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Reviews for Out of Sight, Out of Mind

By : Asper
  • From Zofo on July 09, 2008
    Hehe Goku's obsessed with the underwire contraption :)

    Feeling sorry for 17, not able to feel and not being in control. He couldn't even tell 18 what really happened. Must be horrible trapped in your body like that. Wonder if 18 will be affected by the Hive Mind.

    Ah, I wondered what that scent was that Vegeta kept smelling around the boys. Looks like things are going to get tricky come full moon. Will they be able to keep them apart? I'm wondering if Goku has already caught the virus too.

    Blimey Dende's a bit forward isn't he. I guess he's pent up from waiting so long. I thought Gohan was going to refuse him but he got lost in the moment. Dende will be heart-broken when Gohan finally tells him unless he can make Gohan fall in love with him.

    Loved all the scenes about the satellites and technology. Yes, in this day and age we would be lost without it. Ripe pickings for a conqueror. However, Android 10 doesn't seem as bad as I first thought. He seems not to like what his father has planned. Interesting turn of events.
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  • From emudii on July 09, 2008
    In true Dragonball fashion, everything snowballs in the eleventh hour, from every direction, and collide in the center with a giganormous explosion. I am on the edge of my seat, waiting for it. D:
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  • From Zofo on July 05, 2008
    Loved the conversation about the underwear between Goku and Vegeta, so funny and very in character.

    What's wrong with Goten and Trunks, nice lemon with Gotenks by the way, seems like some sort of fusion virus. I wonder if Goku and Vegeta will get it then, that can't be good if Goku is weakened by Chichi being ill :(

    Feeling a bit sorry for Dende as he's head over heels for Gohan, and I'm worried Gohan is using him to get at Picollo.

    So the army is unleashed. They don't seem very strong but there are a heck of a lot of them, which in the Saiyans weakened states could be a problem. Also interested to find out what Android 10 will do when he learns about Cell.
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  • From emudii on July 04, 2008
    This keeps getting better and better! And you update so quickly! It makes the daily fic search a little more exciting, knowing that a story like this one is on the frequent hit list. ;)

    I don't usually like OCs, but Juu-gou (Android 10) has depth; it's always nice to have an antagonist that isn't /precisely/ a villain--and besides, absolute good versus absolute evil is boring. Also: curious and curiouser about that virus and what it might have to do with Fusion. The suspense is killing me and the more you leave me to speculate, the scarier my theories get. XD;

    ETC, ETC... running a little short on time, but I just had to throw that out there, while I was thinking on it. I tend to forget and this story is just too awesome to go without feedback. ♥ (And on that note, thanks for your review on "Kisses." I do have some longer fics in revision. I've just been a little distracted, recently. XD;)
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  • From MaterTenebrarum on June 28, 2008
    Can't wait for the next chapter with Dende X Gohan.
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  • From Dragon7 on June 28, 2008
    Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.

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  • From princelouis on June 28, 2008
    SQUEE! i was right. piccolo and gohan, sittin in a tree...
    and vegeta...poor guy, he's gonna burst a blood vessel.
    nice halucination. nothing better than loving yourself! lol
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  • From ANON - CrimsonTide on June 27, 2008
    *squeals with laughter* OH, the conversation between Vegeta and Goku was priceless!! Poor Goku! He just didn't have a clue ^.^
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  • From ANON - Foxxy Jones on June 27, 2008
    Still captivated! Amazing chapter even better than the first; I love the triangle involving Piccolo, Gohan and Dende. Not a lot of authors use Dende so I am glad that he comes into play. I feel sorry for Gohan because Piccolo seem to have made up his mind...or did he? The Gotenks sex scene was epic and I am looking forward to more great smut in the next chapter. Thanks for the update!
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  • From ANON - Chichicken on June 27, 2008
    Very interesting first chapter,I am looking forward reading more :3 you write well !!!
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  • From ANON - Susie Q on June 25, 2008
    I'm hooked. I liked the underwire as a "secret weapon".
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  • From Zofo on June 25, 2008
    Wonderful start. So many threads to follow.

    Android 17 releasing Android 10, will 17 be ok as he seemed drained?
    Dende lusting after Gohan, now in with a chance as he and Videl have separated. But as Piccolo was trying to put him off, will he make a play for Gohan instead?
    Chichi getting old and possibly ill. Goku not really coming to terms with that and only thinking about the underwire contraption to aid him in battle :-) I can't wait until that conversation with Vegeta!
    Poor Trunks and Goten having to hide their love from the others. Did I sense Trunks was more concerned about others finding out than Goten?

    Really looking forward to the next chapter.

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  • From princelouis on June 25, 2008
    OMG this looks so promising!!!
    please update soon!
    poor goku, and even tho i hate chichi, that sucks for her...
    why can't trunks and goten be together? parents?
    what does goku want to ask vegeta about?
    who is android 10?
    and PICCOLO is JEALOUS! HA!
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  • From Dragon7 on June 24, 2008
    Love it! It's very interesting and mysterious. Look forward to more of this story. :)


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  • From ANON - Foxxy Jones on June 24, 2008
    Fantastic! Your writing style and imagery has easily won over sensations. I COMPEL you to make another chapter to this story which I think will be a success. Please UPDATE as soon as possible please!
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