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Reviews for In Your Dreams

By : CrimsonTide

From ANON - Anon on September 09, 2008
mother flucker, okay i'm going to do my best to make this review coherent through the pain because i can't just noot review, your story is too awesome for that.

alright goku was really strange in this chapter, his behavior is totally irrational! though i ddo see where hes coming from, i mean he's been through a lot and he's afraid of being tracked down by villa again. its a bit odd that his fears are clouding his ability to think clearly because they are just his friends, he should recognize that! so this leads me to believe that perhaps theres something else going on here.

pan and bra sort of annoyed me in this chapter but idid feel sorry for pan when goku yelled at her like that, i think that was a bit uncalled for even if she was being a pest. poor goku, for him to react in such a way, he must be really suffering. too bad i can't give him a hug.

um, damn, what else was i going to say? well, if it comes back i'll leave it in a review later. i hope everything turns out good for these two even though we all know some stuff is going to happen. some really bad, angsty stuff. i don't like that you've hinted at complications in his pregnancy! bad news, BAD NEWS. *runs away, flailing arms

love always,

tabz.
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From Gelta on September 09, 2008
Poor Goku :( Well I for one think his paranoia perfectly justifyed. Remember when Villa came to catch him the second time? He said that a tracking chip had been placed inside of him and so far as iv read Goku has told no-one about this. Hes probably too scared to beacause to get it removed would mean having an O-P-E-R-A-T-I-O-N. But now hes scared that someone still knows were he is and that the chip is telling them that he is pregnant.

Or I could be compleitly wrong and the chip was somewere close under the skin and Bulma removed it. In any case the tension created in this chapter was masterful. Rock on.
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From saiyajinxyz on September 09, 2008
Wow, I feel sorry for Goku being pestered incessantly by Pan and Bra. He never gets a moments peace between them and his fears of being discovered and locked up in a lab. I hope Vegeta's idea works to help him overcome his lingering fear and sensitivity. I mean, it obviously can't be easy for Goku, not after realizing he had been pregnant once before and had spent years in a research facility. I hope your doctor is not like Dr. Villa. Well, looking forward to the next update.
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From ANON - quatreofdoom on September 09, 2008
Oops. I sent the review to the wrong story. *emo*

For THIS story, I meant to say:

On the one hand, Goku's behaviour seems totally irrational and stupid because his friends are obviously trying to help him. He wasn't betrayed by them, so there is seemingly no reason to distrust them. On the other hand, I can understand that he feels vulnerable and that experiences like the ones he went through can thoroughly damage a person's psyche. I only hope that Goku can get through this pregnancy without completely losing himself and distancing himself from the people who love him.
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From Chuquita on September 08, 2008
Pan and Bura's 'Goku pregnancy log' cracked me up. XD

Oh man, things are getting intense again; but I really enjoy the intensity in this fic (series?) now. Poor Goku's got a lot of medical issues to work through. I hope he doesn't need that C section.
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From ANON - quatreofdoom on September 08, 2008
I really enjoyed this chapter, even if I still don't trust Shinji. I guess Goten and I have a lot in common there. ;) I hope that Goten will be able to resolve some of his issues with Trunks soon!
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From oneswish on September 08, 2008
i look forward to every time u post a new chapter.. ur my monday.. i check back from noon till 10 pm. ur story is the best, totally new and different. and the emotion are portrade perfectly, everyones mood. i've read and re-read ur story sometimes just because im soo impatient.

keep it going. i cant wait till next monday!!
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From Simoko on September 06, 2008
I used to really enjoy this story alot. I loved the plot of it all in the beginning and the angst, but now... I feel like you are just trying to drag it out. I thought this story was about Goku and the evil doctor/whatever he was considered, and vegeta trying to get the saiyan to overcome his fear of people and touch and stuff... and that's it. Not this other stuff. I'm sorry. I've lost my interest in this story completely.

--Android22
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From saiyajinxyz on September 02, 2008
Hmmm...I wonder if Vegeta is hinting at something when he tells Goku that he'll need more than a few cookies to replenish his energy. Okay, so my mind is in the gutter. Anyway, this was a terrific chapter. It makes me want to kill Dr. Villa myself for being so...evil. Vegeta is right, though. I think Goku would be in much worse shape if he would have realized he was capable of conceiving a child and that he had actually become pregnant before this current incident. I hope things work out for the Saiyan duo as they prepare for the child. Looking forward to the next update.
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From Chuquita on September 02, 2008
Whoa! Wasn't expecting THAT at all. O_O (About Goku conceiving before). Surprises are good plotline-wise though; and that makes sense. :3
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From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2008
Narahgarahna!!!

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Yeah I don't know what that means either. But Gah what the hell? Poor Goku! He lost a baby and he just found out?? That would make everything ten times worse. I feel so sad for him, I'm sure that i felt a few prickling tears when he said he'd just realized what those morning sicknesses were. *wipes away tears frantically* I'm not crying...over a story...I'm not...

Vegeta is being very supportive :D I thought he'd be a little more...demanding. "What the hell do you mean pregnant? Look I don't care what those crazy lunatics did to you, you're still keeping this baby!" Lol but then that would make him a selfish bastard and I'd have to kill him with a spoon.

Poor Goku had to get all that blood taken, I hate that! >.> When I had large amounts of blood taken, they gave me this nasty orange soda crap cept it was ten times sweeter than soda, so it was gross rather than good. Bubbly and warm too BRAK. Cookies and orange juice would have been heaven.

Also, I hope you don't mind but I just have to point this out. I've seen the same mistakes a few times but now I gotta say something: commas go after dialogue when followed by direct speech.

Example:

"I don't know," he said.

I noticed you used periods, and that's not grammatically correct. Also, I'm pretty sure "its'" is not a word. I do believe you're looking for the plain old simple "its" which is used for when something belongs to something. "Its fur is very shiny."

Ahhh, there I got that off my chest. I'm a grammar freak, I'll admit it. I used to beta for people and my eyes always immediately zip towards the mistakes, big or small. Red warning lights always go off in my head and it really distracts from the story Lol!

Anyway, awesome chapter. I so look forward to this story all the time. I was thinking about it when sleeping earlier. I was like, it's monday, it's monday, I hope she updates soon.

AHAHAHA.

Aheam

Love always,

Tabz
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From DarkSerapha on September 01, 2008
hm, a pregnancy.. mpreg seems to be the big trend these days ^^ I just hope this one's not going to be quiet as dark as Mortifer Lascivio's - I'm not sure I could handle two such intense angst-ladden stories at once!
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From Chuquita on August 27, 2008
"The prince huffed and looked insulted as he folded his arms over his chest. �Kakarotto practically raped me. I had no choice but to cooperate or risk a mauling.�"

Oh Vegeta, you smooth operator. XD

Poor panicked Goku; this isn't going to be easy for him at all; I can only imagine what'll happen once his belly starts to show. O_O

Really enjoying the fic; can't wait for more. :3

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From ANON - Lacrymosa-angel on August 26, 2008
WOW 2 chapter in two days?!!? You ROCK!!!
This chapter was pure awesomeness!! As for that lemon *_* LOVED it. lol I actually read it twice XP. And YAY Goku's finnaly pregies!! gotta love 'im ^_^
�_� i wonder how a pregnant Goku behaves...:D well i can't wait to find out!!
XX Keep up the awesomeness XX
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From DarkSerapha on August 26, 2008
*laughs* between you and Mortifer I need never have to worry about getting my daily angst-shot.
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