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Reviews for Deceit

By : ZaKai
  • From moiramctaggart on April 17, 2009
    Wow. That's messed up. Really well done though.
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  • From ANON - Eva Jr. on August 29, 2008
    oooh, this was one seriously weird fic and I have to admit, I liked it.

    The twist at the end. Wow.

    It seems all your stories are good!
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  • From ANON - Liz on July 26, 2008
    This is pretty fucked up, right here. :3
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 23, 2008
    I felt like Mustang was the real Mustang, but Envy being Ed surprised me. At first I thought it was Envy, but he was a very capable actor so it really seemed like Ed.

    Anyway this is an AMAZING story. It messed with my mind and I love it for that
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  • From ElegantPaws on January 04, 2008
    That was astounding BLINK BLINK BLINK and scary as all get out! Exceptionally well done.

    EP
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  • From ANON - Ari on November 04, 2007
    Holy shit. Holy SHIT. HOLY FREAKING SHIT.

    This had to be the most disturbing thing I've ever fucking read. Dear god almighty, fucking HELL.

    That was definitely NOT expected. SHIT.

    You deserve some sort of award for this, and by THIS, I mean reducing me to utter babbling idiocy.
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  • From MasamuneBlade on November 01, 2007
    sooo fucked up! but then again, i really like it, especially the twist at the end. thank you so much for this. you're such a sweety.
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  • From ANON - Athena on November 01, 2007
    Loved the additions to the fic! It was even better than before because of them :D
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  • From animecrazd on November 01, 2007
    I read this and I'm not sure how I feel.
    You always do this to me with your fics I love them and yet I feel bad for it.
    anyway on to the things I liked.
    1)The fact that Mustang wasn't Envy. I did a dubble take on that totaly didn't see that and it hit home a lot more with the Deceit. I guess Mustang must have really lost it in the war.
    2)The fact that Huges was the one to come in again for the whole Deceit factor because Mustang(and I'm calling him this because he played a bad guy and Roy is more of the nice guy I like to think of.)was the one to really rape him,terrorize him, betray him and kill him leaving his last thoughts of life that his family was at the hands of a mad man.
    3)The fact Envy was Ed so the victum wasn't a victum so Huges got raped twice physically and mentally because is forced to have sex with someone he doesn't want to and that he thinks he is rapping someone he cares for.
    4)The fact that it almost seems now that Mustang was talking to Huges through the door that that he was going to gag him beat him and fuck and he was going to like it.
    In a way he did all of these to Huges he beat him by making him hurt someone he thought was someone he cared for and fucked him in more than one way but even though he didn't want to he did enjoy it and he gagged him by killing him. I know that that wasn't your intent with that but just little things keep me thinking about this.
    I liked this and I feel bad for it because it isn't a pretty picture but it was imagenitive and intelligent and way to short and so my mind keeps trying fill in the blanks how did a get to b and why. I can only imagen how Huges felt before he died.
    Thanks!
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  • From radcat on November 01, 2007
    Nice twist. Well written. Definitely a dark ride. Not for everybody. Poor Poor Maes. Bad Bad Roy. Was Roy just wanting to play deadly with Ed but using Envy or was it all just a set up for Maes? Good dark story for Halloween not so much for Christmas. Hope your friend liked the present.
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  • From yeagerbomb on November 01, 2007
    *shivers* i read this a few hours ago, but couldn't review. i just want to say it was creepy as hell. i would read it again, but i want to be able to sleep. i was so upset when ed died!! and then it wasn't even him?? i didn't really see that coming until mustang went to kill maes. this was just fucked up. great job. just... great fucking job. i really liked this, even though it freaked the shit out of me.~
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on October 31, 2007
    Damn girl! whew! That was one hell of a mind fuck! I thought for sure that that was Envy masquerading as Roy! Oh man. I liked to died to when Ed was killed (T_T) but then it turns out that that wasn't even Ed to begin with!! whew! I'm glad Ed's Ok but damn! When Roy said he'd do anything to become fuhrer he really did mean anything! whoa. Throwing his lot in with the homunculi to achieve his goal? *shakes head* damn. I never would have dreamed he'd go that far. I love how your twisted little mind works! (kidding!) Mmm. I need to go find something nice and fluffy to read to compensate for the hell you just put me thru! :D This was perfect for Halloween. :)
    Koneko =^.^=
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  • From squallstorm on October 31, 2007
    way scary and evil, man! I don't think I can sleep now tonight XS *quakes in boots...bites nails*

    kiki
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  • From alleycat88 on October 31, 2007
    I fucking knew it!!!! Roy that bastard! and Envy! I knew it! Awesome fic! Is this is a oneshot or will ther be more! I hope more!!
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