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Reviews for Eye of the Tiger

By : DarkSerapha
  • From kuramasgirl on March 04, 2010
    actually the japanese word "koi" has a few meanings.
    Japanese English
    koi carp
    koi request
    koi love, tender passion
    koi ancient ways, the feelings of the ancients
    koi intention, purpose, bad faith
    koi thick, dense, strong
    also how would u know if japanese ppl use the word koibito or not? its a great story though. ill have to check out the sequel.
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  • From Zofo on August 21, 2008
    What a gloriously long lemon. Don't know why you didn't like it as I thought it was great.

    I too prefer a seme Vegeta, but don't mind reading him as uke (as long as it's with Goku) and you made it very believable. Was very touching in the end as well when their minds and souls merged.

    Hope you post the sequel and it is about Vegeta's revenge on Shenron? *sniggers at the possibilities*
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 21, 2008
    Hey! That was a damn good lemon if I do say so myself. I'm no expert on them but I can tell when I read a good lemon. I don't even LIKE lemons that much but you had me reading yours all the way through. Great job. As for Vegeta being uke, well it's strange but I see it happening once in awhile. It wouldn't be fair if Goku was ALWAYS on the bottom ;) And it was hot *fans self*

    Excellent work, I enjoyed reading this.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 21, 2008
    Oooh good chapter. Plenty of great detail and now I'm wondering what's going to happen next so I'm gonna cut this review short and rush to the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 21, 2008
    I thought I'd read your story and return the favor since you reviewed mine! *giggles* This first chapter was pretty funny. You're right, Shenlong was pretty out of character but in the most hilarious way possible. Vegeta's questions were pretty funny because I kinda wondered that too. Imagine making the great eternal dragon do something as stupid as tying himself in a knot or something of the sort. Though that wish can't be as stupid as Oolongs "underwear" wish in Dragonball. *falls over laughing at the memory*

    As for the odd way the dragon was acting when Vegeta made his wishes...well that's making me a bit nervous. I wonder what the giant lizard is up to. *rubs chin*

    And I almost feel sorry for Goku, judging by the way Vegeta is acting. Oh it should be good! Well, I'm off to read chapter two!
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  • From ANON - Julesie on August 19, 2008
    Very nice story. I was listening to eye of the tiger whilst reading this too. I looked an amv up of vegeta and goku to go with it while i read xP
    I love how you made Goku the tiger and Vegeta the panther and even though you are shocked you wrote Vegeta as uke I'm really glad you did, as this was a great story and I'm not a fan of seme Vegeta and wouldn't have looked for it if my friend hadn't linked me ^^
    So great story overall and great job on the descriptions ^_^
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  • From Robyn on August 17, 2008
    O.o That was the first lemon you wrote? Daaaaaamn! Any way, yes, a bit over the top, but fun to read all the same! :D I am glad you decided to post this story on AFF - other wise I may not have every seen it - or enjoyed reading it. Lovely! Thank you!
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  • From Zofo on August 14, 2008
    Oh this is getting good!

    Like how you portray Goku, more intelligent than he lets on, but for a reason, and how he purposely tried not to think of Vegeta that way as he wasn't as skilled in masking his thoughts from Vegeta.

    Sniggered at Shenron, never taunt a dragon, let that be a lesson to you Vegeta. Though some of Vegeta's suggestions for wishes would have been fun to see :)

    I love what you've turned them into, especially Vegeta, some how that really suits him. How will he fare now that Goku once again has the upper hand though.

    Can't wait for more!
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  • From Robyn on August 14, 2008
    OOOOOOOoooo! Big cats! :D I think I do like Shenron's tastes.
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  • From Tyrana on August 11, 2008
    Very nicely-wrapped chapter; I liked how you settled things.

    -First showing Vegeta's fascination for Goku through a -by the way, very good- fighting scene. I enjoyed greatly the fact that he acknowledges not only that he feels drawn to the other Saiyan because of his looks. I think is natural after how well they know each other and all the things they have gone through together that there are deeper feelings than a mere physical attraction.
    I find more believable, Vegeta being the one ogling after Goku and not the other way around. Albeit he's no longer that teenager that didn't even know what marriage is, I firmly believe that even this more mature Goku keeps on being quite clueless about those kind of things.

    -Then, the way you told about their current status, for some reason is very well integrated in the story and doesn't seem forced or unnatural, unlike most of the stories with this thing of GokuxCichi and VegetaxBulma not being a loving couple anymore. I was thinking though whether would be realistic or not, Goku leaving for good without any big excuse as another threat for the planet (like in the show); and I got to the conclusion that sooner or later he would admit to himself the precariousness of their marriage and would cut all the ties even if that meant to hurt Chichi. He's not meant to be in such kind of relationship. I think if Chichi would have treated him like an equal Goku wouldn't have fled all those times in the series. Chichi's dramatical change from that intrepid woman who defied him in the martial arts tournament to that bickering housewife and suffocating mother she became after their marriage had to be very impacting and, I suspect, scary for poor Goku ^.^
    (My view about VegetaxBulma relationship differs greatly, though; but since it's a very personal opinion I have no qualms whatsoever about your particular take on it ;D )

    -Finally, I liked how finely you started to knot the plot with Vegeta summoning the dragon (That banter was priceless. It seems that arrogant bastard here doesn’t know how to get his big mouth shut or to keep himself out of trouble XD )

    "Goku's reading" part was priceless too. I also think he isn't dumb. But more than a premeditated thing, just not to scare his friends I think that the guy only gets focused , thus becoming a master, when something really catches his interest. He has the wits, simply chooses when to use them. Like for instance, that episode when he was learning how to drive a car. He was really clumsy, my guess about it: He really wasn't paying attention, not in a conscious way, because he wasn't interested; who could think possible that someone capable to learn and master much more difficult things and techniques would be just a dumb brainless? The proof came later, when those kids in the bus were in danger and he all of a sudden was an the bomb at the wheel (it's just a question of concentration, not of lack of intelligence, I think) Now I will stop of digressing (Sorry there, when it's about Goku I could go on forever ^^; )

    Finally, about your English, not being either a native myself, all I can say is pretty good, better than mine for sure.


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  • From Chouninatte on August 11, 2008
    LOL, the dragon really amused me - I wonder what it's done with their tails...

    I also like the explanations about Bulma and Chichi, and also Goku reading.

    There are only a couple of things about Vegeta that were a little OOC (like using "gotcha" or calling out "oyasumi nasai" a little happily.

    I'm looking forward to reading more, definitely. Must find out how Goku reacts. XDD
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  • From Robyn on August 10, 2008
    OMG...Did Shenlong give Vegeta a pink tail? GAH! There is more to this, right?
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  • From topbear1974 on August 10, 2008
    Awww.. I read this story long time ago this brought old memory back. I always think Vegeta is so obssessed in winning kaka for a reason. The sex scene was really hot. Mind you I was study that style trying to put in the scene of continuous story in the In-lar' anth. It was good written and fun, the style I love most. I am glad you decide to come back to fandom. :-)
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