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By : CrimsonTide
  • From ANON - Susie Q on August 20, 2007
    Main event! Main event! I'm dying to read Vegeta's reaction.
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  • From on August 10, 2007
    Hehe, YAY! I love Mpreg!Goku so much. And even though I've already read this story, it was a while ago and this is a great reread! :D

    I love how you write. Your style is really easy to follow and the way you keep Vegeta and Goku in character is just another big plus. Keep writing, you're astounding at it!
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  • From Dramastarelf on August 10, 2007
    I love it make the rapist squirm.
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  • From Kagenoshi on August 09, 2007
    Squirm, Yamcha, squirm! *grins evily* I hope that thinking it's Yamcha's baby is just a scare, but if it turns out to be Yamcha's then I hope Vegeta will be understanding!
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  • From Dramastarelf on August 07, 2007
    fry your fish lol, I'm just happy your sharing the fic. I like fish.
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  • From Kagenoshi on August 06, 2007
    New chapter...YAY! Mpreg...mmmmmmmm! I've read your other stories as well as this one, and I need to ask...why is it that your stories make me cry and make me wanna be protective of Goku? *Sigh* I guess it's because I'm a sensitive person. I love your stories and I can't wait to read the next chapter you post.
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  • From ANON - Dark~Kakarot on August 06, 2007
    Its a very ncie and unique story, I love it. Keep it up
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  • From Tyrana on August 03, 2007
    Thanks for posting this story. Sorry I haven't finished reading New Life, I have not read anything in ages, just a couple of short ficlets, I can't find the time. ^^; So my reviews will come but not as soon as I'd like. Anyway, you're in my list of real talented authors I really admire, there with Vege-chan and Firecracker and a couple more, so please keep on updating until this story is complete.
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  • From chibivegeta on July 28, 2007


    hmn, looks like you did some editing on this one, *snerks* I hope my encouragement wasn't too harsh. I find I often come across as overly critical, though that is usually not my intent.

    I find Vegeta too be a tad out of character, but again, we're all guilty of that. I've used tickling in one of my fics too, and it actually led me, IRL, into the long-term relationship I have now. It's both aggressive and playful, and is often an excellent form of foreplay.

    Saw one typo/misspelling, which means that if there were others I was certainly engaged enough by the story to overlook them. Good work.


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  • From ANON - Susie Q on July 28, 2007
    I loved the bubble bath, although I'm surprised how quickly Goku came around (not that I'm complaining!!).


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  • From MiguelKaiLover on July 28, 2007
    nice. please update soon!
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  • From MiguelKaiLover on July 27, 2007
    nice. i like it. please update soon!
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  • From Beanies on July 26, 2007
    this story compelled me to actually make an account, just so i could review your wonderful story. i loved it! i can't wait for an update
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  • From chibivegeta on July 25, 2007


    after my little rant from earlier, how could I not review? *snerks*

    I can see how much work you've put into this, and how much time. There are some mistakes, mostly spelling, that are quite common and make me wonder if you have a beta reader. Many think a beta is there to praise the work, but truthfully, a good beta needs a critical eye, and must make suggestions and ask questions.

    your story concept is good, though it feels a little bit like you're in a hurry to describe and move on to the next scene. I do it all the time *snerks*. But going back over things, one can see to give insight into the characters, thought and reason behind actions and motivations. This fic lacks that a little, relax and take your time, enjoy your own work and others are bound to.

    "Vegeta’s voice shattered the silence like a fat woman’s voice shattered glass." This line made me lol, and I do love good dialogue. Your characterizations are fairly IC, though of course unless anyone but Toriyama is writing it, it is by definition OOC. Don't let that bother you, and don't let others tell you where to take things.

    For me, a fic writes itself, I am merely the typist for the muse in my head. She dictates where the story goes. Don't try to force it, and don't let the little details distract you, you can always come back and work on it more.

    I like it. *nodnods* I hope you are inspired to more soon.

    c_v


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  • From ANON - Lavinia on July 24, 2007
    ooh.. you had better to update and you had better to do it soon or I'll find you and make you type while I stand behind you with a whip in my hand! I can't wait for next chapter!
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