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Reviews for The Broken Road

By : Tru6768

From glasseyeviolet on June 06, 2009
What a great father and son moment with Vegeta and Trunks.
Oh dear, I hope things go well with Gohan.
Story gets better and better ^^ I hope
you update soon ^-^
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From ANON - avril27 on June 06, 2009
This is a great story! I really feel bad for Trunks he is finally moving on with his life and a horny Goten comes back looking a one off and a ego stork. I hope Gohan and Trunks work out.They are really good together. They seem to want to be better people for one other and for their past relationships to work out. I hope to read more soon.
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From DemonBlood on June 03, 2009
I think chapter 13 was a stroke of pure brilliance! I love how real Goten�s emotions come across. He came over to extend some kind of olive branch, or maybe to try and identify any hope of rekindling the relationship, but got a nasty shock instead. As indicated in previous chapters, it�s obvious that while still feeling valid in his reasoning for parting ways, he absolutely regrets doing so. I was very impressed by the way you handled his character in that type of situation. Love is irrational, and it didn�t matter to him that he no longer had a claim on Trunks or that he himself is currently in a relationship. As soon as it became apparent that his brother was his replacement, all bets were off. I find Trunks�s reactions to the events a little strange. I�m surprised he didn�t defend himself more; he seemed very passive and let the situation escalate unnecessarily. I�m pretty sure you will elaborate on this further in the next chapter. From Vegeta�s last comments, I�m assuming Trunks�s actions were portrayed this way deliberately. I feel really sorry for Gohan (aside from being my favorite character) he really got the raw end of the deal. Hopefully Trunks will step up to the plate and prove he is serious in his affections for Gohan.
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From inuyoukaigirl1984 on June 03, 2009
I love it so much I want to cry. I haven't read a good DBZ story in a LOOOOOOOOOONG time and I'm glad I chose this one to get back into it. It's so sad, though. I feel sorry for the friendship lost between Goten and Trunks, but I loved the development between Gohan and Trunks. They are both so hott. But now that everything is just wrong for Trunks....I want to cry. And the reluctant and subtle tenderness from Vegeta...Wonderful. You portray everyone perfectly. I have no complaints. I can't wait to read more!! You have a faithful friend in me!
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From ANON - Jocelyn on June 03, 2009
Fantastic chapter! OMG. It kills me how much Goten's immaturity is ruining things for Gohan and Trunks AHHHH!! I feel for Trunks and Goten, both of course. But still--kills me.

To be honest, I'm surprised this all happened. From what I could tell in previous chapters, Goten and Trunks had progressed to wanting to re-establish a non-romantic friendship. But I guess Goten's suppressed feeling came back viciously, eh?

I really enjoyed the moment between Trunks and Vegeta as well. It was tender, yet dry at the same time, as it only could be with Vegeta. I really want Trunks to come clean with Vegeta so we can see more of that father/son interaction.

And Gohan... *tear*

I always have a soft spot for Gohan in stories because he seems like such teddy bear, yet at the same time he's mature and strong as well. Goten can have that tender quality as well, but it's often paired with naivete, which is not always as endearing to me as Gohan's persona is.

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From TheAngryBuddha on June 02, 2009
Oh, dear. Chapter 13 is one of the most intense chapters thus far. You are evil for adding that conflict, though :p. At the same time, conflicts make for interesting reading. After all, no growing relationship is without obstacles. How Gohan and Trunks overcome their particular obstacle remains to be seen :).

Goten is quite the bastard, I must say. He managed to kill that tiny part of me that was somewhat rooting for a GotenxTrunks reunion. Now, I'm 100% behind Gohan and Trunks and hope that they are able to patch things up.

It's going to be painful waiting for the next chapter. Yes, I am that hooked XD.
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From Camui on June 02, 2009
Wow, there was so much angst in this chapter even -I- started to slit my wrists! *bleeds a river of bloooooooodododododoooddd*
xD

Anyway. I wonder what happened to Gohan? Where the heck did he go? Maybe he went to Piccolo for some reconnaissance. ... If that word even applies. Anyway. He went to the green man to get some green dick to make himself feel better. :D ... Or not. *dodgey eyes*

My feet are falling asleep. Because I'm straddling my laptop. I'm attempting to hump it into submission, therefore somehow humping you into submission, so that you can post these chapters up faster. *hump hump hump* Fasterrrrrrrrr. Work that beautiful sexy mind of yours.

...
*HUUUUUMMMMMMMMP!!*
♥
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From dashofdaniel on June 02, 2009
I have to say, Goten is a rotten bastard. Sure, he is pretty oblivious like his father, but even Goku knows how to pick up on emotions. I mean, Trunks was pretty bad himself, but he actually put effort into improving himself after Goten refused to return his love. I think that proves deep down that Trunks is a good guy. But Goten, he is willing to betray someone who loves him and do what his obsessive compulsive mother wants him to do, which is to fuck a bimbo and pump out some babies, you know, continue the pattern that produced her and her ancestors. I mean, from what I can see, that bitch doesn't even love anyone in her family, she's only doing it for money and basic biological instinct. I can understand why Goku doesn't like hanging around her, I wouldn't want to either. It was pretty obvious from the start that Trunks craved the love of another, and that was Goten, the only person he could relate to that didn't want him for his money or fame. Trunks willingly gave his love, Goten took it for Trunks being "emotional" and had learned to play it for what it was worth. I think that proves that Goten is, if not evil, then cold and heartless. It's a wonder that Trunks stayed with him for as long as he did, but then, childhood experiences tend to shape who we are when we grow up, hence his strong attachment to Goten. At any rate, I would very much like to see this saga continue, if only to see the relationship between Trunks and Gohan strengthen. It would be nice also to see Goten "grow up" as it were, and try and repair the damage he caused, not only in his friendship with Trunks, but also in the damage he caused to Trunks' and Gohan's budding relationship. You could of course drag this even deeper into the darkness before resolving the drama, however I don't think taking the route of Goten and Trunks getting back together would be wise (despite what others might think, sex-addled minds aside). It would be completely unrealistic for Trunks to take Goten back, not after something so heartbreaking. I doubt it would happen even if you were to beat his head into a brick wall for a few hours. I mean, as it stands, it'll be difficult enough for anything to continue between Trunks and Gohan, and the chances of renewed friendship, let alone violence-free interaction between Goten and Trunks, are pretty slim. Overall, a great story, great drama, romance (and the lack of it), plus lots of potential avenues to take in the future (plus a few unrealistic, audience-destroying ones).
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From Robyn on June 02, 2009
*grins* The confrontation was everything I was expecting it to be, and a bit more, but not over the top with whining. Excellently written!

Poor Gohan *smuggles him away from the story* Trunks and Goten may have an outlet, but what happened to Gohan? Where'd he IT to?

Goku's scooting away from Vegeta made me laugh. Clown indeed!
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From MoonFace on June 02, 2009
Bahaha I suppose Gohan needed to get laid lmfao it probably has been a while for him ;)
OMG I cried halfway through this chapter :'( ugh I officially hate Goten more than I did from the previous chapters.I can't help but feel like he makes everything about himself instead of thinking of others feelings and the whole fight against Trunks was a little childish in my opinion XP but I suppose Saiyans don't do the whole "talking it out" thing do they? lol all in all it was a great chapter.

Cynergy
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From ANON - Mata on June 02, 2009
Aww..the ending of the fight between Trunks and Goten was quite sad. So much drama! I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter..hopefully everything will turn out better for Trunks.
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From quatreofdoom on June 01, 2009
OH MAN, IT'S A THROW DOWN! I have been waiting for this chapter since you started this whole story, and you did not disappoint! I loved that entire chapter, from start to bloody finish. I can hardly wait to see where Goten and Trunks go from here. Stay vanished, Gohan. You're only getting in the way of their sweet, twisted love.
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From ANON - Moon on May 14, 2009
Was that.... ...a whole chapter of hot detailed slashy sex? Wow! Some people write a sex scene and it's the same old same old, and the reader can just skip it cause it's nothing special or new. This however, was the stuff of greatness. I am very happy now. Not only because I have been looking forward to these two "getting it on", but because you took your time getting there. This scene felt very natural and it is exactly how I imagined it would be. I hope that neither guy starts to have second thoughts in the morning because this looks like the beginning of something beautiful. I really like Gohan; he has always been my favorite character, so I can't tell you enough how I absolutely adore how you portray his thought process. I really have a smile on my face and not just because I'm a little perv who enjoys reading slash, but also because I am so delighted to read another chapter of your wonderful work. I have not been reading DBZ fiction lately, and now I am remembering just how much I love the characters, especially that Gohan. Thank you once again for sharing your talent with us readers!�� Authors like you help us fans truley enjoy the series after it is over by opening up the characters and making them even more human.
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From LadyWolf on May 11, 2009
HOLY SHIT....ABOUT TIME!!! I swear to all that is holy if Gohan would have stopped this by spewing some lame shit like, "I'm to old for you," or "I'm to old for you," hell that was the only argument he had...I would have REACHED into this fic..(I know it's impossible but hell I would have been pissed!) and grabbed him and BITCH SMACKED him, screaming into his face...." ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME!!! YOU'RE KILLING ME SMALLS!!!!!

**calms down*** *takes a deep breath*

I truly think this will be good for our little prince, but you know like always, shit WILL hit the fan...enter Goten....fucking coward....

Hmmm, I wonder am I being too hard on Goten????

NAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!! Probably not!

:oP

Post soon!!!!
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From Robyn on May 09, 2009
*Droooooooooooooooooooooooools* Um...yum? I'm glad there was this little lemon of a break before they wake up tomorrow morning and their real world resumes. O.o I just wonder what you have in store for them now?
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