fics, but I thought you deserved to know that you're #1 on my recommended reading list. Your stories are epic, never stop writing!
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From ANON - Layla on August 08, 2007
*LEAP TWIRL LAND* XD Huzzah! I'm so glad your beta threatened you to write an Epilogue. Tee hee. A very nice story indeed. ^_^ Hopefully you are planning some other fanfictions... Anywho, I'm glad I was able to make you smile in my last comment.
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