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Reviews for The Broken Road

By : Tru6768

From VixenzxMasqueradex on September 08, 2009
Whoops. . . took a long time for me to get around to reviewing. I'm sorry!!! I have to say about this chapter is that I love how Trunks is growing up and finding that he doesn't need to have his hand held by Goten and Gohan all the time. At first you really had me wanting to slap Gohan and I was waiting and waiting to see what you had up your slieve!! The antisapation is growing!!!! OMG I can't wait for the next installment. I do have to point out that I am just a tiny bit bumbed out that you didn't write us the conversation between Gohan and Vegeta. Only a bit bumbed cause you had me right back on the ball with that cliff hanger and that intense scene in the elevator!! Gohan is such a bad lier!!!! Keep up the damn good work!!!!!!!
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From glasseyeviolet on September 03, 2009
I really really really want Gohan and Trunks to be back together. However as the story states, its going to be a while before they get back together. Still loving the story sweets, keep at it!
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From Lunamaru on August 30, 2009
Wow, I just want to say that I feel sooo sorry for Gohan. He's just like his dad in that he'd do anything for everyone else, even throw away his own happiness! *sheds a tear* I'd really like to see a scene between Gohan and Goku, because it just seems like Gohan would go comfort him too after all is said and done. And Goku feels to me like the only one who could relate to Gohan in the self-sacrificing way in your story. XD Woooh, and Trunks! You could just see him developing throughout the story and I feel proud of him! He's grown so much in this story that it makes me all giddy thinking of it! He and Gohan are cute together, and I just love how you characterize Gohan the most though. *is totally a Gohan fan XD* Sorry I haven't reviewed before (I've been following this for awhile now XD) but I'm kind of lazy XD. Thank you thank you thank you for the story! Truhan=Cute beyond reason. But poor Goten, got all messed up, then the cute brotherly moment...Awwwww... XD ~Lunamaru
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From ANON - Camui on August 26, 2009
I DIDN'T FORGET YOU I PROMISE.
PROMISSSSEEEEE.
*clings to, cuddles, strokes possessively*
My... prrrrecious...
.......
*cough*

So uh. yay! More development. Still waiting for that sex. Or maybe you already gave it to me and I don't remember? I have a horrible memory, yes I do, too much whiskey methinks.

D'awww. Gohan.
You know, the way you portray his and Trunks' relationship is exactly how I am with my gf.
WEEIRDDD.
(and I'm not sure if it's a good or bad thing...?)

Lol. Uhh so yeah. Waiting? Yes. Always. Mhm.
Always waiting.
Always ready.
*speaks enigmatically, takes a sip of whiskey*
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From ANON - Shikaru on August 23, 2009
So far, my favorite character in this story is Vegeta. Gohan is refusing to admit that he is being an idiot. Goten needs to start owning up to his sayajin heritage or his issues are just going to skyrocket, damn it. And Trunks seriosuly needs to have a visit with Mirai Trunks. In fact, I just wish that you would send him to the future to spend some long and nice quality time with Mirai Trunks...in a kind of "find yourself" way. Then, Gohan needs to follow them, and have loads of crazy monkey sex with Mirai Trunks...er, sorry. That last bit was to my own personal flavor.
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From TheAngryBuddha on August 21, 2009
My name should now be changed to "The Angrier Buddha". Gohan's so-called selfless act right there? Irritating to the 10th! Gah!

I love the intense interaction between Gohan and Trunks. Clearly there are some unresolved matters between the two. I think Gohan's decision to distance himself from Trunks is somewhat of an act of cowardice. He tries to give the impression that it is for Goten's sake, but I believe that his true motivation is fear. Gohan needs to man up and acknowledge his feelings once and for all. He also owes Trunks some boinking for his pigheadedness :p. Trunks is trying to meet him halfway; it would behoove him to do the same, dammit!

Once again, good chapter and I eagerly await the next :).
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From Robyn on August 16, 2009
You've built up great suspence with saying Gohan has a plan, but not revealing it. :P

Now I guess I'll have to wait to see what that plan is. *grumps*

Great chapter by the way!
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From marccram on August 16, 2009
You are such a liar. You can live without your ankles and that's all I ever threatened.

You know what you can't live without? A heart (though that's debatable as you seem to have managed). You ripped mine out with the line "There is no us". But you know that. You relish it. You're a cruel monster. And I just can't get enough. What is going to happen in that lab??? I've gotta know.

Trunks and Gohan *are* going to make up, right? RIGHT?? Argh. Cliffhangers! Hate!

This schizophrenic review brought to you by I Sold My Soul To The Devil Anonymous. ISMSTTDA: We're here.
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From ANON - m. on August 14, 2009
i really really hope gohan and trunks get together in the end. i'll be heartbroken if it ends up as goten and trunks. gohan and trunks just work together sooo well. they compliment each other perfectly.

you are one of the best authors i have seen. :) really. i feel like i understand your characters and the thoughts that go into their actions. this is one of the best stories i have read also. i check this website everyday in hopes that you have updated again. my heart soared when i saw that there was a new chapter.

just wanted you to know that you're excellent, and this story is excellent.
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From ANON - Cynergy on August 13, 2009
Yay! Kim's back :D I really hope she appears more in this story because she's so cool.
I thought her reaction to Trunks being a saiyan was really nonchalant though lol.
Gosh I really do think Trunks needs to get away from the drama even more now that Gohan doesn't want him back :(
I was thinking of an island to! Ibiza to be exact :D and he should take Kim so they can have heaps of Island fun together haha :P
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From VixenzxMasqueradex on July 17, 2009
OKAY I THROW IN THE WHITE TOWEL!!! I try to imagine how you would handle things; a calm and sweet morning after for the two lovebirds and you give me the mother of all drama!! I think you are going to carry that through to the next chapter BUT NOOOOO you give me calm, cool and collected. At first I was like, damn I want more fireworks, but oh no, I spoke too soon. WAY INTENSE!!!! I love how you have gotten the whole usual Vegta and Goku father roles reverced!! Most people put Vegeta emotionaly distant and only thinking about fighting, but he can relate to his son and give him the words he needs to hear most when he's been abdonened by the two people he held clostest to his heart. Yet Goku, usually understanding and loving, IS CLUELESS!!! I wanted to smack him and cheered when Goten finally got it through his dad's thick skull that he's been outcasted by training and fighting. But it fit so perfectly into the scenes you've taken from the show so its believeable and not completely OCC! I'm floored and I GIVE UP! YOU WIN! NO MORE TRYING TO THINK OF A BETTER PLOT!
I want Goten and Trunks back together they are my favorite pair ever. And you know the old saying "It takes a good friend to have a good fight." Well, it takes 'life-long lovers' and one brillant minded you to give us such an amazing story!!

PS please forgive all typos and rambling. . . I've been up for 2 days stright cramming for a test ;) But I couldnt go to sleep before surrendering.
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From catgirl26 on July 12, 2009
You weave a most ensnaring web, my dear. This is my first foray into Gohan/Trunks, and thus far it's been a rewarding experience. I am utterly enthralled. Also, you've written everyone so convincingly and so truthfully that I can't decide how I want this to end. I'm pretty sure I'm rooting for Gohan and Trunks to end up together though. I like the way they compliment each other, with Gohan pulling Trunks into a more adult world, and Trunks leading Gohan into letting loose a little. I feel like Gohan will be crushed if it turns out the other way, but that he'll be the good boy, put on a smile and be happy for his brother. I really don't want that to happen. This story is amazing. I really can't wait for it to be updated.
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From catgirl26 on July 12, 2009
So, chapter 12, eh? May I say holy shit? That was amazing. Everything about it was perfect. I need to go take a cold shower now.
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From ANON - Camui on July 12, 2009
Lol whaddafuuuuuuck. You made me tear up with the whole 'father son' thing with Trunks and Vegeta. D'awwwwww.

As for Goku... figures he would respond like that. #_#

Annnnnd Gohan... oh Gohan. Fufufufuu.

Yanno, I kinda feel retarded right now. Vegeta explained that Trunks loves Goten in this time because somehow Mirai loving Gohan was like... interdimensionally (ohgod I don't even know if that's a word or if I spelled it right FUCK YOU FIREFOX I WILL NOT FIX MY TYPOS) linked and it all connects together... e_e; It makes sense to me. :O Even though how I just explained it makes no sense, it makes sense. To me. Yes. That's what matters. That stuff makes sense to the reader. Mmmhmmm.

Now. Uhhh. I can't think or type properly cuz my a/c is currently freezing my bedroom. :'D

UHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHM. %___% Hm. I had something else witty and redundant to say... but oh well. I kinda wanna turn on an iron and run it all over my body. That's how cold I am right now.

Or maybe you can have a HOT STEAMY LOVE SCENE SOMETIME SOON, THAT OUGHTA WARM ME UP NICE AND GOOD LIKE.
8D

Yaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrr.
♥
Camui
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From TheAngryBuddha on July 12, 2009
This is definitely what I call an emotionally-charged chapter. While not action-oriented as the previous chapter, Chapter 14 is a gem because there are so many things that have been revealed and thrusted into the spotlight. I liked the way in which you revealed the depth of Trunks's vulnerability as a result of his breakup with Goten. The flashbacks helped to highlight those vulnerabilites. I also liked the way you juxtaposed Vegeta's soft side with Goku's insensitve side. It is always refreshing to see a not-so-perfect Goku.

Poor Gohan seems so conflicted with his feelings. I hope he decides to unlock those feelings in the box and just go for it :).

Once again, another great chapter, but I really didn't expect otherwise! Can't wait for the next chapter :).
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