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Reviews for Beckoner of Your Heart

By : FMAlover81

From AmethystEyedKoneko on March 02, 2008
:) I am so glad the babies are home! I feel really bad that they've been turned into such odd little things with such advanced intelligence. It must be so painful for Roy and Ed to see their children modified like this. ;_; The childrens' sweet innocence and naivete is gone. It's rather disturbing to see one year old children talking the way these two are. They talk better than a lot of adults! :( Is that what Ed is working on in the basement? a way to undo what was done to the kids? It has to be killing him to see his children acting like this. Can the kids walk as well as they can talk? I guess they could since Nathan can snap his fingers so well and Rayne has quite a bit of control over her hands too. *sigh* What was Hakuro planning on gaining from messing these kids up like this? doomsday alchemists? alchemists so powerful they could annihilate whole cities with a single transmutation? ugh. I am SO glad Hakuro is dead!! I hope Ed succeeds in changing the kids back into normal children. :)

Can I ask you something? I've been wondering about this for quite a while now so I'm just gonna come right out and ask point blank. Why are you posting your chapters in such a crazy way? For example, today you posted chapter 8 but you also added a bunch to chapter 7. Why? Why didn't you post chapter 7 in its entirety when it was originally posted? Why are you making your readers go back and reread the previous chapter? People don't expect to or want to have to do that. It's very confusing when you go to read the new chapter but you have no idea what's going on because the new chapter picks up from new stuff added to a previous chapter and you didn't know you had to go back and reread the previous chapter because the author didn't tell you you needed to do that! There has to be more people than me who have been left confused by this oddity. Maybe someone else has already pointed this out to you and if so I hope they explained it better than I did. I was just wondering if I was the only one who didn't have a clue what was going on and why this was being done. I hope this hasn't cost you some of your readers! Maybe from now on if you would post chapters in their entirety when you do post them it won't bewilder your readers.
Thank you taking the time to listen to me rant! :D
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on February 14, 2008
O_O! Thank Heaven Ed is free and Hakuro is dead! :) He SO deserved that. He was freakin' crazy! I don't know what Ed was thinking going out in public like that, especially with his red coat on. Could he have made himself a bigger target? jeez. I'm anxious to see what's in the basement! Somebody's gotta find those babies! I'm really worried about them. Given how crazy Hakuro was, anything could have happened to them by now! ;_;
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on January 17, 2008
WOW! So glad you're back! So much is going on with the story now! What is Hakuro planning to do with Ed? Is he trying to figure out how Ed managed to have children? Is that why he keeps sending him to the lab? Why is Hakuro raping Ed? to get him pregnant again? to break his spirit? both? What is going to happen to the babies? Oh I hope Tucker won't turn them into chimeras! *cries* I hope Roy rescues them soon!!! :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on December 05, 2007
Aw how sweet! Ed had a boy and a girl! :D Roy and Ed are so adorable together! I hope you get a chance to write more soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From alleycat88 on December 05, 2007
Ay que cute! Fluffy fics are awesome! I'm glad you finally updated! This fic is really good! I love babies!
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From yaoigurl06 on October 21, 2007
DUDE!!! I sooooo kept forgeting to review! OMG! Im sorry! Anyways loved the update!!!
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From alleycat88 on October 18, 2007
Tell him Ed! I love Ed! He's so passionate! thanks for the update!
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on October 11, 2007
*grimaces* Well, it coulda been worse. Being stripped of his title isn't too bad all things considered. Ed's kinda lucky actually. Now he never has to worry about doing the military's (aka Hakuro's) bidding ever again! That's a very good thing! :) I did like that Ed punched out Hakuro! YAY! He had it coming anyway. :) I was impressed that Ed could move "with the grace of a cat" inspite of his pregnancy! Being with child obviously hasn't slowed him down any! :D Roy and Ed can raise their family in peace now. You are planning on at least mentioning the baby/babies some time soon aren't you? This is supposed to be an mpreg but the baby/babies has/have been unmentioned so far except for that one reference in chapter 2. just curious.
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Koneko =^.^=
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From yaoigurl06 on October 11, 2007
*grumbles* Ed should have been aloud to do more damage to that bastard!!!! But i do like the chapter...now you have to write chapter 5....*cracks whip* get to it!! lol jk jk
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on October 07, 2007
Hi! I just reread the whole thing (all 3 chapters of it! LOL!) and a few things caught my eye. 1 - Maes is already dead in chapter 1 but alive in chapter 3. How much time difference is there between Roy getting shot and Maes assuming command and Ed getting shot and leaving the battlefield? Roy seemed quite accepting of the ghostly Maes so he had to have known Maes was dead for some time. There can't have been too much time difference if Ed is still serving in the military inspite of being pregnant but not showing yet. Or maybe he's starting to so he had to get the hell out of there before it got really noticible. hmm. Hakuro would have a fit if he knew Ed was pregnant. I guess that's one more reason why Ed fled the way he did. 2 - Ed put himself and his children in incredible danger by almost bleeding to death to get home AND collapsing on the front porch when he got there! He could have miscarried them if he had fallen wrong! Not to mention bleeding so much he passed out! He even left the front lines without getting the bullet removed! What was he thinking?!? His wound could have gotten horribly infected putting himself and the babies at terrible risk! *heavy sigh* Gotta love him inspite of his faults I suppose! :) 3 - You said Ed was a teenager in chapter 1 but that he was 21 in chapter 3. ?O_o? You might wanna tweak chapter 1 a bit.
I can't think of anything else and am eager to read more so...
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Koneko =^.^=
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on October 06, 2007
Well that explains a few things! No wonder Ed ran from the battlefield like he did! With Roy home recuperating(?) from his injury and Ed being pregnant, it's easy to understand Ed's actions now. It wasn't legal but I'da probably done the same thing myself, consequences be damned! :) When Ed said, "I almost lost the father of our kids", does that mean he's carrying twins? *gets all excited for the little RoyEd babies!* :D I'm also pleased that Maes is here. I like him! Odd that Maes would be put in command of Roy's battalion like this since he's not a battle hardened soldier. *sigh* Hakuro musta just been being an ass to do something like this. It should be Hakuro's cowardly ass out there leading men into battle not Maes! grr! The old bastard's probably tickled pink Roy's been injured. jerk. Anyhoo, can't wait to read more!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From yaoigurl06 on October 05, 2007
DDDDUUUUDDDDEEEEE!!!! update REALLY fast PLEASE!!!!!
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From yaoigurl06 on October 02, 2007
O.O That was sooooo cute!!! OMG! You better not get a writers block again! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on September 30, 2007
There are two things about the story so far that are bothering me. 1 - Why isn't Roy out there involved in the fighting along with Ed? Roy is a high-ranking military officer and a state alchemist. He should be fighting this war just like Ed is. Why isn't Roy leading men into the fray like Ed is? Actually, since Roy is of higher rank than Ed and Ed's commanding officer, Roy should, in fact, be leading Ed and his men into battle. 2 - Why did you make Ed go AWOL? Ed wouldn't just arbitrarily leave like this. "I�m leaving the First Lieutenant in charge because I have to take leave." O_o? No, I'm sorry, but that's just not how it's done. There are procedures and protocols to be followed. Ed would have to request leave from his commanding officer before he could leave. You can't just up and go whenever you want - especially in the middle of a battle! Ed may hate the military but he takes his obligations seriously. Ed is going to get into a lot of trouble once it is discovered he abandoned his post and left his men to fend for themselves. His "one opportune moment to escape" may cost him greatly. hmm. Ed's one saving grace may be that since Roy is his commanding officer, Roy may be able to pull strings and save Ed from demotion and disgrace.

Roy and Ed are just wonderful together!! They are my OTP! ^_^ I'm really curious to know what was bothering Ed so much that he damn near bled to death dragging himself home from the front lines! The love of his cherished husband was a powerful motivator but there must be something else going on to make Ed do what he did.
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From yaoigurl06 on September 27, 2007
its alittle short but good. Roy and Ed are sooooo CUTE!!!! update soon!
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